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The Orginal Draft of Emnis
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June 29, 2005
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As you may know, I am Hunter Emnis( see name on side), the annoying little pathetic PFC you want to punch in the face.  Well I made up Hunter Emnis a looong time before VE ( I think a month before I started here). He wasnt always a recruit in the wraith squad or even part of the Empire. And thanks to vint, Hellra, Darr-Rann, Jakireth and ....yea thats it, on the 29th of July has inspired me to write this story for no apparent reason. What a way to mark my first month here :P.
(I probably wont finish it in one piece as it is a long story so feel free to reply and stuff and pay attention to edits. Is it okay if i double post?)
Some references refer to Zar Mulix so in a way this is his story too. And please try to ignore timeline errors, i beg of you. And lots of details are incorrect and purely out of my imagination so shut up.
Horrible Writing By:
NOT HUNTER EMNIS
The Rise of the Remnants
A long time ago, in a galaxy far, far away...
It has been years since the collapse of the Empire as the major power... A new republic has been formed under a Jedi Master called Luke Skywalker. Many once-great companies such as Trade Federation is collection its scattered parts and is re-emerging. Although, there are now the existence of the Jedi once again, the galaxy is not a safe place to be and the New Republic is still desperatly trying to stay standing. Far a way in a planet called (sorry people i forgot what planet it was... zar knows so zar please fill in the blank) a small army of retired troopers reborn an abandoned cortosis mine led by a commader that led a clone squad in the clone wars who goes by the name as Zar Mulix. As the galaxy tries to rebuild itself, an imperial scientist finds a way to create gateways to other times. The Empire jumping at the oppurtunity sends dark jedis and troops to the period in which the famous Darth Vader was about to betray the Emperor Palpatine, marking the Empire's fall. Tracked down by Luke Skywalker himself, a group of Jedi encountered the troops just as they destroyed Darth Vader and a battle took place. The Emporer, himself, participated but was heavily scarred from the battle and made a run going through the gateway the troops used to get in and found himself in a deserted planet as he felt his power slowly drain away. Time would soon come where the Emporer would be dead. The dangerous gateways opened throughout time creating chaos and havoc through the entire universe. Time and the galaxy are in peril this time...
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RE: The Orginal Draft of Emnis
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June 29, 2005
11:07:22 AM
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Hunter, with all "due" respect, that was pointless, you can post when you're ready to post, no ones gonna take your spot. Its ok you want to put that as an intro before a story in the same post, but now everyones waiting for it, hope its good.
Followup, see, edit. Ok good, nvm
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June 29, 2005
11:43:11 AM
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I just told you to read it to see if you could get it.... whatever i just edited it
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June 29, 2005
11:49:48 AM
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Hunts, i don't care about the timeline being wrong and stuff, but the upper ranks may... |
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June 29, 2005
11:51:40 AM
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stab me? what tell me.... ( im scared) -----------------------
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RE: The Orginal Draft of Emnis
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June 29, 2005
12:17:24 AM
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Emnis you are looking for troublw, VE isn't just about moving up in ranks or writing stories, its about your dedication, and lenghts you go to make your story fit in. If your storyline doesn't fit in with Ve's current time line, then you don't exist, |
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June 29, 2005
12:24:02 AM
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... uh-oh.... is there a delet button....
hehehehe I think i posted on the wrong board and things.
Right, this story is supposed to be for fun , i guess. i didnt imply it to talk about VE and ... lets just say it's not like other stories.
"I'm sorry"
Oh yes and Hellra, I'm not doing this to move ranks... i did it for people to see what the original Emnis was like and no i am not finished yet.
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June 29, 2005
12:43:00 AM
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i didn't say you were doing this for ranks, but if you show dedication in your stories, people will notice you, and that will help you in moving up....
No offense Hunts, im just being staright with you... -----------------------
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June 29, 2005
1:03:44 PM
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okay hellra i get it.... i guess ill continue this story and ill make other stories too.
*sigh* people and their ranks *shakes head*
OKAY PEOPLE GET OUT STORY OFFICIALLY CLOSED NOTHING TO SEE HERE>
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RE: The Orginal Draft of Emnis
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June 29, 2005
1:13:29 PM
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Ag, donnerse mense, flippit!..
Hunts, i was just giving some good critic, and i take back my words since you edited your story, and removed the thing what you said{nothing bad though}....happy?  -----------------------
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June 29, 2005
1:29:30 PM
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... This is the topic answering maching...
this topic is no longer here so leave a message after the beep.
beep -----------------------
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RE: The Orginal Draft of Emnis
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June 30, 2005
8:14:09 AM
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Hunter, its a bad thing to get things like dates and facts wrong, it shows that you really arent to dedicated to creating a good piece of writing. I mess up too, but I try to learn from when I do "mess up".
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June 30, 2005
8:20:22 AM
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... This is the topic answering maching...
this topic is no longer here so leave a message after the beep.
beep
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June 30, 2005
8:28:31 AM
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I already told him that Jak, but Hunts maybe you should just redo the story where it would fi in the timeline. |
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June 30, 2005
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Yah, good idea. You might want to let me and Hellra look it over as well, I'd be happy to help. -----------------------
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June 30, 2005
8:33:25 AM
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Your message has been accepted....
The lord would like to say :
That would be my regular bio and plus as Cosmic would have found out... Emnis in the orignal draft became a Sith Lord. His last name fits like that. -----------------------
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June 30, 2005
11:20:41 AM
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You become a Sith Lord......yeah I dont see that happening at this point, hell, I dont see myself turning into a Sith Lord -----------------------
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June 30, 2005
12:04:42 AM
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Jak, Hunter explain in his post, that in RL before he joined VE he had this character.....and the story... |
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June 30, 2005
3:44:07 PM
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Hellra is right and remember Hellra when i said my file had a Darth in it and i had to make a new one? Guess what the account was?
Darth Emnis...................... Yea if you are actually interested in this ask me or zar personally... -----------------------
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July 2, 2005
10:52:39 AM
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ok leave me out of this...just let me be, let a man play his game... -----------------------
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July 6, 2005
10:08:30 AM
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Hunter Emnis kicks Zar
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"Combine self-hate with pride,
a leader with a follower,
seriousness with immaturity,
smartness with idiocy,
merciful with relentlessness,
a friend with an enemy.
Combine two opposites,
and in the middle,
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July 6, 2005
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Careful, those damned ewoks bite... -----------------------
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July 6, 2005
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July 6, 2005
2:53:59 PM
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*Zar kicks Hunter then bites ze094. He then pats Jak on the head and would like on in return* -----------------------
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July 6, 2005
2:55:13 PM
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.... zar you scare me... and hunter isnt this the story that you told me?
If it is ze094 is in it..... Hunter and his wierd creations |
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July 7, 2005
6:53:36 AM
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yes in fact your counterpart in the story is in the story and WHOA 50 posts already .... *note to selve* never let ze094 use my computer while i am doing something else :P -----------------------
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seriousness with immaturity,
smartness with idiocy,
merciful with relentlessness,
a friend with an enemy.
Combine two opposites,
and in the middle, |
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July 8, 2005
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yeah i know right -----------------------
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July 10, 2005
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*Pats Zar and/or Ewok on the head
Hunter, are you planning on revamping your writing, it needs it. -----------------------
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July 10, 2005
11:32:00 AM
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hehehehe I will dont worry i will. -----------------------
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"Combine self-hate with pride,
a leader with a follower,
seriousness with immaturity,
smartness with idiocy,
merciful with relentlessness,
a friend with an enemy.
Combine two opposites,
and in the middle, |
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July 10, 2005
4:55:45 PM
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i dont know what revamp means but I think I need to too. My writing sucks, Im used to writing boring essays
edit: In school, imagination and creativity was discouraged
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