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drill ( bio )
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June 26, 2005
10:01:31 AM
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name:sTinGer
eye color: brown
hair color:black
age:18
scars: none
personality:He has become a tough and hard man, because he experienced many awfull things like his mom is getting executed right in font of him.
He got much anger in him.
history: I was 11 years old when i was separated from my mother, my mother was devorced from my father, he was a bandit who has been searched by the republic for years
My mother and I hid on the planet Tatooine, because they would probably would looking for us too.
Then some men from a village nearby betrayed us, the men told a squad of soldier of the republic where we hid.
they executed my mother right in front of my face.
they made me a servant. I will never forgive the republic for this all and i said to myself i would take revenge.
When i was 15 the rebels trained me in combat at Yavin because they were running out of men and they were in battle with the empire.
When I was 17 the empire took hands on yavin and i was their prisoner.
I decided to help the empire because i hated the new republic, so i told them information about where more rebel bases were.
They saw my hate to the rebels and offered me to be like one of them and I accepted the offer.
Now i m 18 and finished the basic trainings and hope to be a good soldier of the empire and to kill many rebels.:P
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RE: drill ( bio )
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June 26, 2005
10:11:46 AM
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Hi..nice bio, i was kinda expecting mre, but good bio none the less, it was okay...You will have to wait for cosmic to aprove of it...though |
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RE: drill ( bio )
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June 26, 2005
10:15:47 AM
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very interesting, very interesting indeed. Looks good, I wonder what Cosmic will say. If you want, add a little more description. -----------------------
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RE: drill ( bio )
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June 26, 2005
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RE: drill ( bio )
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June 26, 2005
11:07:27 AM
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Dont change it too much, we'll see what Cosmic says first. -----------------------
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RE: drill ( bio )
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June 26, 2005
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RE: drill ( bio )
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June 26, 2005
2:28:09 PM
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Maybe you could also tell us what type of personailty Stinger has...you know like is he friendly, happy etc |
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RE: drill ( bio )
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June 26, 2005
2:30:25 PM
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oh yes right, almost forgot about that.... wait i did forget about it ... well put that in, look at other people'sbios to see if you missed anything. -----------------------
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RE: drill ( bio )
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June 26, 2005
2:47:27 PM
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Well, I like the story. It's very intriguing. Definately makes for some great flash-back stories.
However, there are some things I need to point out (as usual with everyone :P)
1) Watch the grammar. Read your bio out loud. I'm sure you'll find what I did once you do this - some sentences just don't make sense.
2) Don't say "1 guy came". Write "One guy came". Writing the 1 there makes you appear lazy.
3) Pay attention to the timeline. The "Rebels" are pretty much behind us. I guess you can still say "Rebels", but we're more into the New Republic now. Also, I could see the Empire taking prisoners for use as slaves, but not the New Republic. They're goodie-goodies. I doubt they'd do that.
4) I'd like to see more of your character's personality. Yes, we have his history, but I'd like to see personality, behavior, likes, dislikes, etc. (Doesn't have to be long, but smooth, short, and to the point). -----------------------
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RE: drill ( bio )
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June 27, 2005
2:02:54 AM
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made the changes so probably it s good now
......................i hope................................
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June 27, 2005
11:05:55 AM
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Doesnt whats left of the Empire look at the New Republic as "rebels"? -----------------------
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June 27, 2005
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June 27, 2005
3:27:28 PM
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true..true but I'm sure Cosmic knows his stuff so i like to see how he would argue it. -----------------------
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June 27, 2005
4:16:43 PM
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Jack is write that the "Rebels" are called Rebels because they, as he said, toppled Palpatine. However, as you go further in the books, you eventually get to the New Rebulic "era".
Jack probably knows more about that stuff than I do since I haven't read any of the books. -----------------------
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June 27, 2005
4:20:20 PM
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Ok first off, before I make any more comments about your bio - are you from the States or from another country? -----------------------
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June 27, 2005
4:37:16 PM
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The Rebellion was the Rebellion (they called themselves this too) until the fall of Coruscant, not the death of the Emperor. So about 2-3 years after RotJ is when the "New Republic" was founded.
As far as I know, Thrawn was the last true Imperial to consider the NR as being rebels.
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June 27, 2005
5:03:14 PM
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yeah, in one of the books Peallon accidently refers to them as the New Republic and Thrawn says something to the effect of "might as well just call them what they call themselves, they've been doing it long enough" -----------------------
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June 27, 2005
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June 27, 2005
5:43:55 PM
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So sTinger, you did it right. -----------------------
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RE: drill ( bio )
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June 27, 2005
11:10:17 PM
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i m from the netherlands , so cosmic i think we got a time difference =D
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so vint ur saying i was right the first time or now?
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June 27, 2005
11:21:54 PM
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Yeah. Not worried about the time. I like to see what country the person is from before I start demanding grammar corrections.
You updated your bio well. Good job.  -----------------------
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RE: drill ( bio )
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June 27, 2005
11:23:34 PM
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wich country u live in?
and now what must i do...?
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June 28, 2005
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June 28, 2005
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well i hope so.....:S
if i m in squad ..what then? |
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RE: drill ( bio )
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June 28, 2005
1:59:03 PM
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Well when you get in a squad, Cosmic will tell you, you are going to meet your eight fellow squad members etc. The squad leader always post a story where your squad participate in meaning they write on the mission stories or training story.
You have to work on your spec stories as well, so have a look at what you want to do. I suggest again go look in the storm corp story boards ar various squad stories to have a beter explanation and example...
Post any further question if you need help....i am getting the feeling i missed something...
Okay, just remembered, not only do you take part in training and mission stories, you have to attend meetings and report to your squad leader weekly giving a full detailed report of what you did, how many times you were on irc, did you play games? etc. Correctr me i f i am wrong....
Remember to stay active, thats is all i can think of for now...
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June 28, 2005
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This is exactly why I say in all my welcome messages "Check your email often". I sent you an email about a day or two bud. You're in Nightstalkers. -----------------------
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July 12, 2005
1:53:40 AM
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Good Story and all keep going at it
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July 12, 2005
6:04:49 PM
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um...not to sound too mean or anything but look at the date of the last post. Singer already got placed in a squad like 2 weeks ago. Just saying -----------------------
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July 12, 2005
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Oh shhh Zar let him have his fun -----------------------
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RE: drill ( bio )
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July 13, 2005
12:35:38 AM
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fine, just saying and trying to follow the rules..... -----------------------
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