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July 11, 2005
10:15:59 PM
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My Character:
Name: Tony Kerea
Born: 2 years Before the Battle of Yavin
Eye Color: Black
Hair Color: Black
Age: 22
Physical Features: Unique Tatoos on back, arms, legs, chest, and head. 12 melee weapon, and 3 blaster shots that scarred him on his chest and back.
History: Born on Tadath and Raised By his Father William and His Mother Cindy . His Father was killed by the Rebels along with his mother, 6 years after Battle Of Yavin, when he was 4 years old. Then he was sent to his uncle and Aunt,by the academy. He currently lives on Tadath. He then went to the academy on the planet at the age 17, to be trained as a Special Imperial Trooper to fight the Rebellion and fight on as an Imperial. He was in every battle The Empire was in 21 BBY. His Speciality is Sniping, Hacking, Demolitions, Close Combat, and Mastery in Martial Arts, Heavy Arms, and Everything a Trooper needs. 
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July 12, 2005
12:06:27 AM
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Sorry to say this, but we are not allowed to be siths and lords when we join this. You have to be here for about 6 months, and have exceptionaly writing skill to be a dak jedi, well i heard that is some of the requiresment. I suggest you read Cosmic's bio at the top of the army main commnet, or even mine. hmm Knightwind's is also good.
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July 12, 2005
1:50:59 AM
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Corrected my bio!
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July 12, 2005
2:10:18 AM
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not even close to correcting it. -----------------------
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July 12, 2005
2:11:37 AM
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Wow....thats...ah...a little over the top -----------------------
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July 12, 2005
2:52:23 AM
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Is that better?
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July 12, 2005
2:55:36 AM
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How Do you get on the Dark Jedi Order?!!!!!!!! |
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July 12, 2005
3:48:21 AM
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You have to active for four or five months straight. You must be exceptionally good in writing. You must prove your self worthy and mature to be there, its and honour to be in the DJO not a right.
I am not a dark jedi, so correct my words if i am wrong on my reply to Raven's question.
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July 12, 2005
3:53:24 AM
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and it seems he can live forever (5000 years before Yavin,w ehn we're after it) -----------------------
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July 12, 2005
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July 12, 2005
5:42:31 AM
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Revan, dont take these comments up ofensive, its good to see that you didn't just register and then went off.
Its good to see you actually try to improve, so dont worry to much, Cosmic will post later telling yu exactly what you must edeit, or remove. So dont worry, this is just positive crtitism. 
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July 12, 2005
6:13:09 AM
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Okay Hellra, I'm Just waiting for Cosmic to help me with this. |
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July 12, 2005
6:57:55 AM
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Hehehehe that seems like a better thing to do then to keep correcting and throwing more things into a worse orbit, dont be discouraged though, Cosmic tends to see things diffrently and it is not that bad, just the details are off. -----------------------
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July 12, 2005
9:38:59 AM
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just relalised that he is 4334 years before the battle of yavin -----------------------
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July 12, 2005
12:05:13 AM
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Ok... touchups. 
1) We are currently in the Thrawn Era. Coruscant is currently under New Republic control, and The Vast Empire is currently in a campaign to retake our capital. This means that you need to be in our timeline, not 4000 years before.
2) We are post-Jedi Purge, meaning that no trained Force-sensitive beings (a.k.a. "Jedi") exist anymore. I'm not saying that there aren't any Force-sensitive beings, I'm saying that there are none that are trained.
3) Finding the secrets of "immortality" is... umm... shall we say near impossible. Anakin Skywalker (Darth Vader) couldn't even prevent his own death, and he chose the Dark Path in order to learn the secrets of an ever-lasting life.
It's a very creative tale, but make one that within our time period. -----------------------
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July 12, 2005
12:12:15 AM
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That is in issue i have discussed with others...... In the novelization(not the junior novel), while waiting for ob-wan to return, Yoda comes in contact with qui-gon who has learned something to do with eternal life. This would support my theory on how obi-wan let vader kill him. When he was struck down he closed his eyes and stood there...... |
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July 12, 2005
12:14:31 AM
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really? wow....and revan, it is ok just fix your things to become right and thats it. -----------------------
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July 12, 2005
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July 12, 2005
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July 12, 2005
9:04:23 PM
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fixed and yet. . .not
and after looking to the left i want to delete this post
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July 13, 2005
12:17:21 AM
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Umm... Ok, did you read my post at all. Marka Ragnos (if that's who you are referring to because that's the only person in SW history that has that name) died over 4000 years ago.
The Jedi are EXTINCT. None exist after the Jedi Purge.
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July 13, 2005
1:47:41 AM
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And no human being can survive on Korriban. It is a brutal, harsh world inhabited by Hsiss Dragons and Sith spirits. -----------------------
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July 13, 2005
2:36:39 AM
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His Speciality is Sniping, Hacking, Demolitions, Close Combat, and Mastery in Martial Arts, Heavy Arms, and Everything a Trooper needs. Not A JEDI!!!!!
This isn't really impressing me.
Read my post n the academy "ALL RECRUITS AND NEWBIES READ"...then go to the main comnet and read the topic "About writing"
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July 13, 2005
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July 13, 2005
6:28:08 AM
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Calm down Hellra. Perhaps, Revan needs to see someone privatly because he might get confused with all of us trying to fit in comments , and Snipes, thank god you got rid of that wookie avatar, I never liked it  . -----------------------
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July 13, 2005
5:18:26 PM
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Rev, Cos said the jedi are extinct, also if you got light saber scars and wounds you would be dead.
And what is it going help your char being imortal
why do you make you char god like?, click on my name, there you find my bio, you will see my char actually has character flaws and etc.
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July 14, 2005
2:43:18 AM
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Revan, you really need to read and follow my guidelines. Read them again, and then fix your post.
If you want to further progress yourself in our club, you need to learn how to follow directions.
You keep updating your bio, which tells me you're trying, but you need to learn how to read suggestions, absorb them, and then put them to use. -----------------------
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July 14, 2005
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I still think he should speak to someone privatly seeing that he still needs guidelines. -----------------------
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July 14, 2005
7:37:49 AM
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VEry good idea Hunter, maybe we should get some one who is a real expert of the time line and stuff, just write a small thing, then Cosmic could maybe compose a email stating what is expected and not expected of bio's -----------------------
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July 14, 2005
10:08:49 AM
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revan666, ok... this is proving to be a little difficult bud because you're not following directions. I know emailing you won't help, because you can see just as clearly here as you can in email, so read carefully to what I have written below:
1) Avoid ALL famous names altogether: Pick a different name for your father, DO NOT use the name of Ragnos, it is too famous. The first thing that will run through peoples' minds when they see it is the former Dark Lord of the Sith.
2) REMOVE ALL of the "I am immortal" stuff - it just isn't possible.
3) You could not have been born and raised on Korriban - it has a scorched landscape. In other words, it is unihabitable.
4) Your father could not have been killed by Jedi because the Jedi were extinct - none existed.
Do these following amendments. If you think it won't fit with your current story, then make another totally new story. -----------------------
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