Hey Everyone. I just wanted to let you all know that I'm putting Hunter into reserves or whatever the Navy has for an indeterminate amount of time. Was fun writing with you, but with the time I do get on the VE, I plan on using that for more Kairo writing. I'll still see you on IRC.
 
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NazgulSquadron
Senior Chief Petty Officer Hunter

FM/SCPO Hunter/Nazgul 6/Pheonix Wing/mSSD Atrus/DEF/VEN/VE (=*A*=) (=*SA*=) (VC:B)

Know your enemy and know yourself, and you will be victorious in ten thousand battles.
You may forget the past, but it always has a way of haunting your future.
Men can die, but a symbol is eternal.

Hey guys. I've been following the story and I must say, things are going well and I'm quite interested in the whole story line. But one thing I have been noticed is the way you portray other characters in your own post. When someone has another character do something or say something that is totally contradictory to the personality of their character, it gets slightly confusing and it tends to not flow well. It's very important to learn the personality traits of those around you so you can produce a good story that won't confuse it's readers. Now, a suggestion of mine is to go ahead and read the bios of the other squad members and pay close attention to any dialogue in people's posts. This way you can learn more about each other's characters so you can further improve the quality of your writing.

You guys are doing excellent and the story and reading your posts makes me want to join up with Nazgul again. Keep up the good work.

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TECH/CPO Tokijin/Phoenix Wing/Str Doashim/1FL/VEN/VE (=*A*=) (=*SA*=) [BWC] [VC:B]

No comment.

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[-=Nazgul Squadron=-]

[-=Phoenix Wing=-]

FM/SCRW Delia "Evil Clown" Cael/Nazgul 3-2/Phoenix Wing/mSSD Atrus/1VENF/VEN/VE/(=*A*=)[SoA]

"So tell the judge I'm ready for the vases.
I'll dance in their faces when the guitar sounds.
Won't be long, I won't be gone.
Been leaning towards the shadows all along.

Go for it.


 
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[-=Nazgul Squadron=-]

[-=Phoenix Wing=-]

FM/SCRW Delia "Evil Clown" Cael/Nazgul 3-2/Phoenix Wing/mSSD Atrus/1VENF/VEN/VE/(=*A*=)[SoA]

"So tell the judge I'm ready for the vases.
I'll dance in their faces when the guitar sounds.
Won't be long, I won't be gone.
Been leaning towards the shadows all along.

Welcome to Nazgul.  I'm going to assume you'll be in my flight (since they abandoned me), which would make me your flight leader...if Trevor decides that how it's going to work.
 
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All that is necessary for the triumph of evil is that good men to do nothing. --Edmund Burke
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FL/CWO Darius Pursius/Nazgul 2-1/mSSD Atrus/Defensive Fleet/VEN/VE (=A=) (=*SA*=) [VC:B] [*CB*] [GWC]

Mmmmm... food will get you far with me....
 
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~ Sol Larith

So what exactly am I supposed to be doing now?
 
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~ Sol Larith

Sol, you caught them in the middle of the story. I'm pretty sure you might just have to wait until they can write you in at some point.
 
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TECH/CPO Tokijin/Phoenix Wing/Str Doashim/1FL/VEN/VE (=*A*=) (=*SA*=) [BWC] [VC:B]

Gear up, bud. I'll write you in either tonight or tomorrow night (I'm busy tonight but I'll do my best to fit in a post.). I doubt you'll mess things up, I'll just find someone to kill off and send you up...or...I dunno, I'll think of something. You could give it a shot if you wanted, maybe be a recruit assigned to Nazgul (just like normal) and be in the cantina on Abrae or something, then get called out to give us a hand earlier then planned. Maybe you were to be assigned at the end of the mission but get called in early, or you run into Darius or something.

Anyways, next week I start training for the Alberta Skills competition (i think) so I'll more likely just be overseeing the story with posts on Fridays. Luckily I'm only going to be 'gone' for 2 weeks. Not to bad.

Keep up the good work.

EDIT: Actually, my post is going to be held back until I get an answer or two.

Question one - How come the techs were killed, and which ones were killed? The ones who were supposed to be disabling the fighters? If so, how come the scientists who were overseeing the test weren't killed to, and how did these techs managed to get killed in broad daylight under the supervision of a small army of scientists and possibly a quartet of pilots (depend son when they were killed).

Question two - Are Jen and Azpeth (I believe that's who Nazgul 4 was) dead?

Question three - If so, who gave the order to kill them off? It's sort of an unwritten rule that player characters aren't to be killed off unless an order is given. Clown, I know you didn't know this, but you also can't be sure that those two people didn't plan to return and had let me know in private of a leave or temporary absence. If you didn't kill them off and I misunderstood the post, I'm sorry for misunderstanding, it just wasn't clear to me.

Question four - Since when does my character scream out when a pilot is killed? Trevor isn't much of an outward person during flight. He might be terribly pissed about losing a pilot, but screaming would be beyond him. He'd more just grit his teeth and put the anger to use, flying a tiny bit more erraticaly than normal.

Question five - Since when is one of the 'senior' pilots in the Navy going to have the crap being kicked out of his fighter. Yes, we're up against people at about the skill level of the senior Nazgul pilots, in more advanced craft, but they don't just make people SC's because they've been around a long time. Some piloting skill is involved, and I'm pretty sure I'd be putting up a decent fight rather then getting an inch away from becoming debris myself. You're still new, but part of that new-ness is having to sit back a minute and make sure things are as close as possible to being spot on when representing someone elses character.

You're new, I'm not mad, just a little annoyed. You do quite well keeping up the reporting, and I'm glad for that. It's just your writing could use a bit of work when it comes to certain areas. I notice that Delia has 44% shields, but somehow the second most experianced combat pilot in Nazgul (and the majority of the active navy, Darius has more 'experiance' than myself in combat situations) is getting his fighter torn to bits. I dunno about you, but it doesn't nessicarily seem completely logical. Yes, we're against good opponents who are concentrating on our better pilots. Yes, this does mean that they won't try as hard for the weaker pilots, yet. That doesn't mean that our good pilots are going to get totally walked all over and raped by our opponents. Am I being clear?

Yeah, it seems rude of me to act like this, and it probably seems like I'm being an ass. I admit, I'm focusing right now on trying to straighten things out in the story rather than focusing on being a complete sweetheart. If you can give me good answers for the questions I have, then that's fine and I won't ask you to change anything/much. If not, I'll ask you to change some things. I'll also offer you any help you need though, most days I can be found on IRC from 6pm-8pm EST and then again from 10pm-11:45pm EST. I'm not to difficult to get ahold of.

Thank you for looking through that, I'd appreciate answers before you go and change your post though.

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SC/WO2/Trevor Evenson/Nazgul 1(1-1)/Wing 1/mSSD Atrus/DEF/VEN/VE/(=*A*=)(=*SA*=)[VC:B][LSM][BRC][SWC][GWC]

The VEN`s #1 writer as of ESC `06

Clearly Canadian!

"Question one - How come the techs were killed, and which ones were killed? The ones who were supposed to be disabling the fighters?"

No, the ones who went out for beer and chips.

What do you think?
 

"If so, how come the scientists who were overseeing the test weren't killed to, and how did these techs managed to get killed in broad daylight under the supervision of a small army of scientists and possibly a quartet of pilots (depend son when they were killed)"

Gee, I didn't know Nazgul pilots could frickin' bi-locate, Vast Imperial scientists neither.

How the hell are Darius and company supposed to be in the armory and on the field watching the techs?

How are the scientists supposed to be in the control room and on the field at the same time?!

Gee, I'm just so clueless, even if I'd been a fan since before you were a bad idea in your daddy's head.



"Question two - Are Jen and Azpeth (I believe that's who Nazgul 4 was) dead?"

No.

"Question three - If so, who gave the order to kill them off? It's sort of an unwritten rule that player characters aren't to be killed off unless an order is given. Clown, I know you didn't know this, but you also can't be sure that those two people didn't plan to return and had let me know in private of a leave or temporary absence. If you didn't kill them off and I misunderstood the post, I'm sorry for misunderstanding, it just wasn't clear to me."

That happens a lot to you, don't it?

"Question four - Since when does my character scream out when a pilot is killed? Trevor isn't much of an outward person during flight. He might be terribly pissed about losing a pilot, but screaming would be beyond him. He'd more just grit his teeth and put the anger to use, flying a tiny bit more erraticaly than normal."

Well, if you'd frickin' post more than once or twice, I'd know that, wouldn't I?

Oh, I forgot, your little teenage life is consuming all your time, same with the other teenies and twenty-somethings who'd rather spend their time here playing vid games and posting on other parts of the ComNet, I'm soooo frickin' sorry.


"Question five - Since when is one of the 'senior' pilots in the Navy going to have the crap being kicked out of his fighter. Yes, we're up against people at about the skill level of the senior Nazgul pilots, in more advanced craft, but they don't just make people SC's because they've been around a long time."

They don't?! Gee, In every RW military I've seen, it's all politics and a matter of who's fluffing whom.

"Some piloting skill is involved, and I'm pretty sure I'd be putting up a decent fight rather then getting an inch away from becoming debris myself. You're still new, but part of that new-ness is having to sit back a minute and make sure things are as close as possible to being spot on when representing someone elses character."

Gee, I thought you were putting up a decent fight.

"You're new, I'm not mad, just a little annoyed. You do quite well keeping up the reporting, and I'm glad for that. It's just your writing could use a bit of work when it comes to certain areas."

Well, I am mad. I do most of the posting on the story, and I get this?!

I'm a damn sight better in that department than you, that's for damn skippy.

"I notice that Delia has 44% shields, but somehow the second most experianced combat pilot in Nazgul (and the majority of the active navy, Darius has more 'experiance' than myself in combat situations) is getting his fighter torn to bits."

And, if you actually read(not a lost art amongst you Canadians I'm sure), you'd see she's taken some damage as well, more as the story develops(and, considering whose callsign is on most of the posts in the story....)

"I dunno about you, but it doesn't nessicarily seem completely logical. Yes, we're against good opponents who are concentrating on our better pilots. Yes, this does mean that they won't try as hard for the weaker pilots, yet. That doesn't mean that our good pilots are going to get totally walked all over and raped by our opponents. Am I being clear?"

And, I suppose it doesn't mean the Red Baron is going to get taken by some unknown Canuck fighter pilot either?

Again, if you don't post, don't complain.

Am I being clear?!

"Yeah, it seems rude of me to act like this, and it probably seems like I'm being an ass."

You are being an ass, and playing favorites too. I mean Raigen went off on his own little tangent in the last story, and how many posts did you spend bitching about him in the Nazgul ComNet?!

What's that?! Zero?

What I thought, little boy.

"I admit, I'm focusing right now on trying to straighten things out in the story rather than focusing on being a complete sweetheart."

If you had been posting regularly in the first place(and there's no excuse why not), if you'd been even pretending to do your pretend job and getting after your people from the beginning and not almost a month after the story is up and running, then you wouldn't have to worry about straightening things out.

"If you can give me good answers for the questions I have, then that's fine and I won't ask you to change anything/much. If not, I'll ask you to change some things."

I have good answers, and I ain't changing a damn thing.

Deal with it, or don't.



"I'll also offer you any help you need though, most days I can be found on IRC from 6pm-8pm EST and then again from 10pm-11:45pm EST. I'm not to difficult to get ahold of."

The day I need help from a snot-nosed brat who couldn't write a frickin' porn novel is the day worms will eat my corpse.

This post brought to you by the Founding Fathers, the makers of the First Amendment.

In the real world.

But, you Canucks wouldn't know anything about that either, would you?

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[-=Nazgul Squadron=-]

[-=Phoenix Wing=-]

FM/SCRW Delia "Evil Clown" Cael/Nazgul 3-2/Phoenix Wing/mSSD Atrus/1VENF/VEN/VE/(=*A*=)[SoA]

"So tell the judge I'm ready for the vases.
I'll dance in their faces when the guitar sounds.
Won't be long, I won't be gone.
Been leaning towards the shadows all along.

Clown, if you have a problem with someone personally take it to a private message.  This is not the place to fight your personal battles.

Also, nationality has nothing to do with this so drop it.

That's all.

(Ps. Clown, give us a little credit for knowing some basic political, historical, and cultural information about other countries.)

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WADJ, SPAC/1LT Corran "Arturus" Hargraves/SCR Doashim/VE/VEN/(=A=)(=SA=)(=*MA*=)(=JCPA=)(=SCPA=)[LoM][MC:1](x2)[SV][BRC][VC:B][CBV][LSM][LoC][BWC][SWC][GWC]


"The way of war is a way of deception. When able, feign inability; when deploying troops, appear not to be. When near, appear far; when far, appear near. Lure with bait; strike with chaos. If the enemy is full, be prepared. If strong, avoid him. If he is angry, disconcert him. If he is weak, stir him to pride. If he is relaxed, harry him; if his men are harmonious, split them. Attack where he is unprepared; appear where you are unexpected. This is victory in warfare; it cannot be divulged in advance. Victory belongs to the side that scores most in the temple calculations before battle. Most spells victory; least spells defeat; none, surer defeat. I see it in this way, and the outcome is apparent." -- Sun Tzu

"Ultimate excellence lies not in winning every battle but in defeating the enemy without ever fighting." -- Sun Tzu

Clearly Canadian!

The eyes of the rang... *cough* Shazam are upon you...
 
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~ Sol Larith
FM/SCRW Sol/Nazgul 6/Phoenix Wing/mSSD Atrus/OFF/VEN/VE (=*A*=)

This has been fun, but unless Evil Clown posts her apology to Trevor Evenson as well as the rest of the VEN, I think that'll be among the last things she's ever said here.  If she chooses to whimper a death cry- so be it.

Sorry to everyone who was expecting a show.  And sorry to those who were lashed out at- there's little I can do to make up for it except impose the most balanced punishment.  Good day to you all.
 
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*Flash Was Here...*

WC|TO/CMD Shazam/Phoenix 1-1/Phoenix Wing/mSSD Atrus/1VENF/VEN (=A=) (=*SA*=) (=MA=) (=*FOCE*=) [CBV*] [LoM] [LSM] [MC2] [VC:S] [SV*] [DSM] {Platinum Writing Medal}

Phoenix Wing Commander and Training Officer

....meep....I've got lots of stuff going on but I'll try to gt some stuff fone.
 
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[Red Dragon Order]
[-=Ace Wing=-]
[-=Raptor Squadron=-]
WC/SMar Raigen DarkBlayde Tei-Yehn/Alpha Flight/Raptor Squadron/Ace Wing/KBcC Helsa/Guardian Fleet/Navy/RDA(O)

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[Red Dragon Order]
[-=Ace Wing=-]
[-=Raptor Squadron=-]
WC/SMar Raigen DarkBlayde Tei-Yehn/Alpha Flight/Raptor Squadron/Ace Wing/KBcC Helsa/Guardian Fleet/Navy/RDA(O)