Well, I decided to give a nod to Tryk by attempting my own book excerpt. I'm definitely not a textbook writer and editing some of the prose out of my writing was difficult. Not the best but decent for first attempt? XD

Also for Strill, this doesn't mean that Panthac can't still be written. They just can't be written in the present. Still have fun with character perspectives if you feel it.

Someone in the navy who gives critiques. O.O My eyes surely deceive me.

Yeah. I admit I kind of lost my ability to think specifically around that point. Tactical stuff is not my forte.

I have gotten lax about critique on the Navy sides, it's true.  I'll have to get back in the swing of things, on that front.

Post's finally up.  Not great, but at least we're moved forward.  Most of the relevant detail is clarified greatly in the OOC note at the end, actually: the Verpine plan on purposefully miscommunicating, at the next battle, but only when they see us able to coordinate our forces... they don't want to waste going against the Dominion, and risking their queen, if we won't be able to use that to win.

And, in other news, that's the most posts to a single story I've ever made in the Navy!    I'm not a super-poster like some folks (DeepSix, Serpent, etc.), but I'm proud to be contributing meta-level, Gamemaster kinds of posts.  I'm ever more happy to be breaking records all around, with this story. 

Thanks for the question; I'm a little out of it, with medications and little food.

The Grand Idea:

1. The "siege" on Gwodd LK nale turns into an all-out assault, while Second Fleet is still at Bloodmoon, as suggested by Joamer's last post.

2. At Bloodmoon, Second Fleet figures out a system of procedures (like the blink code, visual observers, battle boards, etc.) that will allow us to function on a basic level, despite the interference.  Fighters will operate much more closely to their home vessels.

3.  When we get back to the Sollamens, the pulsar has gone inactive again, at first.  We see the Dominion fleet surrounding Gwodd LK nale, along with MANY troop transports.  We engage.  At first, we do really, really well, but the Dominion don't run... they know another active period is coming.

4.  The pulsar switches back to active again, and there's a moment of difficulty as we have to switch over to the newly-worked-out, unfamiliar procedures to see us through.  Then we start holding out own.

5.  At that point, convinced we can make a go of it, our Verpine allies will make their move.  And things will get epic. 

That clarify the outline a bit, everyone?  Remember, this isn't a pre-written story.  I have ideas about its shape and its possible outcomes, but everything - as ever - is influenced/shaped by what YOU write.  Our posts have consequences, and those will be reflected in what follows them.  Still, I think that outline works well, and should be easy to work within, rather than against.  Hope you agree. 

Woohoo!  Thanks, Avalar! 

We're so close!  Twenty posts breaks the record!

Sadly the only person I might blow up is on an asteroid. But you can certainly have him later

I go away for one night. ONE night. In the morning I have around thirty e-mails telling me that I'm behind on posting. Grrr.

I will hopefully have a post up by the end of today.

That moment when the Death discussion board runs like IRC...?

Ah, then clearly you are not the Doctor. One person down. Several billion to go...

But anyway, feel free to have the chaos start, Gur. We're about to get hit to hell.

It's a good idea, sure, but keep in mind: this story is ending sooner than later.  Technically, we were supposed to be finished by May 1st!  Now, I'm giving us a little extra time, since we're building back up to activity, but we should still wrap things up as soon as possible.    Just keep that in mind before you introduce too many new plotlines, sub-plots, and twists. 

That's the spirit! 

OH OH OH!

Why did I not think of it before?

How's the NCC getting out? I think I gathered that Strill is rescuing him, but are we flying him off, or is a transport landing, or what? Is there a preset result?

Because if there wasn't, I was wondering if, say, a couple of Strill folks could find him, rest of Strill give covering fire, and then we could fly him off in the shuttle with the wounded. Or without wounded. Don't care. Honestly, the thought has only just come to me. Whilst it's not essential for my next post, I was thinking maybe the next one. Doesn't even have to be Grent flying the shuttle: he's got the Infiltration ancillary so could do that.

Just a question to put out to the floor.

American WWII is not the best of my subjects. American history is not my best subject full stop! But I think I know what you mean.

I'll have a post up in a minute or so.

152,295 words so far, in this story.  That's a novel, everyone! 

Well we know that we've a fairly large, double ended, high ceiling, hangar bay. We know there's a maintenance balcony on at least on side. I would imagine both. Then there are going to be two doorways on each side opposite each other? Maybe three, with one in the middle? I don't know .... That's what I was imagining from the description, at least.