Cosmic
ComNet Marshal
[VE-ARMY] Major General
[VE-DJO] Krath Prophet(ess)
[VE-VEEC] Chief Editor
Post Number: 4476
Total Posts: 7772
Joined: Sep 2000
Status: Offline
|
RE: Drill Squad
|
|
March 6, 2006
10:05:19 PM
|
|
Very good bio.
Interest way you view your parents. You can edit your bio, you don't have to, its up to you, but it'd be interesting to see why, exactly, he is the hateful/doomsday person he is. Where he got the attitude.
You'll be placed in a squad shortly. -----------------------
Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
CoT/MG Cosmic/HCA-3/SL/Drill Squad/Tadath/VEA/VE
[OPE][OTH][OPA][EW1][CDS][IH][GS][LM][SoS][CRoM][CoH][PoC][MSM][SCP][SoA][IOC]
-----------------------
Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
SL/KPR Cosmic/Lion 1-1/Lopen/VEDJ/VE
[VP][WoS2][KC1][SoY][EoP][OAK]
----------------------- |
Kidon
ComNet n00b
[VE-ARMY] Private
Post Number: 6
Total Posts: 7
Joined: Mar 2006
Status: Offline
|
RE: Drill Squad
|
|
March 8, 2006
2:13:32 PM
|
|
Bio
Native Language: Basic, though also speaks another two dozen or so fluently, and knows a smattering of several dozen more.
Hair Color: Brown
Eye Color: Hazel, shifting between brown and green
Skin Color: Slightly tanned
Height: 5'11"
Weight: 176
Age: 19
Full Name: Kidon Xedeque
Physical Build: A bit on the skinny side, though on the whole very unassuming. Kidon is the kind of person that tends to blend in with everyone else, not noticeable in any way.
Homeworld: Coruscant
Talents/Skills
1. Linguistics: Kidon is a skilled linguist, who can pick up languages faster then most droids can be programmed with them.
2. Slicing: While he is no hardcore slicer, Kidon knows a great deal about computer systems and can break through most civillian and low security systems.
3. Knives: In his previous line of work, the marks could at times get a bit violent, so he cultivated his skills in knife-fighting in case he needed a bit of force to back up his words.
Previous History
Kidon is a gambler and rouge, skilled at both Sabacc and Pazaak, or at least skilled enough to get by. Despite being born the first son of a wealthy Coruscantian shipping baron, or perhaps because of it, he's never been up to any good. When he was ten, Kidon managed to get his Imperial History tutor arrested on charges of prostitution. (Professor Danten was later exonerated after holos showing that he had in fact been visiting his elderly mother at the time that he had supposedly slept with the local Imperial mayor were released.) This feat went down in the history books of the Yutub Academy for the Gifted, at least until he turned fourteen and sliced into the class president's New Year's address, showing her topless and sitting on the school principal's desk.
Sadly, his below-average graded path to taking over from his father as the CEO of Xedeque Shipping was cut short when he brought a small hold-out pistol into school to show off to his friends with. They were very impressed in the few seconds before he shot himself in the foot. His accuracy has not improved much with age.
After his expulsion from the Academy, Kidon bounced around from place to place, taking credits from people that were far too dim-witted to deserve them. He has at times been thought to be a salesman, pilot, security guard, actor, writer, and even a Priest of Nal-Sha. He did very well in the role of con-man, relishing the challenge and raking in the credits, but it was not to last. Kidon broke two of the cardinal rules of gambling, never place a bet when you are spiced, and if you absolutely have to place a bet while spiced, never do so with a representative of Black Sun. The swoop racer that he had bet on, Tammis Wroot by name, crashed and burned, and Kidon had a swarm of thugs coming after him, demanding either payment or a few deciliters of his blood.
The recruiting Sergeant for the Vast Empire did not so much as bat an eye when Kidon staggered up to the desk, his lips smashed open and one eye swollen shut, merely pushed the datapad over so that Kidon could finish the enlistment process, though the angry trandoshan that began yelling when Kidon went by him for a medical exam seemed to annoy him a bit.
Kidon's last thought as he boarded the shuttle bound for his training was, "Well, at least it'll be harder for them to get me if I have an army of human shields around me".
[This message has been edited by
Kidon
(edited March 8, 2006
2:29:24 PM)]
[This message has been edited by
Kidon
(edited March 20, 2006
9:51:47 PM)]
|
Darr-Rann
ComNet Member
[VE-ARMY] Corporal
[VE-VEEC] Reporter
Post Number: 461
Total Posts: 1587
Joined: May 2005
Status: Offline
|
RE: Drill Squad
|
|
March 8, 2006
3:44:42 PM
|
|
Nice bio Kidon, but I recommend you dumb down your computer skills a bit - Slicer is a speciality in the army that you have to write multiple stories in order to pass. -----------------------
Raiders
SL/CPL Darr-Rann/3SQD/1PLT/1COM/1RGT/1BAT/VEA/VE/Tadath [LoR][CoR]
|FL/PO2_Demonic/Kaph 5/PheonixWing/mSSD Atrus/DEF/VEN/VE| (=*A*=)
CORPORAL
SENIOR CREWMAN
one of few - A vast Empire medic
Read Losses of Vandetta by me and Hellra
Flashmaker |
Bryan Walter
ComNet n00b
[VE-ARMY] Private
Post Number: 2
Total Posts: 4
Joined: Mar 2006
Status: Offline
|
RE: Drill Squad
|
|
March 13, 2006
7:24:34 PM
|
|
Physical Appearance
Native Language: Trandoshans Basic
Eye Color: Mud Brown
Scale Color: Dark Brown Mixed with A Deep Green
Height: 2 meters
Weight: 230 lbs
Age: 28
Full Name: Bryan Bossk Walter
Physical Build: Muscular and Strong built hands
Home world: Dosha or as you Humans call it
Talents/Skills
1) Hunting and Stalking at the age of 15 he was able to kill his first
Full Grown Wookie
2) Able to See in Infrared red and has an amazing sense of smell
3) Able to regenerate lost limbs after a battle
Background History
Bryan is often consider one of the most skilled of the Trandoshan and his promise was first shown when Bryan first hatched his parents were surprised at how fast he took to learning and how quickly he began to show his skill as a hunter. When the Empire first came to his Homeworld of Dosha Bryan was amazed at the power they possess and how they were able to kill their prey at long range while Bryan had to kill his prey with his quick three fringed jab to the throat. Bryan's parents were on the committee of Elders at the Small village they lived at; and when the Empire came they were quick to promises an alliance with them and offer to help them capture Wookies and use them as slaves. When the first hunting party was sent to the Planet of Kashyyyk Bryan was the first one out the door and ready to collect his first Wookie Pelt. The party speared out and they began the hunt into the Shadowland looking for Wookies. When they came across the first Wookie Bryan was graced with the honor of the first kill, and as soon as the Wookie fell in the battle in the Shadowland Bryan realized that was what he wanted to do. When they returned to Dosha Bryan was graced with a hero's welcome and was permitted to leave the planet. Never having left the protection of his clan Bryan was shocked and amazed at how much hate there was in the Universe. Bryan began his search of jobs and became a very successfully bounty hunter, but on the last mission Bryan had failed to kill his target and lost a arm in the process. With his new arm regenerating Bryan realized that he couldn't stay in the businesses of killing and began searching out the Empire remembering the honor they had brought him. Thus bring Bryan here today were he is begin his training in the Drill Infantry.
-----------------------
Life is But a game |
Kidon
ComNet n00b
[VE-ARMY] Private
Post Number: 7
Total Posts: 7
Joined: Mar 2006
Status: Offline
|
RE: Drill Squad
|
|
March 21, 2006
9:07:05 AM
|
|
You might want to work on that bio a bit more, amigo. Your sentences are mostly run-ons, waaaay too long, you misused proper nouns vs. common nouns, and you misused a few words. Example: speared instead of spread. Proofread it, and then add a bit more detail to it, and it'll read much better. |
Caim
ComNet n00b
[VE-ARMY] Private
Post Number: 5
Total Posts: 6
Joined: Mar 2006
Status: Offline
|
RE: Drill Squad
|
|
March 26, 2006
4:47:35 PM
|
|
Name: Drake Branson
Callsign: Caim
Age: 17
Hair color: Black
Eye color: Silver
Skin color: White, but slightly tanned
Height: 5'9''
Weight: 168 pounds
Blood type: O+
Physical build: Average, but with a focus on upper body strength
Scars/Tattoo's: Has a scar on his right cheek that he recieved from fighting his older brother Aiden
Homeworld: Corellia
Native language: Galactic basic
Talents/Abilities:
1) Has extensive training in Corellian kickboxing, and was a community champion at one time
2) Is adapt with all things mechanical, and can fix nearly anything
History:
Drake was born to a middle class family on Corellia. He is the youngest of three, and was pampered as a child. His mother and older brother took care of him since his father was gone most of the time. His mother worked several odd jobs in the community, and his father was a stormtrooper during the Galactic Civil War. As he was growing older he formed a bond with his older brother Aiden. When Aiden left to go to Kaut the two brothers got into a huge fight. During the fight Aiden took a vibroblade to his younger brother in a fit of rage. He slashed at Drake, and cut him down the right cheek. The scar has never faded, and reminds Drake of his brother's well hidden fury. When Drake was sixteen he left his homeworld of Corellia to take a job as a cargo hauler on Nar Shaddaa. He worked there for a year, but during that year he ran into trouble with a crime boss by the name of Jakee Scotred. As he ran from the men that were out to kill him he came upon an Imperial Recruiting Station. Remembering that his older brother was a sergeant in the Empire, he quickly entered. The next thing he knew he was on a craft heading for Tadath. The real reason for his joining the Empire was the pride that he felt from his father and older brother. He wanted to keep with family tradition, and serve to fight for peace. |
Jacen Ren
ComNet n00b
[VE-ARMY] Private
Post Number: 8
Total Posts: 21
Joined: Mar 2006
Status: Offline
|
RE: Drill Squad
|
|
March 30, 2006
4:14:38 PM
|
|
Native Language: Basic
Hair Color: Black
Eye Color: Brown
Skin Color: Lightly tanned
Height: 5'8
Weight: 148 lbs.
Age: 18
Full Name: Jacen Ren
Physical Build: Slightly muscular, slim body type
Homeworld: Tatooine
Talents/Skills
1) Well trained with a blaster rifle, can kill an enemy with only one shot if available.
2) Can understand the foreign languages of jawas and tusken raiders.
Background History
Born in a peasant family on the harsh climates of Tatooine, young Jacen Ren was a curious little boy. He loved to explore the desert and was often taken on a bantha to explore farther into the desert with his father. When Jacen became 8, he wanted to be a moisture farmer, just like his father. His father taught him many tactics and additionally taught him survival tips if he ever got a family of his own.
One day, when young Jacen was 12, he was out exploring an abandoned shack 31 miles south of Mos Espa. He went inside to search for supplies when he was ambushed by a tusken raider hunting party ( 8 in it ). Jacen pull out his blaster pistol, but a tusken hit it out of his hand with its club. Jacen, unarmed, was backing up slowly. While looking around for an escape route, Jacen saw a tusken pull out a rifle and aim it at him. Jacen closed his eyes and quietly waited...but nothing happened.
When he opened his eyes, he saw a pack of jawas attacking the tuskens. Jacen quickly picked up his blaster pistol and shot 2 tuskens straight into the hearts. He saw a tusken pick up a carved hunting knife and try to plundge it into a jawa. Jacen shot the tusken straight in the forehead, instantly killing it. The other jawas took care of the remaining tusken party. After all tuskens were killed, the largest jawa in the group came near Jacen and hugged him. Jacen had read about jawas and their shyness, jawas dont like humans alot. This jawa was an interesting fellow, so Jacen hugged back and told the jawa to follow him. A few hours later, the jawas were inside the Ren's moisture farm and were eating a delecious meal cooked by Jacens mother.
The jawas were the last of a clan called the Renegades. A squad of troops from the Rebel alliance were on thier trail because of a reason untold. Jacens father agreed to protect them for a while.
3 years later, the Renegades and Jacen had a great friendship. Jacen taught them many skills and the jawas taught Jacen some hunting tips and their native language. They even taught him the tuskens language. He could understand it.On a windy day, 15 year old Jacen went far from home to search for husky bantha. When he returned home, he was shocked by the sight he was seeing.The Ren moisture farm was burned to the ground, all crops were destroyed, there were Jawa bodies scattered..Poor Jacen even saw his moher and father, they were killed execution style, a shot to the head for each. Jacen, with tears in his eyes, swore revenge to the rebels ( Although he never knew that Sand Troopers were the real cause, they attacked the farm when Jacens father refused to hand over the jawas ). He would kill them all, if it was the last thing he would do.
Jacen, now in a deep deppresion, headed to Mos Espa and sat on a barrel of spices near a shop, slowly weeping in agony. This was when he saw a squad of Sand Troopers marching into an Imperial Shuttle. He wiped his tears away and went to a small stand with a trooper that was handing out flyers. Jacen had read that the Imperials were against the Rebellion, so he grabbed a partially ripped flyer and went back to the barrel. He sat on it and started reading : The Empire is now recruiting troopers with proper skills! Jacen read a small print at the bottom that said : Must be over the age of 17 to be recruited. Jacen now knew what he would do, this would allow him the vengeance of his family and the Renegades.
3 YEARS LATER....Jacen had quit his job as a starship mechanic and was now heading to the Imperial embassy ( newly created in Mos Espa ). He went to the front desk and an imperial officer handed him a recruitment form. Jacen filled it in and gave it back to the Imperial Officer. ''O.K. Mr. Ren, we will contact you in 24 standard hours if you are recruited. Have a nice day'' The officer handed Jacen a pin that said I LOVE THE EMPIRE.
In 24 hours, Jacen received a transmission from a General Cosmic, welcoming him into the Empire as a private. Jacen jumped for joy and went to the Imperial shuttle that was heading to the Imperial Training academy. While Jacen read his info sheets, he found out he was in the Storm Trooper Corps. He looked out the shuttles window while in space and watched Tatooine fading away. He quietly whispered to himself ''I will keep my promise, I will avenge my family and the Renegades...the rebels will fear the name Jacen Ren, they will pay for their treachery...they will pay...''
[This message has been edited by
Jacen Ren
(edited March 30, 2006
5:00:27 PM)]
|
Cosmic
ComNet Marshal
[VE-ARMY] Major General
[VE-DJO] Krath Prophet(ess)
[VE-VEEC] Chief Editor
Post Number: 4507
Total Posts: 7772
Joined: Sep 2000
Status: Offline
|
RE: Drill Squad
|
|
April 10, 2006
3:58:11 PM
|
|
Kidon: The story is good, but I'm not too sure on your languistic skills. Your character is fluent in 24 languages? I find that slightly hard to believe. I don't believe it's even been heard of before to have someone with that much languistic skill behind them. There have been cases when savants have translated various statements into 20 or so languages, but other than that - it's somewhat hard to believe. You may need to re-evaluate that aspect. Other than that, you will be placed in a squad as soon as possible.
Bryan: Interesting bio. I would like to see a bit more history behind your character - what he's like, why he is who he is, etc. Perhaps a bit more detail and elaboration, but it's good. There are currently no squad openings at the moment, but I am working on getting you into one.
Jacen: I've read yours, and have already replied on your other topic. -----------------------
Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
CoT/MG Cosmic/HCA-3/SL/Drill Squad/Tadath/VEA/VE
[OPE][OTH][OPA][EW1][CDS][IH][GS][LM][SoS][CRoM][CoH][PoC][MSM][SCP][SoA][IOC]
-----------------------
Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
SL/KPR Cosmic/Lion 1-1/Lopen/VEDJ/VE
[VP][WoS2][KC1][SoY][EoP][OAK]
----------------------- |
Evani
ComNet Veteran
[VE-ARMY] Sergeant
[VE-DJO] Initiate
[VE-VEEC] Gaming Reporter
Post Number: 1143
Total Posts: 3141
Joined: May 2005
Status: Offline
|
RE: Drill Squad
|
|
April 11, 2006
1:24:06 AM
|
|
cos, the roster needs to be
cleaned. There is alot of open
slots. Jester is the squad who
needs recruits most urgently -----------------------
DarkDragoons
SL/SGT Evani/2SQD/2PLT/1CMP/1REG/1BAT/Tadath/VEA[LoR][ES2C][CoR]
TRN/IN Evani/Training 1-1/Lopen/VEDJ/VE
|
Sorica Bayle
ComNet n00b
[VE-ARMY] Private
Post Number: 2
Total Posts: 6
Joined: Apr 2006
Status: Offline
|
RE: Drill Squad
|
|
April 11, 2006
2:38:04 AM
|
|
NAME: Sorica Bayle
CALL SIGN: Sorica Bayle
RACE: Human
AGE: 22
HAIR: Black
SKIN: Pale Brown (Not much sun where I come from, but a life-time working reactor cores have given me a nice, even tan)
HEIGHT: 6'5"
WEIGHT: 180 lbs. (approx.)
EYES: Green
SKILLS: Is exceptionally good with heavy machinery (vehicles, ships, extra heavy weapons, etc), a life time of building vehicles gives him knowledge of their inner workings, as well as their usage. Not good with computers, and doesn't have much experience with weaponry (built the damn things, never much used them...vehicles are another story), but is extremely strong from a lifetime of hard labor. Has superior Hand-to-Hand ability (frequent brawler) and Balmorra's harsh environmental extremes and polluted environment have made him adept at dealing with hostile environments and temperature extremes. As he was forced to gravitate between extreme heat and extreme cold daily, he was very ill at a young age, giving him heightened resistance to disease years later.
PERSONALITY: Sorica possesses a factory worker mentality: he's willing to do any job, no matter how dirty or unpopular, to facilitate the group as a whole. This temperament makes him uniquely suited towards a career as a stormtrooper, in that the individual is viewed only as a cog in a larger machine. Personality-wise, Sorica is very good-humored, though he doesn't often waste his words. He is awkward in social situations, yet at the same time comes off as somewhat world-weary and cynical. He doesn't see anything "bad" about being a stormtrooper, odd especially given Balmorra's feelings on the subject. The Empire had massive corruption, and kept order with an iron fist. The Old Republic had massive corruption and barely kept order at all. He maintains such practical views in almost any situation, and his pragmatic form of thinking allows him to come to quick decisions.
HISTORY: His reasons for joining the Empire are economical by nature: he hated his home, he needed an income, and a life-time in a toxic hell-world makes the prospects of incoming enemy fire all the less intimidating. Sorica Bayle is, essentially, nobody from nowhere, which is just how he likes it. However, recent developments on his homeworld have definitely qualified it as a "somewhere" and much to Sorica's chargrin people are paying a little extra attention to the recruit from Balmorra. Before the Emporer's death Balmorra was a factory-world, where imperial arms, starships, and vehicles were mass produced on an awe-inspiring scale, to where the sky was choked with toxins. The extensive environmental damage to Balmorra caused a significant rise in temperature due to greenhouse gases in the environment, and solar radiation was a constant hazard in the inhabitants daily lives. Sorica's lot was far worse than the average Balmorran as well, as it was his duty to maintain to the sub-zero fusion reactors. Day in and day out, from one temperature extreme to the next, Sorica was frequently ill.
No siblings, and his mother died during childbirth, and the father crippled when he was seven. Since then, Sorica began to work at a very early age, from mechanical maitenance to assembly lines. His hatred of his homeworld originated in part from his feelings with his father. Despite the fact that they worked in factories, the Bayle family still viewed themselves as craftsmen, and in Sorica's mind it was the negligence of the factory foremen and surveyors that caused his father to lose both his arm, his livelihood, and his self-respect. He supported his father from an early age, until the old man's untimely death...which, in certain circles in Balmorra, claim was suicide. Whatever the cause, young Bayle decided he had enough, and left as soon as he could. Shortly during basic training, his homeworld of Balmorra rebelled against the Empire after the Emporer's demise. The drill sergeants formed an unpleasant association between Sorica and his rebellious homeworld, and as such dragged him through hell and back during basic training. Even now, his career might just be over before it begins, as now, more than ever in these trying times, Imperial Officers are on the watch for anything potentially seditious. |
PhillipG
ComNet n00b
[VE-ARMY] Private
Post Number: 2
Total Posts: 3
Joined: Apr 2006
Status: Offline
|
RE: Drill Squad - Bio
|
|
April 14, 2006
9:51:36 AM
|
|
heres my bio
Native Language: Basic but know others
Hair color: Brown
Eye Color: Blood Red
Skin Color: White
Native Language: Basic
Height: 7'6
Wight: 400 Lbs
Age: not sure been around since the great sith war
Full Name: Phillip Gryder
Physical Build: Very built strong enough to fight a Rancor (full grown) with my bare hands
Home World: Korriban
Talent/Skills:
I have mastered many skills over my life
(1) I learned how to manipulate the mind.
(2) Mastered most sword fighting styles
(3) Learned to shoot a rifle or blaster with excellent skill and aim
(4) I have mastered many force techniques
Here is a list of them
(1) Force scream
(2) Control mind
(3) Create Force storms
(4) Dark familiar
(5) Drain life essence
(6) Drain force
(7) Kill
(8) Telekinetic kill
(9) Transfer life
(10) Sprit form
(11) Sprit lore
(12) Unseen defender
(13) Force cloak
(14) Locate target
(15) Evoke the sprits
(16) Growth
Background History:
Born on korriban and lived there, till my friend found a ship laying on the outskirts we stole it and flew around in space, but later we accidentally hit the hyperspace button.
We crashed landed on a planet full of animals what I learned later was the planet of kashak
But I later met up with a man by the name of Exar Kun he trained me in something he called the sith way, although he never taught me how to build a light saber I soon left kashak. And traveled for many years during many wars I learned many skills and many more force abilities. We the republic fell along with the Jedi I traveled to the planet Kessel were I was captured and put to work as a slave in the spice mines but I used my abilities in the force to manipulate and escape the mines. I soon traveled to
Courescant but then very soon I noticed the presents of others the new republic had come to rebuild Courescant so they destroyed what I had made my home with large machines so I vowed to destroy them which is why I'm in the empire now.
-----------------------
PhillipG
[This message has been edited by
PhillipG
(edited April 14, 2006
9:53:43 AM)]
[This message has been edited by
PhillipG
(edited April 14, 2006
9:54:22 AM)]
[This message has been edited by
PhillipG
(edited April 14, 2006
10:21:34 AM)]
|
Cosmic
ComNet Marshal
[VE-ARMY] Major General
[VE-DJO] Krath Prophet(ess)
[VE-VEEC] Chief Editor
Post Number: 4520
Total Posts: 7772
Joined: Sep 2000
Status: Offline
|
RE: Drill Squad
|
|
April 14, 2006
1:37:53 PM
|
|
Good try, Phillip, but we can't accept gods. 
1) You cannot have been born/raised/from Korriban - the planet is uninhabitable.
2) You cannot be Force-Sensitive - there are very little/no trained Jedi/Dark Jedi left in the galaxy. The Jedi have been destroyed by the Jedi Purge, so you could not have learned all of those skills on your own - everyone needs a mentor, and there are none available. Those who are trained - whatever's left of them - are most likely in hiding somewhere in the galaxy.
It's ambitious, but you're going to have be a regular trooper like the rest of us. Remake the bio and your history, and I'll re-read it.
------------
Very good bio, Sorica. You'll be placed in a squad upon a position being available.
-----------------------
Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
CoT/MG Cosmic/HCA-3/SL/Drill Squad/Tadath/VEA/VE
[OPE][OTH][OPA][EW1][CDS][IH][GS][LM][SoS][CRoM][CoH][PoC][MSM][SCP][SoA][IOC]
-----------------------
Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
SL/KPR Cosmic/Lion 1-1/Lopen/VEDJ/VE
[VP][WoS2][KC1][SoY][EoP][OAK]
-----------------------
[This message has been edited by
Cosmic
(edited April 14, 2006
1:38:20 PM)]
|
Sorica Bayle
ComNet n00b
[VE-ARMY] Private
Post Number: 4
Total Posts: 6
Joined: Apr 2006
Status: Offline
|
RE: Drill Squad
|
|
April 15, 2006
2:36:42 AM
|
|
Sweet...I can't wait to start writing  -----------------------
Stormtrooper Mottos: Semper Fi...or else!
-Follow blindly
-70% chance of death at the dropzone, 100% for defiance
-Dealing with Jedi: apply a liberal amount of blaster bolts, preferably from behind or at a distance...team players beat hokey religions any day
-Yes...Moff *is* a funny word. Just get it out of your system before you go to the parade grounds.
-Courage: Good. Courage & 3 inches of durasteel: Better |
Cosmic
ComNet Marshal
[VE-ARMY] Major General
[VE-DJO] Krath Prophet(ess)
[VE-VEEC] Chief Editor
Post Number: 4528
Total Posts: 7772
Joined: Sep 2000
Status: Offline
|
RE: Drill Squad
|
|
April 15, 2006
12:59:09 AM
|
|
For those still in Drill (who are not waiting to be placed in a Squad), post here immediately. Failure to post within 1 week (sincae it's Easter) will result in your removal from the Vast Empire.
You have until Monday 17th to reply. -----------------------
Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
CoT/MG Cosmic/HCA-3/SL/Drill Squad/Tadath/VEA/VE
[OPE][OTH][OPA][EW1][CDS][IH][GS][LM][SoS][CRoM][CoH][PoC][MSM][SCP][SoA][IOC]
-----------------------
Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
SL/KPR Cosmic/Lion 1-1/Lopen/VEDJ/VE
[VP][WoS2][KC1][SoY][EoP][OAK]
----------------------- |
Leon
ComNet n00b
[VE-ARMY] Private
Post Number: 7
Total Posts: 1091
Joined: Apr 2006
Status: Offline
|
RE: Drill Squad
|
|
April 15, 2006
6:12:53 PM
|
|
Well i dont really know what im supposed to do right now im still waiting but Hi-ho |
Cosmic
ComNet Marshal
[VE-ARMY] Major General
[VE-DJO] Krath Prophet(ess)
[VE-VEEC] Chief Editor
Post Number: 4531
Total Posts: 7772
Joined: Sep 2000
Status: Offline
|
RE: Drill Squad
|
|
April 15, 2006
7:19:13 PM
|
|
I have replied to your email. -----------------------
Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
CoT/MG Cosmic/HCA-3/SL/Drill Squad/Tadath/VEA/VE
[OPE][OTH][OPA][EW1][CDS][IH][GS][LM][SoS][CRoM][CoH][PoC][MSM][SCP][SoA][IOC]
-----------------------
Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
SL/KPR Cosmic/Lion 1-1/Lopen/VEDJ/VE
[VP][WoS2][KC1][SoY][EoP][OAK]
----------------------- |
KnightWind
ComNet Novice
[VE-ARMY] Private First Class
Post Number: 65
Total Posts: 223
Joined: May 2005
Status: Offline
|
RE: Drill Squad
|
|
April 22, 2006
4:21:41 PM
|
|
Cosmic, I still havent seen myself placed into a new squad yet. Send me an email when you make a decison.
KnightWind out. -----------------------
-=Drifter==-
PFC/KnightWind [LoR] |
Evani
ComNet Veteran
[VE-ARMY] Sergeant
[VE-DJO] Initiate
[VE-VEEC] Gaming Reporter
Post Number: 1164
Total Posts: 3141
Joined: May 2005
Status: Offline
|
RE: Drill Squad
|
|
April 23, 2006
10:24:20 AM
|
|
Check the roster, You were placed in my squad. Dark Dragoons, I should have sent you an eamil though, havent got around it yet. -----------------------
DarkDragoons
SL/SGT Evani/2SQD/2PLT/1CMP/1REG/1BAT/Tadath/VEA[LoR][ES2C][CoR]
TRN/IN Evani/Training 1-1/Lopen/VEDJ/VE
|
Cosmic
ComNet Marshal
[VE-ARMY] Major General
[VE-DJO] Krath Prophet(ess)
[VE-VEEC] Chief Editor
Post Number: 4554
Total Posts: 7772
Joined: Sep 2000
Status: Offline
|
RE: Drill Squad
|
|
April 23, 2006
4:18:55 PM
|
|
Yeah. I apologize. I thought I sent you an email, and yes, you're in Evani's squad - Dark Dragoons. -----------------------
Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
CoT/MG Cosmic/HCA-3/SL/Drill Squad/Tadath/VEA/VE
[OPE][OTH][OPA][EW1][CDS][IH][GS][LM][SoS][CRoM][CoH][PoC][MSM][SCP][SoA][IOC]
-----------------------
Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
SL/KPR Cosmic/Lion 1-1/Lopen/VEDJ/VE
[VP][WoS2][KC1][SoY][EoP][OAK]
----------------------- |
PhillipG
ComNet n00b
[VE-ARMY] Private First Class
Post Number: 3
Total Posts: 3
Joined: Apr 2006
Status: Offline
|
RE: Drill Squad BIo
|
|
April 28, 2006
8:53:22 AM
|
|
my remade bio
Native Language: Basic but know others
Hair color: Brown
Eye Color: Blood Red
Skin Color: White
Height: 7'6
Wight: 400 Lbs
Age: 14
Full Name: Phillip G
Physical Build: Very built
Home World: Not sure
Talent/Skills:
I have mastered many skills over my life
(1) can manipulate the mind.
(2) can breath under water for a long time
Background History:
I don't remember much when I was 13 I lost most of my memory so lets see,
I enjoy fighting, and don't get me wrong laying back and relaxing as well from what I'm told I have always loved that, but I first learned that I could breath under water for a long time when I accidentally slipped while walking on a log I landed in this deep lake and got tangled up in vines or something I was down there for 2 hours. That's my life so far
-----------------------
PhillipG |
Cosmic
ComNet Marshal
[VE-ARMY] Major General
[VE-DJO] Krath Prophet(ess)
[VE-VEEC] Chief Editor
Post Number: 4561
Total Posts: 7772
Joined: Sep 2000
Status: Offline
|
RE: Drill Squad
|
|
April 29, 2006
12:39:49 AM
|
|
Umm... interesting is all I can say.
What species are you? Secondly, the Empire/Emperor was xenophobic, and you wouldn't be able to fit in any stormtrooper armor if you had huge gills and fins.
Second, you have expressed "powers". Your character cannot have Jedi abilities of any kind.
This cannot be your actual character biography, so I suggest re-writing it. -----------------------
Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
CoT/MG Cosmic/HCA-3/SL/Drill Squad/Tadath/VEA/VE
[OPE][OTH][OPA][EW1][CDS][IH][GS][LM][SoS][CRoM][CoH][PoC][MSM][SCP][SoA][IOC]
-----------------------
Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
SL/KPR Cosmic/Lion 1-1/Lopen/VEDJ/VE
[VP][WoS2][KC1][SoY][EoP][OAK]
----------------------- |
Freedon Ordo
ComNet n00b
[VE-ARMY] Private
Post Number: 6
Total Posts: 14
Joined: Apr 2006
Status: Offline
|
RE: Drill Squad
|
|
May 2, 2006
2:06:34 AM
|
|
My Bio
Bio-Name: Sacristah Ordo
Callsign: Freedon Ordo
Primary language: Wookiee, primitive basic.
Age: 32
Height: 7'1
Weight: 275
Fur Color/Appearence: Dark Brown, unable really to fit in standard Stormtrooper uniform.
Eye Color: Brown
Reason for joining the Empire: Blackmailed into doing so.
Place of Birth: Mechriah Village, Kashyyk.
History: Sacristah was a hunter and Chief of the Mechriah Village. He was a highly skilled Hunter, excelling in both melee and ranged combat. Sacristah was thirty-one years old, and had a mate as well as a son, when he was kid-napped by a group of raiding Pirates. The Pirates took him prisoner and enslaved him, having him do house keeping duties on there Frigate ship, as well as help repair the various systems and parts that broke down on the ship.
Sacristah was the slave of the Pirates for nine months until he slaughtered all twenty of them in there sleep one night and attempted to escape the ship in an escape pod. He was intercepted by a patrolling Victory-Class Star Destroyer, under the command of the vast Empire. The Imperials identified him as the missing Tribal Chief of Mechriah Village and, seeing his skills in combat, decided to enroll him in the Imperial Academy and make him a Storm Trooper. Shacristah refused, but agreed once the Imperials threatened to destroy his Village through Orbital Bombardment if he refused to enroll. After giving in to their threats the Imperials taught him to speak a primitive form of Basic, as Wookiees have trouble speaking the modern version, and he is at this moment undergoing basic training in the Stormtrooper academy.
Sacristah has a short temper, very short. He more often than not will not endure abuse for very long, verbal or physical, for very long before he has a tantrum. Sacristah was a very skilled hunter before he was kidnapped, excelling in the use of a bow caster and most melee weapons such as daggers, knives, swords, and spears. He is also quiet skilled with his hands. Though not trained in any form of Martial Arts Sacristah's claws and strength make up for his lack of training.Being able to cut through most forms of armor and able to tear a Gammorien limb from limb in a matter of seconds, Sacristah is one life form you do not want to engage in CQC.
Sacristah shines the most in Reconnaissance. Despite his size Shacristah is quite fast and silent when he moves.
He has an acute sense of smell, sight and hearing as well.
Also his ability to climb trees with ease and blend in with his natural surroundings make him a very proficient and dangerous recon trooper.
[This message has been edited by
Freedon Ordo
(edited May 2, 2006
2:08:18 AM)]
[This message has been edited by
Freedon Ordo
(edited May 2, 2006
2:09:49 AM)]
|
Typex3
ComNet n00b
[VE-ARMY] Private
Post Number: 3
Total Posts: 306
Joined: May 2006
Status: Offline
|
RE: Drill Squad
|
|
May 2, 2006
6:00:34 PM
|
|
Physical Appearance
Native Language: Basic
Hair Color: Dark Black/ Blonde Highlights
Eye Color: Saphire Blue
Skin Color: White Tanning
Height: 6'0
Weight: 160
Age: 18
Full Name: Typex3-D[droid81] Rocky
Physical Build: Well-built/Semi- Muscular [ Very dangerous In Muscular Power]
Homeworld: kashyyyk
Talents/Skills
1) Special tranined By the delta squad, all Sorts of martial arts, variaty of styles that Involves weapon dissarmed, Combat skills. Basic delta squad leadership. Bounty Hunter trained.
1A) He has The most advance Fighting Style on kashyyyk, He's very dangerous. Using Counter strikes, and deadly lock grabs. also Mix Martial artist who hold the tittle for being trained with the special forces of the inhabitants.
1B) He has a Well rounded amonunt of communicating skills, leadership and command. He learns how to follow before leading a squad. Trained by the special delta squad themselves.
2) He dissarmes bombs, can go through any computer system to dissactivate and open doors. Has a great accuracy, speed and hand eye cordination.
3) Ranked sleet commander, special forces, and battalion major of the planet.
Personality- He Never has a temperament Problem, He is calm Tough and Ready to recive orders at any place, time. He is Loyal to everyone no matter who they are, Exept the Rebellion. He will do the dirties Job that you Put on the line. He has a very respectfull and positive way of approaching an higher officer. He always tries to learn from his mistakes. Not only that But he is eager to learn from his sourraoundings and officers at any level. He is a great outgoing guy to people around him. But when Its time to get on a mission His heart is to the full advantage of his Cheif In command and his fellow teamates. He will Risk His Own Life to rescue any one that represents the Vast empire. He will Die standing up giving it all, defending his Squad, fighting at his own risk, and diying with Honor.
Background History:
It was the beggining of the war at the planet, I was born with a deception to Lead. My family and love one were Killed In the war against the rebellion.Our armies and fleets had been tourned appart by the rebellions overwhealming power of command. My Body Burned during the war, I had Nothing left exept My Best friend and My Two Legs to walk In grounds.
I felt a strong need of hatred over the Rebellion. My Body was rebiult In order to lead My planet against rebellion enimies. After Fifthteen Long years My Machine body was contructed, I was then Hired as a bounty Hunter, a Fool that was usen to Obey commands and be Pushed around. I had no choise To start a rebolt and lead Myself. I Knew that If the rebellion kept the planet In control that we would never be free from the wrath.
The Revolt was then a sucess, turning into a revolution of Powers. The Rebellion had not taken the secret location in wish I held My army. We hired special forces to biult ships and ground bases, and when our fleet was ready, we overwhealmed the rebellion leading them to return to safe arms. After two years of commanding, I was rewarded as a special hero On my planet. I began to expand the army even More Until Our defences where to Big for the Rebellion.
I then became More aware of my capabilities. In all this years I have become a great leader for My planet. But there was a problem that soon tourned against me. People were Not happy about My strict leading system. I was a coward who treated his people like skums. leading was My aggression, and following was My hatred. Soon after we driven may of the rebellion forces away from our planet People were trying to take me off command. Sinse My order of peace were strict. After a year, I trained The basic skills of dicipline and follow before leading. I soon realised what I have done wrong to My country after the war. I then returned to the Central base of the army. I spoke to the major in charge of the army. I skaed Him to give me another chance, He dynied my offer. He order four armed and dangerous man to Put Me on a ship to be driven away from My Home planet.
I then Left the place with My Bounty hunter suit. All of the sudden I felt Uncocious and went to sleep. When I woke up, I was In this Large ship holded By two men standing In front of a commander. I then figured out that they were the empire. I glared and took a big breath to explain My story In My planet. They soon realised that they will need a stormtrooper at there recruit. Then a Private named Leon encouraged My into joining the navy, But I had a rough time with ships. As I talked to the commander about switching to the army then I became In the infantry traning to become a stormtrooper for the Empire. I then promissed Myself Of My basic training On disipline and how to follow. I then trew away My bounty hunter coustume In order to follow not to lead.
---------------------------------
-----------------------
Training In the drill Squad. Incomer to The VE StormTrooper academy. Typex3 Reporting for Duty anytime at any Place. Bounty Hunters Do lead, But don't Follow Orders. StormTroopers Follow before they lead.
[VE]Trooper : Private Typex3
StormTrooper Drill - Infantry
[Squad [Infantry]
1) Squad Leader : Major General Cosmic
3) Trooper : Private Typex3
[Squad Affiliate: Nightstalkers: Mobile Infantry]
3) Trooper : Private First Class Leon
[This message has been edited by
Fallen Warfighter
(edited May 3, 2006
2:53:42 PM)]
[This message has been edited by
Fallen Warfighter
(edited May 3, 2006
2:54:53 PM)]
[This message has been edited by
Fallen Warfighter
(edited May 3, 2006
2:59:00 PM)]
[This message has been edited by
Fallen Warfighter
(edited May 3, 2006
3:02:53 PM)]
[This message has been edited by
Fallen Warfighter
(edited May 3, 2006
3:15:55 PM)]
[This message has been edited by
Fallen Warfighter
(edited May 3, 2006
3:19:03 PM)]
[This message has been edited by
Fallen Warfighter
(edited May 3, 2006
3:21:45 PM)]
[This message has been edited by
Fallen Warfighter
(edited May 3, 2006
3:23:39 PM)]
[This message has been edited by
Fallen Warfighter
(edited May 3, 2006
3:29:35 PM)]
|
Cosmic
ComNet Marshal
[VE-ARMY] Major General
[VE-DJO] Krath Prophet(ess)
[VE-VEEC] Chief Editor
Post Number: 4566
Total Posts: 7772
Joined: Sep 2000
Status: Offline
|
RE: Drill Squad
|
|
May 3, 2006
5:06:35 PM
|
|
Not bad. I liked the history you included, and the fact that it wasn't just a single-paragraph biography. It's one of the more-original stories I've seen with creativity.
Just keep in mind that you can't be a "god" or some type of exceptionally genius-at-everything super trooper. Looks a bit weird. Other than that, looks good, and I'll place you in a squad. -----------------------
Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
CoT/MG Cosmic/HCA-3/SL/Drill Squad/Tadath/VEA/VE
[OPE][OTH][OPA][EW1][CDS][IH][GS][LM][SoS][CRoM][CoH][PoC][MSM][SCP][SoA][IOC]
-----------------------
Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
SL/KPR Cosmic/Lion 1-1/Lopen/VEDJ/VE
[VP][WoS2][KC1][SoY][EoP][OAK]
----------------------- |
Typex3
ComNet n00b
[VE-ARMY] Private
Post Number: 13
Total Posts: 306
Joined: May 2006
Status: Offline
|
RE: Drill Squad
|
|
May 3, 2006
5:09:28 PM
|
|
I want to be In a good squad, But if you think Nightstalkers is the place for me then go right ahead. I respect your oppinion. -----------------------
Training In the drill Squad. Incomer to The VE StormTrooper academy. Typex3 Reporting for Duty anytime at any Place. Bounty Hunters Do lead, But don't Follow Orders. StormTroopers Follow before leading.
[VE]Trooper : Private Typex3
StormTrooper Drill - Infantry
[Squad [Infantry]
1) Squad Leader : Major General Cosmic
3) Trooper : Private Typex3
[Squad Affiliate: Nightstalkers: Mobile Infantry]
3) Trooper : Private First Class Leon |
Garet Daimun
ComNet Member
[VE-ARMY] Sergeant
Post Number: 436
Total Posts: 1348
Joined: Aug 2005
Status: Offline
|
RE: Drill Squad
|
|
May 4, 2006
12:48:16 AM
|
|
I, among others, appreciate you wanting to help and all, Typex... But we don't have any "good" or "bad" squads here. Yes, there are squads that need a little more help than others, but the soldiers in NS are good writers, and they've sacrificed their positions in other squads to go help out.
So please keep the "good" and "bad" out of your posts.
-----------------------
DarkDragoons
+ Advance Recon Commandos {ARC} +
FTL/SGT Garet Daimun/2SQD/1PLT/1COM/1RGT/1BAT/Tadath/VEA [ES2C]
"I don't need a plan. Plans are for scientists, and builders. I've got moxy... and guns."
-Jennifer Mui, 'Mercenaries'
[This message has been edited by
Garet Daimun
(edited May 4, 2006
12:48:35 AM)]
|
Leon
ComNet Novice
[VE-ARMY] Private First Class
Post Number: 50
Total Posts: 1091
Joined: Apr 2006
Status: Offline
|
RE: Drill Squad
|
|
May 4, 2006
5:33:03 PM
|
|
Typex3 please dont ever say that about NS again. -----------------------
NightStalkers
TRP/PFC Leon/3SQD/2PLT/1 Bat/1 RGT/VEA/VE |
Typex3
ComNet n00b
[VE-ARMY] Private First Class
Post Number: 22
Total Posts: 306
Joined: May 2006
Status: Offline
|
RE: Drill Squad
|
|
May 4, 2006
6:03:06 PM
|
|
HUM, I wasn't meaning that Nightstakers is a bad squad its that me and cosmic had a conversation earlier and it doen't make sense to you. like I was saying to Cosmic, she sead that Nightstakers was the b.est squad to begin with and I toild her if that is the only sqaud I could get Into, then she sead there are others that might not be working right Now so we have Nightstakers and DD. I choose DD for the following reasons, Because it just needed 1 person to fill it up, and second of all because It was the squad that I Know people from. not because Nightstakers is Bad, Its Just that My friend Leon is there and it feels wierd when We write stories together, so I let cosmic do the Pick, and I'm In DD. Please, i din't ment the statement that I just posted. Cosmic will understand because I just talked to her before making the post. But If I harmed loen Or My fellow Sergeant, I have no choise Into apologizing. I'm realy sorry. -----------------------
Training In the drill Squad. Incomer to The VE StormTrooper academy. Typex3 Reporting for Duty anytime at any Place. Bounty Hunters Do lead, But don't Follow Orders. StormTroopers Follow before leading. MOTTO- Death Unseen!
[VE]Trooper : Private first class- Typex3
StormTrooper Drill - Mechanized Infantry:Squad: Dark Dragoons.
[Mechanized Infantry : Squad: Dark Dragoons]
1) Squad Leader: Senior Sergeant Zafo
[Squad Affiliate: Nightstalkers: Mobile Infantry]
3) Trooper : Private First Class Leon |
Garet Daimun
ComNet Member
[VE-ARMY] Sergeant
Post Number: 438
Total Posts: 1348
Joined: Aug 2005
Status: Offline
|
RE: Drill Squad
|
|
May 4, 2006
6:32:21 PM
|
|
Just be a little clearer with your statements please, that kind of stuff can get you into trouble.
Oh, and just a little tip: Cosmic is more masculine than feminine. -----------------------
DarkDragoons
+ Advance Recon Commandos {ARC} +
FTL/SGT Garet Daimun/2SQD/1PLT/1COM/1RGT/1BAT/Tadath/VEA [ES2C]
"I don't need a plan. Plans are for scientists, and builders. I've got moxy... and guns."
-Jennifer Mui, 'Mercenaries' |
Typex3
ComNet Novice
[VE-ARMY] Private First Class
Post Number: 27
Total Posts: 306
Joined: May 2006
Status: Offline
|
RE: Drill Squad
|
|
May 4, 2006
6:36:34 PM
|
|
ARG, I keep mistaking her for a girl. Okay, I'll try to be as clear as possible. -----------------------
Training In the drill Squad. Incomer to The VE StormTrooper academy. Typex3 Reporting for Duty anytime at any Place. Bounty Hunters Do lead, But don't Follow Orders. StormTroopers Follow before leading. MOTTO- Death Unseen!
[VE]Trooper : Private first class- Typex3
StormTrooper Drill - Mechanized Infantry:Squad: Dark Dragoons.
[Mechanized Infantry : Squad: Dark Dragoons]
1) Squad Leader: Senior Sergeant Zafo
[Squad Affiliate: Nightstalkers: Mobile Infantry]
3) Trooper : Private First Class Leon |
|
|
