First off, congrats on the promotion and Letter of Recommendation.

Secondly, the character biography is a means for you to develop your character and for everyone else to get to know what your character is like. In order to do this, I would like you to write more about your character's past and a bit more of his personality. You can read my biography (Cosmic's Biography - Also an Example) topic.
 
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Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
CoT/BG Cosmic/HCA-3/SL/3SQD/2PLT/1COMP/1BAT/Tadath/VEA/VE
[OPE][OTH][OPA][EW1][CDS][IH][GS][LM][SoS][CRoM][CoH][PoC][MSM][SCP][SoA][IOC]
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Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
SL/KPR Cosmic/Lion 1-1/Lopen/VEDJ/VE
[VP][WoS2][KC1][SoY][EoP][OAK]
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Ok, no problem.

Good job on the bio, Shardeth.
 
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Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
CoT/BG Cosmic/HCA-3/SL/3SQD/2PLT/1COMP/1BAT/Tadath/VEA/VE
[OPE][OTH][OPA][EW1][CDS][IH][GS][LM][SoS][CRoM][CoH][PoC][MSM][SCP][SoA][IOC]
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Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
SL/KPR Cosmic/Lion 1-1/Lopen/VEDJ/VE
[VP][WoS2][KC1][SoY][EoP][OAK]
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Your Army account does not work because it has been deleted.

I believe this is the second time I've removed you from active duty. I've given you two chances, and both times you have failed to show any activity from your character.

Do I really want to give you a third try? My first thought is no, but you may be able to change my mind if you increase your activity by... a lot.

On second thought... you're in the Navy. One of the biggest mistakes new recruits make is joining two divisions at once. The main problem they face is not being able to divide their time equally amongst the two divisions.

Don't bother with making that Army biography. Looks like you're concentrating more on the Navy anyway. Stay in the Navy.
 

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Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
CoT/BG Cosmic/HCA-3/SL/3SQD/2PLT/1COMP/1BAT/Tadath/VEA/VE
[OPE][OTH][OPA][EW1][CDS][IH][GS][LM][SoS][CRoM][CoH][PoC][MSM][SCP][SoA][IOC]
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Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
SL/KPR Cosmic/Lion 1-1/Lopen/VEDJ/VE
[VP][WoS2][KC1][SoY][EoP][OAK]
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that would be a good reason why it doesnt work
 
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FM/CRW StOrMz/Kaph 3-11/Wing 1/mSSD Atrus/DEF/VEN/VE
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Welcome Tichondrious and bullet_star to Drill.
 
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Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
CoT/BG Cosmic/HCA-3/SL/3SQD/2PLT/1COMP/1BAT/Tadath/VEA/VE
[OPE][OTH][OPA][EW1][CDS][IH][GS][LM][SoS][CRoM][CoH][PoC][MSM][SCP][SoA][IOC]
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Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
SL/KPR Cosmic/Lion 1-1/Lopen/VEDJ/VE
[VP][WoS2][KC1][SoY][EoP][OAK]
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Best thing to do right now is complete your biography. Once that is approved, I can send you to an active-duty squad.
 
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Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
CoT/BG Cosmic/HCA-3/SL/3SQD/2PLT/1COMP/1BAT/Tadath/VEA/VE
[OPE][OTH][OPA][EW1][CDS][IH][GS][LM][SoS][CRoM][CoH][PoC][MSM][SCP][SoA][IOC]
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Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
SL/KPR Cosmic/Lion 1-1/Lopen/VEDJ/VE
[VP][WoS2][KC1][SoY][EoP][OAK]
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Check your bio page.
 
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Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
CoT/BG Cosmic/HCA-3/SL/3SQD/2PLT/1COMP/1BAT/Tadath/VEA/VE
[OPE][OTH][OPA][EW1][CDS][IH][GS][LM][SoS][CRoM][CoH][PoC][MSM][SCP][SoA][IOC]
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Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
SL/KPR Cosmic/Lion 1-1/Lopen/VEDJ/VE
[VP][WoS2][KC1][SoY][EoP][OAK]
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have done it again lol, we shall get there in the end!

It took me longer than I wanted to complete my bio, and I wished to add more, but I had many distractions today. I hope this will be acceptable, and that everyone will enjoy



Appearance

Name: Kamadaki Lennox
Race: Human/Mandalorian
Hair Color: Platinum blonde
Eye Color: Bright Green
Skin tone: Bronze
Height: 6'8
Weight: 285 lbs
Age: 24
Physical Build: Large muscular
Homeworld: Ord Mantell
Language: Basic

Kamadaki usually adorn himself in leather clothing. He liked the bad boy look of black leather and the chains that hung from his clothing. He has two piercing in his left ear, and one in his right that resembles a plus sign that curves at both ways at all four sides. He also fashions the same design of a tattoo on his upper right arm. On his left arm is a tattoo of a heart outlined in barbed wire, with a lightning bolt running through the middle at an angle, with one side being a deathly crimson blood red and the other a pitch black. His hair comes just above his waist, which is usually kept in a tight braid that can be covered up by a hat. His eyes are a bright green and glimmer from the spices he worked with as a child and teenager. He has a neatly trimmed goatee that he is quite fond of. He stands at a very tall height because of the Mandalorian blood running through him.

Skills

Great physical stamina and strength due to rigorous profession
Hand to hand combat and martial art skills

Personality

To best describe Kamadaki is difficult, if you would wish to label him differently than a ladies man. He has always been suave, charming and "knightly" as some would say. The shining image of a gentleman. Although he has his dashing heart throb side, he is also a comedian of sorts. He likes to keep the mood relaxed, even at ground zero of war.

His appearance is deceiving when compared to the assumption of others. Most would think he is a muscled brute, but in actuality he is rather cunning, always striving to be one step ahead of the enemy.

History of Kamadaki

Kamadaki's family were an interesting sort. His mother, Hannah BreAnne, was a human born on Coruscant to a wealthy family of politicians. She was average height for a human, with long flowing blonde hair. She was said to be incredibly beautiful. She had dark skin, most likely of her families heritage. She never had a thing to worry about as whatever she wanted could be easily bought. Though she had these luxuries, she preferred a much more simpler life. One of a wife and mother. On a basic negotiation mission with her father to a back water planet that is unknown as of now, she was checking out the night life of a few cantinas near the embassy. Unknown to her, this was a high crime area, and she unfortunately ran into some very unwanted people. They were a band of thugs, most likely apart of the Black Sun syndicate. As they were harassing her even after the attempts to escape, she felt her life would end that night. As blasters were raised toward her because she would not do as they say, a tall and dark man stepped out from the shadows of an alley. He warned the thugs that they should leave the lady alone or they would not live to see another day. As the thugs laughed hysterically, the man rushed at them with a large vibrosword slicing one thugs throat wide open. As the other thug witnessed this, he jumped back and raised his blaster to fire on the man, but before he could even pull the trigger, he no longer had limbs. As the thug screamed out in pain, the man grinned with delight, he thrust his sword into the head of the thug. Once the battle was over, the lady looked in fear as the man approached her. He told her she did not need to be frightened, as he would not harm her. He put away his sword and extended his hand to help her up. She looked a bit hesitant but took his hand. He began to introduce himself. His name was Santiago Lennox. He was one of the few Mandalorian left, or that were known about. He was a bouncer at a nearby bar, and asked if she would have a drink with him. She agreed and they walked, talking about many stories of each other. After several drinks, she said she should get back to the embassy so that no one would worry. He asked if he would ever see her again. She winked at him and gave an interesting answer of "maybe". He raised an eyebrow and looked at her as she left.

Some time later

Hannah did meet back with Santiago days later, and now they were married. She showed him a peaceful loving side he hadn't been used to, but found very enjoyable. In turn, he gave her a feeling of security. Another year passed, and one night as Santiago was coming home from another day of work, Hannah was waiting for him at the door. No sooner than he walked in, she leaped on top of him, kissing and hugging. He was unsure if he missed some special day, but she was quite happy to see him. He asked why she was so happy. She smiled wide and whispered in his ear. His eyes grew wide and his jaw dropped. A tear ran down his face of the news. She was pregnant and he was soon to be the father of a son.

Seven years later

Kamadaki was the son that was born. He was now nearly seven in age and was already big and strong like his father. He'd taken after his father in physical stature, but shared many characteristics of his mother. He had her long blonde hair and near glowing, green eyes. He was working in a shop owned by a friend of his father. It was a weapons shop that held many sorts of things. Anything from melee to blasters and rifles could be found there. Since Kamadaki was so young, he would clean the shop every morning and night. The shop owner also had an obstacle course which Kamadaki would love to play in. Though it was highly dangerous in some areas, he could handle himself quite well. He had trained since he was four with his father in many martial arts.

Now at the age of eighteen, Kamadaki wanted to work at a casino, which were quite common on his home planet of Ord Mantell. With recommendations from his father, an accomplished bouncer known over most of the planet, he easily got the job after a brutal test consisting of field courses and basic combat training. As Kamadaki worked in the facility, he noticed Imperial personal coming on shore leave from a nearby space station. He watched the men and women, nearly drooling at the uniforms he admired so much. He had dreamed of one day joining the military. He loved the idea of traveling the galaxy and being incredibly sexy in the uniforms he had seen so many times. Though they were officers he saw most of the time, he knew that he would make it up that high one day.

Six years later, Kamadaki entered a recruitment office, and now was fulfilling his greatest dream.

Personality! Oh tootin! I knew I forgot something. Thank you so much. I really do appreciate it.

Name: Marka
Race: Human
Hair Color: Dark Brown
Eye Color: Dark Brown
Skin tone: White (meduim tan)
Height: 6'1
Weight: 89 kg
Age: 23
Physical Build: Athletic
Homeworld: Coruscant
Language: Basic

Marka tends to dress in lighter clothing, anything that doesnt hinder his mobility and agility. He prefers wearing robes, and usually dresses in blacks or greys. He has two tattoos, one under his left eye that says "LIFE" and one under his right eye that says "DEATH". He has a scar on his left arm from when he was younger that goes from his shoulder down to his elbow. His messy hair only just reaches his shoulders, and he has two braids that fall from each side of his head. He has slight, dark stubble.

Skills:
Extensive training with vibroblades etc.
Basic training in hand-to-hand combat
Moderate training in various blaster styles

Personality:
Marka is a relentless, efficient killer. He prefers the up close and personal combat with his blade, but will not hesitate to kill from a distance. His emotions rarely get the better of him and it isnt likely he will turn down a challenge. Despite all this, he is a wise man and is constantly on the lookout for abnormalities in his companions and his surroundings. Marka is a cold man and will occasionally kill for pleasure.

History of Marka:

The earliest memories Marka has are of fear. He was running through the streets of Coruscant at the age of 14. He had a large cut on his left arm, but he kept moving. He ran, but an arm flung out and grabbed his robes. The whiplash brought him to the ground and he was struck by sudden pain in his arm, neck and back. A voice from the darkness whispered calmly "Not that I have you, I will bring out a side in you that could bring you enormous power. Soon you will be like I am."

His next memories are of exhilleration. He had a vibroblade of a twisted black steel in his grasp, and a voice commanding him when to move, when to strike. He was being trained, and as he trained, his anger rose. He became exceptionally good with the blade and was on his way to completing his training. His last stage of training involved murdering an innocent. The farmer, his hands and feet bound, and a gag in his mouth had a look of horror on his face as Marka approached. Without hesitation he brought the blade to the farmers neck, and swiftly sliced it open. At that moment, oddly enough, Marka felt a great sense of fulfilment. A grin came across his face.

Soon Marka was out on missions for his mentor. His blade was drenched in the blood of so many, and he was proud of it. All of his missions were a success. At the age of 19 Marka killed his mentor in cold blood and wandered the outer rim for a few years. He returned to Coruscant 4 years later. A day after his arrival, he received an anonymous challenge. He had a sneaking suspicion that there was something wrong about the situation, but he erased all doubt from his mind, as he was eager to test his skills once again. Although withing seconds of his appearance, he was overwhelmed by stormtroopers.

He woke up in a bed, not a cell. He wandered the corridors until finally he was approached by a rather important looking man. He explained the ideals of the Empire to Marka, and had him intrigued. Marka respected the stormtroopers because they were ther only ones who ever caught him. He was offered a position and he took it without thinking twice. Days later he found himself suiting up with the other men, not as enemies, but as brothers in arms.

Thanks. Not bad for a 14 year old lol.You know, I didn't actually think about making my mentor a Jedi, but I dont really like the idea of that anyway. But thanks again.

Marka

*blinks*
Or your assistant squad leader...
 
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Lance Corporal Jakireth
- Raider Squad -
Assistant Squad Leader
Army of the Vast Empire
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ASL/LCPL Jakireth/3SQD/1PLT/1CMP/1RGT/1BAT/Tadath/VEA[LoR]
Rep/Reporter Jakireth/NewsRep: 2/News Division/VET/VE

Storm, you better get your ass in gear, cause Wildcard's gonna make it hot in here.

There are no tuskens on Corellia.
 
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TRP/SSG Sniping101/4SQD/1PLT/1COM/1BAT/1RGT/VEA/VE [LoR][IH][BoA]

Storm you better get your ass in gear, cause Wildcard's gonna make it hot in here.

" (I) Is always hatching plots against newlyweds; I mar the beauty of virgins and cause their hearts to grow cold"

Its only A start but yes, I was forced to kill him if I wanted to train