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RE: "Objective: Resuce on Kessel" Nazgul Story Not
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RE: "Objective: Resuce on Kessel" Nazgul Story Not
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June 21, 2005
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Its just better for everybody if they know what this place actually 'looks like'. Its hard to create a strategy or explain what it is your even doing if you don't know your surroundings in general.
(Edit: You can go on with what I posted above, but I've got a plan for obtaining the information we need to plan a rescue operation. I'm thinkin grappling hooks, sedetives, and explosive charges...)
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June 21, 2005
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RE: "Objective: Resuce on Kessel" Nazgul Story Not
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June 22, 2005
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Hey guys sorry i haven't been posting all that much i have exams this week and i am working on the Special project Shazam asked me to do. its a time consuming thing, ill try to post as much as i can but its a hectic week. -----------------------
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RE: "Objective: Resuce on Kessel" Nazgul Story Not
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June 22, 2005
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RE: "Objective: Resuce on Kessel" Nazgul Story Not
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June 22, 2005
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I've been busy, as I've explained on the Main Navy Comnet. I've done some research on Kessel, know about every single spice drug that has been included in any writing ever related to Star Wars. That's encyclopedia does a damned good job, you just gotta know how to find stuff.
Anyway, I'll try to get my post in as soon as possible. It's pretty hard right now. But when I do, it'll explain the surroundings quite well. Gangs, drugs, guards, conditions, living quarters, etc. I just need to find time. -----------------------
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June 22, 2005
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June 23, 2005
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I say we use those glimmer stix or whatever they are to do some telepathy, lol. -----------------------
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June 23, 2005
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RE: "Objective: Resuce on Kessel" Nazgul Story Not
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June 23, 2005
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I've gotta few things to say before I leave for practice tonight.
1) The encylcopedia at: http://www1.theforce.net/CUSWE (it's not that address anymore, but it'll still get you there.
2) Jack, DJ went with Shazam and his group in the story.
3) It's glitterstim, pretty much the only kinda spice on Kessel. Might not be a bad idea to use it. That's why the Empire controls the planet anyway.
4) Maybe tomorrow, I can find time to write. I'm almost done with the musical. -----------------------
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June 23, 2005
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RE: "Objective: Resuce on Kessel" Nazgul Story Not
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June 30, 2005
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Alright, my group has been captured. Your turn Jack.
(Take your time DJ, think reasonaby, I had to stretch my post a bit because of the fact we were still well armed. This is good though and atleast you guys are tryin, good job.)
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June 30, 2005
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He He got caught up in the moment Shazam sorry about that  -----------------------
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June 30, 2005
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RE: "Objective: Resuce on Kessel" Nazgul Story Not
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June 30, 2005
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I think our story is moving way too fast..you know that character development stuff...yeah, I really don't see anything like that in any of our posts. I think we need to slow down a bit and not be so rushed like we're just trying to get this over with.
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June 30, 2005
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I have our guys running around... We're going into hiding before we do anything btw... We have where Dar is and stuff, but we can't possibly go after him at the moment. Thought it was smart to get out of the cell right away though...
Jen is correct though, we need to be doing actual 'character developement'. Art is a very good example for practice. His character is very identiifiable because of how little he includes himself unless he has too. Use this character. I kind of have a problemw this because none of the people I'm with have an updated bio, most don't have one at all... So I'm making them up on my own. Good luck, and keep tryin guys. Rock on. -----------------------
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July 1, 2005
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July 1, 2005
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Shazam why isnt the others posting in our group it seems to be only you and some me -----------------------
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RE: "Objective: Resuce on Kessel" Nazgul Story Not
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July 1, 2005
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Jack, I'm kinda confused on this...who all is in our group..? Is it just you, Corwin, Arturus, and me? Or is the rest of the squadron with us? -----------------------
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RE: "Objective: Resuce on Kessel" Nazgul Story Not
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July 1, 2005
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Take who you want besides those in my group. The actives ones I should say....
And Raddon might be around but I know Aldur is. They're getting there, you must be patient, but maybe this will give you some time to be creative, dunno. Its how you use it all... -----------------------
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July 1, 2005
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RE: "Objective: Resuce on Kessel" Nazgul Story Not
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July 2, 2005
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Dude... Not to come down on you or anything, but if an imperial officers uniform and the sight of three terrifying Royal Guards didn't work. How will stormtroopers that are infamous for thier bad aim work? Lol. I'm just wondering if you were going to try to walk up to the same guy. Although it might have been funny to see you guys thrown into the exact same predicament presented to my group. Keep rockin now. -----------------------
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RE: "Objective: Resuce on Kessel" Nazgul Story Not
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July 2, 2005
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RE: "Objective: Resuce on Kessel" Nazgul Story Not
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July 7, 2005
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I finally got a post in guys! Yay! ^-^ -----------------------
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July 12, 2005
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Ok, be careful on some of the things we're putting in the story now. DJ, not that I'm ragging on you or anything, but some of the things about Kessel are of delicate matter since being in novels. Energy spiders probably aren't scared of fire. If anything, attracted. Let me put some stats on here about them:
Energy Spider
Category: Creatures
Type: Insects
Planet of Origin: Kessel
a denizen of the Kessel spice mines, this spider looked like it had been made of glass. They apparently are another source of the glitterstim spice, which they also consume and synthesize for use as a webbing to trap the bogeys for food. They use their fangs to impale their victims and drain their life-energy. Their rounded bodies are studded with dozens of legs, hundreds of mouths, and literaly thousands of eyes. Also known as spice spiders, it was rumored that energy spiders grew one leg for every year of growth, but this has never been proven.
Curtiousy of theforce.net encyclopedia
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July 13, 2005
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July 13, 2005
9:38:08 PM
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Guys... Seriously now.
I'm starting to seriously wonder about things. I don't think things are what they seem.
When your given a command position and told to motivate your people, one might say," You need to point out the good things as well as the bad stuff"... I'm really a beleiver in that. I mean, I try hard to keep optomistic. And true, many of you have improved in ability greatly, writing, storytelling, and over all attitude wise. HOWEVER. If you truly have improved you need to take things into account.
Lemme just point a few things out to you.
1) You need to read every single post after your last. Or any other that you havn't read really... Read the post after my last one here a couple of days ago. Did you guys even follow what you had set up from before hand? DJ... You got carried off by a spider... You've disappeared. Jack and Art, you realize you have to go through the maw to get to Kessel, and that my friends should be keeping you on your toes. And I'm pretty darned sure I've mentioned Aldur being in my group more than a couple of times.
2) Incorporating what we've already worked on is a major part of our story developing. Jack... I'm ganna have to come down on you for that filler you put in... That post was quite litterly, useless. I mean, you basically made a joke, that didn't go along with any of the characters, not most of them anyways,(thus we created the bios for such an occasion), and you restated previous information. Dude... C'mon. Part of your job is to help me move the squadron along, which also means, moving the squadron story along.
3) Keeping a story good... This is something I think we've been doing awesomely on. I mean, we've really actually 'improved'. That might be the one area of the bios I've really been seeing frequented. But, Dar, as cool as that little action scene was, it was borderline. I don't care who you are, that's insane taking on 25 people and coming out of it pretty much fine. One man at a time, maybe, but we're talkin 25 prison hardened people. I won't go down on ya for it though, because I realize you were trying to exhibit your character. Thats fine.
Half of keeping a story good, is keeping the facts straight. I know I probably screw this up more than anyone, but if someone lets you know something, like Dar mentioning the fact the spiders may be attracted to the fire rather than fear it... You should change it. I just pointed out Aldur was in my group, not Jacks, he should change it.
I bring all these things up because I want us to get better. To realize how we can be so much more awesome, truly having a good time writing. Ragging on you about how you make silly mistakes isn't the way to go, I know, but you guys need to get your act together, because you have all these new tools at your finger tips, yet you revert to your old ways, really kind of ignoring what we've created. That's not alright with me.
So in its most simple form:
Read eachothers post, use what you already know, and keep your crap straight. Really they all kind of grow off eachother, almost one in the same. But I hope presenting them differently put them in a new light for you. Hopefully this will be a bit more of a wakeup call rather than a lashing. This is meant to help, not further burden your best attempts at writing.
Now keep rockin, because I know you have been. If you guys can continue to put the same effort as you have been to just flat out 'write', and force them into the avenues I've presented here, I think we can really start having some fun. Everything else seems to be getting there. -----------------------
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July 13, 2005
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"Jack and Art, you realize you have to go through the maw to get to Kessel, and that my friends should be keeping you on your toes." No I didn't realize but thanks for pointing that out, I am sure I can edit a post from ages ago to mention us exiting and re-entering hyperspace in order to manouever around it.
Other than that, exceptionally well said Shazam, you drove home the point exactly!
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"The way of war is a way of deception. When able, feign inability; when deploying troops, appear not to be. When near, appear far; when far, appear near. Lure with bait; strike with chaos. If the enemy is full, be prepared. If strong, avoid him. If he is angry, disconcert him. If he is weak, stir him to pride. If he is relaxed, harry him; if his men are harmonious, split them. Attack where he is unprepared; appear where you are unexpected. This is victory in warfare; it cannot be divulged in advance. Victory belongs to the side that scores most in the temple calculations before battle. Most spells victory; least spells defeat; none, surer defeat. I see it in this way, and the outcome is apparent." -- Sun Tzu
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July 14, 2005
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Watch what you say bud. I did mention the maw in an earlier post, and I said that your post was worthless either way and didn't go along with any of the things we were suggesting to be worked on. It was a useless filler. Actually mentioning the time would have made it less so... But instead, you turned it into a joke, which apparently, doesn't go with what anyone has theirYou have been keeping your group in space, doing basically nothing but repeating the same information over and over when you should be leading them to Kessel. Please, this isn't supposed to aggravate your emotions, more set you on a clearer path. Read your post, correct if you can, and keep it straight. -----------------------
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