Sir, Pvt. Bathlanna reporting.
I have written my Bio and am awaiting further instuctions.
Have made contact with General Cosmic once proir no furthur communications have been established and i would like to get my feet wet with the RPG Storys

Copy that sir ,but with all do respect im a bit impatient.

Sorry I took so long Charlie, had some problems with internet, and when I wasn't having problems, I was stuck somewhere.

Charlie, right. No references to the Jedi, okay? Unless you are a DJO member, which I'm quite sure you're not.

Now, please give a bit more history as well about the personality, and fix that history up.
Finished the sentence in Talents.

Generally, Charlie, I'm gonna need you to step-up on that grammar and spelling.
Until then, we also have a Drill Squad Story going on, called Catch-22

Here's the link: http://comnet.imperialnetwork.com/topic/9889/


Zolos, you're still around?
Generally, I'm going to need more on history and character personality.
The allowed age to join the Empire is 17, you're character cannot be sixteen, and also, its a bit unrealistic for the character to be 17 and know most things about computers. This is not just one planet's technology. We're talking about the whole galaxy.

Sir, I have revised my bio to your specifications.

Oh... Sorry my bad, I was oblivious.

Training roster updated. Hellgate squad updated as well.

Bio information

Callsign: Voth
Name: Viergoth
Race: Barabel
Gender: Male

Native Language: Barabel
Spoken Languages: Basic
Understood Languages: Ryl

Skin Color: Dull gray
Eye Color: Black
Height: 2.2 Meters (7.2 Feet)
Weight: 138 Kilograms (304 Lbs)
Age: 37 Galactic Standard Years
Physical Build: Large, lithe, and strong


Talents/Skills

Like all Barabels Voth is extremely tough and an excellent hunter. He requires no armor, his tough scales rejecting all but a direct blaster shot. He also requires no additional weapon, for his claws make excellent melee tools. He is, however, proficient with a blaster rifle and extremely skilled with knives. He prefers hand to hand combat and knife combat over long range encounters.


Personality

Barabels are not known for their charming personalities, and Voth is no exception. He lives for the thrill of the hunt, and prefers fresh kills to any kind of cooking. He is, however, more restrained than most of his kin, showing a loyal and courteous manner that is rare in Barabels. While he is not exactly friendly, he does not shy away from people either.


Physical Description

Huge, even by Barabel standards, he stands over seven feet tall. He possesses strength greater than that of most Barabel, which is to say that his physical prowess equals that of a wookie. He has incredible stamina, is extremely agile, and overall is a prime example of the Barabel species. He is extremely tough, his dull gray scales turning anything but a direct blaster bolt harmlessly away. Only the sharpest Vibroblade can penetrate his hide, allowing him to go without Stormtrooper armor.


History

Voth was born on Barabel I to uncertain parentage. He was raised as most Barabels, and he frequented the hunting grounds of his family. Even as a child he possessed great physical abilities and natural instincts, making him on of the greatest hunters of his brood. However, his personality set him apart from his brood mates in ways that other species can only begin to fathom.

After thirty years on Barabel I, Voth decided to get out and see the world. This urge alone separated him from the rest of his kin, as Barabels are rarely inclined to travel. For the next six years he made plans, and he prepared for his voyage into the Galaxy. He learned to speak Galactic Basic, and he developed an understanding of the Twi’lek language, Ryl. After plotting his travels for over half a decade, preparing for a trip of the likes of which few Barabel ever experience, he left Barabel I in search of something more.

For a few months he traveled around. He found that his presence upset humans and other smaller species, almost to the point where he could walk into a room and it would empty, just because of his presence. He began to resent his species. He wanted to find a place where his skills would be of help, not just a tool for the Elders of his Clan to wage war with.

After a few more months he met a VE recruiter. At first, Voth was astonished. The man didn’t run. And when the man offered Voth a position where he could use his skills, the Barabel gladly took it. Now he is a part of the VE Stormtrooper Corps, an elite fighting unit where he hopes his skills will be well used.

Private Crimson’s Information Datacard Overview


Personal
Full Name: Xiaron Darken
Call Sign: Crimson
Age: 30
Height: 2.1 Meters (6'10 Feet)
Weight: 115 Kilograms (255 lbs)
Hair Color: Black
Eye Color: Crimson (blood red)
Skin Color: Dark Green
Homeworld: Falleen
Native Language: Falleen
Spoken Language: Falleen, Galactic basic, Dashadi

Physical Attributes
Strength: Extreme
Speed: Extreme
Endurance: Excellent
Intelligence: High
Agility: Average
Perception: Average
Speeders: Average
Pioleting: Average
Computers: Low
Mechanics: Low


Appearance

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Racial Traits
Life spans averaging 250 years.  Ability to alter skin pigmentation. Naturally exuded pheromones at will, which can make him all but irresistible to both sexes. Resistant to mind tricks. Has green blood

Skills
Expert at hand-to-hand, experienced swordsman. Prefer to use rifles when needed to use a blaster.

Habits
Wants to kill rude people. Tries to measure up people.

Personality
A cruel sense of humor. Cold and emotionless. Still he is polite and distains rudeness. Hates rude people.

History
Born of the royal family Draken, Xiaron was gifted to have the best his planet would offer. As he grew older it was apparent that his skill was in combat. As his strength and speed was unmatched. His family gave him the best instructors they could buy on Falleen.

He found work in being hired muscle. At one time in his career he was the head a security for a prominent person in falleen society.  Leading a team of Dashades. He quickly became renowned on his home world for loving to fight. He would often enter into fights in underground matches.

Though he was able at using rifles he preferred to use his fist or a sword. His skill in the sword was gain by the instructors his family had hired for him. He often cared a sword with him while he worked as a warning or in invitation.

He was higly educated. Being teach highers standerds then most. Always tries to be polite, whether you are a enemy are not. He also is well verse in ancient battles and history. He was trained in war tactis as well as in liteture.

Like most young noble Falleen, he wanted to vist the galexy outside of his planet. Starting out on Curasant he wondered how he would far without work. Looking around for many day he found a advertise meant for the Imperial army. This seemed to be a good start as any.

Thous Xiaron joined the Imperial ranks as a stromtrooper.

Ok let me see what I can do. Sorry I think I was in a rush.

Thought the part about being cold. Well that is what his race the Falleen are like. Cold blooded, and green.

But I see what you mean now that a look over it. I did not go in to much detail about is histroy. But I kinda wanted it to look as a report. Which would mean less personal stuff. LOL no one would ever want to fight him lol.

I have modifeid him a bit. His abilites, skills, habits, personality, and bio.

Check it out and tell me what you think.

Name: Kryton
Age: 27
Ht: 1.8 meters (5’ 9”)
Wt: 70 kgs (154 lbs)
Hair: None
Eye: Yellow
Skin: Red
Home world: Iridonia
Birth world: Bothawui
Languages: Zabraki, Basic, and Bothese. Understands most other languages.

Appearance:

Kryton’s skin color is red, however his face is covered with a black tattoo with lines of red and yellow. Kryton’s eight horns form a circle around his head. Kryton’s yellow eyes are very intense and seem as if though they are staring through you from time to time. When out of uniform Kryton wears a black cloak that conceals a stealth suit. He has a vibro-knife concealed in his boot and blaster strapped to his leg. He has a zhaboka across his back that was given to him as a child.

History:

Kryton was born on Bothawui in a colony that strongly supported the empire. His parents were both archeologist who did research for the empire and they hoped that Kryton would follow in their footsteps. Kryton learned and played with Bothan younglings. He learned how to be some what stealthy playing with the Bothan younglings and learned how to understand a few languages in the Bothan school. Kryton’s father taught him about his clans and what it means to be a Zabrak. When Kryton was ten years old, a rebel bomb exploded at his school and killed many of his friends and classmates. Kryton has nothing but disgust for the rebels since that day.

Kryton’s parents were reassigned shortly after the explosion. They were sent on a short assignment to Korriban to study the ancient ruins there. Kryton spent most of his time in the ruins of an ancient academy. He would imagine that he was a Dark Jedi fighting the rebels. Kryton’s parents were sent to a space station one day to transport some artifacts they had collected. Kryton was sleeping at a family friend’s home when the news came that the station had been attacked by rebels. His mother and father took up arms against the rebels but the research station didn’t have very many defenses and it was quickly over ran and destroyed. The rebels had taken everything that mattered to him in the matter of eight months. Krytan was sent to live with his grandmother on Iridonia.

When Kryton turned thirteen his horns started to grow in and his grandmother held a ceremony to celebrate his journey into manhood. Everyone in his village was there. His grandmother gave him a zhaboka that belonged to his grandfather. She told Kryton the story of how the Zabrak spread across the galaxy. She also told him the story of his grandfather who was killed by the rebels on the second Death Star, while serving as a pilot. Then the other elders of the village recounted stories of other famous Zabrak from the clans. After the stories were done he received facial tattoos that displayed his clan heritage. He trained everyday with the zhaboka and he mastered it in less than two years. He was also trained in Zabrak martial arts as most all of Zabrak younglings are.

When Kryton was seventeen a rebel faction setup a camp about three clicks from his village. The imperial forces were detained and could not reach the encampment in time, so the villagers formed a militia. Kryton quickly joined and they setoff to destroy the rebels. The militia made it to the camp by nightfall. Kryton along with the rest of the militia crept into the camp. Kryton killed the guard with his zhaboka. He then slipped into the communications tent and killed the communications officer before he could send the signal for help. Kryton heard an alarm sound. When he exited the tent the battle was waging. He quickly joined the battle and exterminated ten rebels. After the battle was over, all the rebels lay dead and only two of the militia were wounded even though they were out numbered five to one. Kryton received another facial tattoo to show his bravery during the battle.

Two months later Kryton was eighteen and he decided to return to Bothawui to learn the art of subterfuge. He stayed on Bothawui for five years perfecting his skills at stealth, sabotage, hacking, and languages. After the five years on Bothawui, he returned to his village in Iridonia to find it in ruins. The rebels took revenge on his entire village shortly after he left for Bothawui. Kryton decided to return to Korriban and take some of the holos he had seen refering to assassination. He returned to Iridonia and learned the art of assassination from the holos he took from Korriban. Kryton learned how to use a sniper blaster rifle whle on Iridonia from the holos. During this time Kryton incorporated tattoos of the people he saw in the holos into his own clan tattoos. After four years of intense training, Kryton joined the Empire to hunt down every rebel scum in the galaxy.

Skills:

Kryton controls every step to ensure complete silence regardless if he is running or walking. He can understand many languages but only speaks three. He excels with computers and sabotage. He is also a skilled assassin. He is a master of the zhaboka and the sniper blaster rifle. He is not the strongest soldier, but what he lacks in strength he makes up for in dexterity and speed. He has moderate skills with a blaster but prefers to be in close combat with his zhaboka or at long range with a sniper blaster rifle.

Personality:

Kryton is very confident and this can sometimes gives the impression that he is arrogant. He is very prideful and sometimes seems as if though he is gloating. He remains focused in a battle and is calculating with every blow. Kryton is always respectful and speaks in a calm voice. He is rarely heard to raise his voice. He enjoys practicing with his zhaboka. Kryton also can be found in the cantina from time to time enjoying a drink with his friends and colleagues.

Goals:
Kryton wishes to use his skills in stealth and assassination to remove rebel officials, diplomats, and high ranking military officers. He wants to serve the Empire above all else and he is willing to do whatever it takes to accomplish any goals that he sets for himself.

Aeos I changed my profile by removing knowledge of the Sith. Is the way I have it now better?

That's fine ma'am. I altered my bio once again and added a little more to it.

Semian's Bio
Native Language:Basic
Hair Color:Brown
Eye Color:Gray
Skin Color: Pale
Height: 6'1"
Weight: 203
Age:23
Full Name:Semian Notwen
Physical Build: Average
Home world: Cloud City,Bespin
Birth world: Coruscant

History
Semian worked at his father's Restaurant, the Golden Freighter, until he decided he wanted more in life than just dirty dishes. He traveled the Galaxy until he was 18 when he found a home on Cloud City over Bespin. He amused himself playing Sabaac for 2 years and winning big almost every time. With his big fortune he bought his own ship and once again traveled across the galaxy. He ended up on a Imperial Remnant world and when the recruiters came, he signed up at once.

His Parents had no idea that he had joined the army. He did not tell them because they were big rebel sympathizers and a while after Semian left, his brother joined the New Republic Army.

Talents/Skills
Semian is a fantastic Gambler and is knowledgeable with computers and their parts. He is not a bad singer and actor, and on Coruscant he was often asked to take a part in in his school's yearly musical.

Personality
Semian is stubborn and if he fails at something, he will try again until he gets it right. He can some times be very ignorant of the fact that nothings perfect.

Nice signature pic. :P