Hair Color: Brown
Eye Color: Brown
Skin Color: Brown
Height: 6'0"
Weight:168
Age: 19
Name: Zane Lee
Physical Build: Muscular
Home World: Bothawui

Skills: Melee, natural speed, hacking, and repair.

Personality: Positive view on life. Very loyal and brave and is respective of his superiors.

History: Born and raised on Bothawui. He lived in a family that had some money but not rich a middle class family. He had a brother that he was very close to and a mother who cared very much about his and his brother and he also had a father that did not seem to care that much and was very abusive. His house was in the forest not very close to anything else. His brother disappeared mysteriously when he turned 15 leaving alone to defend himself agents this father's abusive behavior. Zane killed his father in anger when he turned 16 because his father and him got into a fight and in a rage of furry killed him. He flees from home and travels for a year in space before returning to Torolis. When he turns 17 he joins the army. Wile in the army he gets word that his brother is also in the army and he wants to find him because he misses him very much and has not seen him in 4 years, but still his past haunts him and everyday is reminded of how abusive his father was and how his last day in his house was like.

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Nooo, Cosmic, that's right. He would be nineteen since his brother disappeared when he was fifteen. But I don't think that he said he was nineteen in his biography. But I agree with Cosmic's number one. Try working on grammar and details. Why was his father abusive? Where did his mother go? You said when his brother disappeared he had to bare his fathers beatings alone.

Making sure your bio and about everything you write makes sense will make your life here at the VE a lot easier. Always read over what you wrote and make sure it makes sense.

Just a little advice for ya. ^_^
 
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