Sael
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My Bio
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November 4, 2005
6:06:03 PM
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Sael is a name adopted, his real name is Saelot denaor. He was raise in the home of a retired navy pilot. This pilot who's name is Jorlot,his father who brought Sael up kinda like a post military kid. He taught him different techniques for survival along with some basic firearm training, basically how to stay alive in the apparent harsh forming universe.After his father died Sael decided to join up and try his shot as a pilot after hearing all the unique war stories most his life. Thus how he came to be in the imperial navy. Sael is quiet and laid back, he doesn't trust many people, but you would never know it since he is so determined to be the best soldier he can be. Never disobeying orders, at least no obviously anyway. He has long black hair, human in race with black eyes. His skin tone is a bit on the pale side due to a slight sunlight intolerance which he wears long clothing to prevent. Doesn't really bother him much. Be honest and straight up with him, and he's a good allie, anything else.....don't go to sleep ....
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Peace is a lie, there is only passion.
Through passion, I gain strength.
Through strength, I gain power.
Through power, I gain victory.
Through victory, my chains are broken.
The Force shall free me.
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Shazam
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RE: My Bio
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November 8, 2005
6:26:31 PM
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Kick butt man, glad to see you've jumped into the responsibilities of the whole BT and Flighschool bit. As for your bio, I beleive the Flight School highly suggest you read through your bio several times, correcting minor flaws or enhancing your character. While you have created a breif history and reasoning behind his entry to the Navy, I think you should probably go on ahead and include height, weight, facial features or other distinguinshing marks. Remember also that the way you write this bio is a reflection of your actual writing and may help Sk8 in his placing or atleast critiquing. I simply suggest maybe putting it in word real quick to correct spelling errors, gramatical erros and making it look neat. Repost it here as well as update your bio on the profile portion of the roster.
Thanks for the hardwork man, I'll let Sk8 know your ready to be reveiwed. Keep Rockin.
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*Flash Was Here...*
CMDR/ESN Shazam/Nazgul 1-1/Phoenix Wing/mSSD Atrus/1VENF/VEN (=A=) (=*SA*=) (=*MA*=) (=*FOCE*=) [LoM] [LSM] [VC:S] [DSM]
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Shazam
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Sael
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RE: My Bio
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November 10, 2005
1:48:42 PM
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Sael is a name adopted; his real name is Saelot Denaor. He was raised in the home of a retired navy pilot. This pilot whose name is Jorlot, is his father, who brought Sael up kind of like a post-military kid. He taught him different techniques for survival along with some basic firearm training, basically how to stay alive in the apparent harsh forming universe. After his father died Sael decided to join up and try his shot as a pilot after hearing all the unique war stories most his life. Thus how he came to be in the imperial navy. Sael is quiet and laid back, he doesn't trust many people, but you would never know it since he is so determined to be the best soldier he can be. Never disobeying orders, at least no obviously anyway. He has long black hair, human in race with black eyes. His skin tone is a bit on the pale side due to a slight sunlight intolerance, which he wears long clothing to prevent. Doesn't really bother him much. Be honest and straight up with him, and he's a good ally, anything else...don't go to sleep.
Sael is five foot ten inches tall, and one hundred and seventy pounds in weight. There is a scar that runs from above his right eye to the area below his right eye that is the result of a accident when he was a boy. His face is a bit narrow and his hands are slim, he gets that from his mother. Other than that he is an average guy with average interest's.
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Peace is a lie, there is only passion.
Through passion, I gain strength.
Through strength, I gain power.
Through power, I gain victory.
Through victory, my chains are broken.
The Force shall free me.
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Hellra
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RE: My Bio
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November 10, 2005
2:06:35 PM
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Remember to include your
eyecolour
Hair colour
and etc. looks good though -----------------------
--Corporal Hellra--
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Sael
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RE: My Bio
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November 10, 2005
2:42:11 PM
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his eye color and hair color are there. I had just left out my height and weight etc.. -----------------------
Peace is a lie, there is only passion.
Through passion, I gain strength.
Through strength, I gain power.
Through power, I gain victory.
Through victory, my chains are broken.
The Force shall free me.
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Shazam
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RE: My Bio
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November 10, 2005
5:09:15 PM
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Not tryin to be too incredibly picky, but might you format it so that those features don't have to be picked out of that block of words?
Such as:
Eye Color:
Hair Color:
Structure: (Muscular, skinny, overweight...)
Distincitve Features: (scars or maybe even missing eyebrows)
Height:
Weight:
And if you want to get really specific, lol-
Shoe Size:
Favorite Food:
Favorite Dance Move:
Pets:
Siblings: (Although you might include that for better info anyways)
Lady Freinds:
Happy Places:
Favorite Beverage?:
My point is that a bio is your chance to tell people how to talk about you as well as explain why you do the things you do. Put all you can in there and make it as excessable as possible to those who might look into your profile to see "Well, I forget what Sael looks like... Or did he say he had a military father?" Whatever. Its there to help everyone including yourself. Keep rockin man.
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*Flash Was Here...*
CMDR/ESN Shazam/Nazgul 1-1/Phoenix Wing/mSSD Atrus/1VENF/VEN (=A=) (=*SA*=) (=*MA*=) (=*FOCE*=) [LoM] [LSM] [VC:S] [DSM] |
Sael
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RE: My Bio
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November 14, 2005
4:29:28 PM
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Sael is a name adopted; his real name is Saelot Denaor. He was raised in the home of a retired navy pilot. This pilot whose name is Jorlot, is his father, who brought Sael up kind of like a post-military kid. He taught him different techniques for survival along with some basic firearm training, basically how to stay alive in the apparent harsh forming universe. After his father died Sael decided to join up and try his shot as a pilot after hearing all the unique war stories most his life. Thus how he came to be in the imperial navy. Sael is quiet and laid back, he doesn't trust many people, but you would never know it since he is so determined to be the best soldier he can be. Never disobeying orders, at least no obviously anyway. He has long black hair, human in race with black eyes. His skin tone is a bit on the pale side due to a slight sunlight intolerance, which he wears long clothing to prevent. Doesn't really bother him much. Be honest and straight up with him, and he's a good ally, anything else...don't go to sleep.
Sael is five foot ten inches tall, and one hundred and seventy pounds in weight. There is a scar that runs from above his right eye to the area below his right eye that is the result of a accident when he was a boy. His face is a bit narrow and his hands are slim, he gets that from his mother. Other than that he is an average guy with average interest's.
eye color:black
hair color:black
structure:toned
distinctive features: scar from top to bottom across right eye
height: 5'10''
weight: 170lbs
shoe size: 10
favorite food: bread
pets:none
siblings:none
lady friends: Arelian, child hood friend
happy places: anywhere where noone else is
favorite beverage: water
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Peace is a lie, there is only passion.
Through passion, I gain strength.
Through strength, I gain power.
Through power, I gain victory.
Through victory, my chains are broken.
The Force shall free me.
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Shazam
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RE: My Bio
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November 15, 2005
7:09:40 PM
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Congratulations, you've been added to the ranks of Kaph Squadron. You can make your way to the Kaph Squadron Topic in the Navy Main to introduce yourself to your new squadron mates. The best to you. -----------------------
*Flash Was Here...*
CMDR/ESN Shazam/Nazgul 1-1/Phoenix Wing/mSSD Atrus/1VENF/VEN (=A=) (=*SA*=) (=*MA*=) (=*FOCE*=) [LoM] [LSM] [VC:S] [DSM] |
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