You definently need to check your grammar a bit, and you need to put spaces after your periods, and after your punctuation, and after each word you type.

Read some of my posts or others, and just look at the format we write in.

Action
Dialogue

"Hey Billy Bob, Sup?" said John

"Not much John, how about you?"

Kinda like that when you use dialoge.  I would suggest getting the 2007 edition of Writers Incorporated, or just looking at some online tutorials for writing etiquette.

Just some helpful critisizm.

As for my activity - I'm on full load.  I'll be posting every day that I see someone else has posted, but I refuse to double post.  You can expect me to be around every day of the week, well, not day, usually late at night or early in the morning, but I'm definenetly here.

Thanks for letting us know whats going on HellKite.  If you get ahold of Kriust/Leon, let him know that he needs to send in a report or atleast let us know what he's up to.

Good job to everyone else. Than, your a great commander, and I commend you for putting up with me :P

C, your doing very well in your posts, and I would suggest that you maybe look into getting better with your grammar and your punctuation.  The spell checker thats built in is for a reason - use it to your own discretion.

Gooday'

Thanks.Its just that I didnt know how much I could impact the story.I didnt want to do something that might affect the story to much and change it.

See, now I used to have that problem.  Wondering if your going to affect the entire story with our posts.

If your nervous about it, get online on IRC and talk to someone about exactly what your doing, and you should be able to get it figured out, if not, just look back through the story briefing and what has happened.  Even if you mess up your post and we see something wrong with it, there is an editing button that can undo pretty much anything you have done, or we can have one of the modators fix your post up.  This is the reason that I would like to start a thread for our next story that each person gives a summary of what they've done in their posts.  I know we've done it before, and we can do it again.

Krius, that report, I'm going to say that I would like to see it by tomorrow night at midnight.  We really need to know if your going to be doing both Navy and Army because this is crunch time.  We are going to be starting the co-division campaign, which includes the ESC, and we really need to know if your going to be around or not.

I was talking to Shaz, and I'm pretty sure he's going to be doing a VEN wide AWOL check pretty soon, so keep your heads up for that.

I've gotta work tonight and will be with my girlfriend afterwords, but you can expect to see me online around midnight.

Keep it up Max, your doing good.

I'll have updated info and understanding of the story for those of you who didn't catch our little session with Fury the other day- should show up on the Commander's ComNet very soon.

Ok I posted, and I don't really have a clue about what is going on, so I just put Krius's opinion on the matter. Yeah, its short, but I don't want to write anything that is going to screw up the story, and I haven't been mentioned once throughout the last 5 or 6 posts. Thanks Tnepres for at least pointing me in a certain direction, and I was wondering if you could get us into a situation that I could get us out of in my next post.

Sorry for the length, but I need to shower and go to bed. I haven't even eaten dinner yet. You all have a good one.

The majority of Kaph is at Commander's ComNet level, so the joint story with the Army shouldn't be anything new to you. We need to start talking about it ASAP. I want to make it clear right now that it is up to the respective FL's to let the FM's onto what is going on since they can't see the Commander's Section, thus having very limited information on the topic.

As most of you know, this story is suppose to be very flight orientated. So much in fact that different flights are to have a different story line. My idea is that the squadron starts out the story and ends the story as a collective group. What is important to get right is the time in between.

After the splitting point, Flight Leaders will be in complete control of their flight's story line. All I am going to do is make recommendations if they are greatly needed. FL's, this is part of my test. I want to see how well you can handle this.

So about planning, we can start throwing ideas out as a squadron to start off, let everyone get a general idea of what is going on. But I eventually want flights to start talking about ideas amongst only themselves. It would be nice if we could use Shaz's idea of flight's plot lines surprising the rest of the squadron to enhance the story.

Like I said, we need to start talking about this ASAP. Considering I broke away from the post ESC Story chaos by starting a new story, I would like to think that our squadron is fairly independent. I don't think we need Shaz holding our hands on this one. Unlike the other groups, our squadron is in constant communication. We can achieve this by our own will.

That is all on this from me for now. Questions are as good as ideas for they lead to ideas.

P.S. I gave Jaden permission to post before I did.

Ok, I'm at school now in my computer class, and Than, I have to say that last pos was BAD ASS!!!!!! That was exactly what I was hoping you'd do with my idea. Well not exactly, but better then what I was thinking.

I'm gonna post today, and this time it will actually be good.I hope. I have an essay to type out so  don't know how much time will be on my hands. Oh, and one more thing, so my Flight is pretty much made up of NPC's?

But in RL Hellkite is in my Flight now right?

EDIT: Oh yea, when are we starting on the Army story? All I have been reading on the Commanders Comnet is the story plot, do we have an actual start date yet?

Everyone check out Fury's Post. I understand that the whole map thing is confusing so here's the section you actually have to look at. Look to the bottom left of the core world section and you should start seeing the planets Fury is talking about.

Lol you read my mind, but yeah, I wasn't really expecting a promotion. Thanks though a lot Than Sion, and congrats to C-3 and Max on the promo's also. Ok, so, my first week of school is coming to an end, and Wrestling practice is starting next week, this is gonna sound funny, but I think I can actually be more active next week lol. I'm getting acustomed to the schedule, homework, and all that good stuff.

So yeah, hopefully we'll be seeing some more activity coming from me and congrats to everyone once again.

that's pretty much it, and I'm about to send my report in right now because I won't be home tonight. Hellkite, it'd be cool to see a report coming from you to, but with my lack of activity, I won't go complaining.

Oh and Jaden, I never got to say welcome to the Squadron, but yeah, here it is lol. Thanks for helping us keep active and stuff.

You all have a good one.

haha, it wouldn't be unless you make it your last.

Oh, for reports >>

I couldn't get on Friday but I can send them late if you guys want.

And Krius =P sorry, I sent my reports to Than before cause I wasn't in your flight till this week.

I hope you all are keeping up to date with the info Fury is dishing out.

Hey, I just passed the Aviator Exam, and was put into this squad by Shazam. Any details on what this team has been up to for the past while?

Thanks

I haven't been able to get on much lately and from what I see, we're attacking a fleet of ships? Am I right?

Ok, after looking at Shaz's last post in he 8.5 Info Topic, I've come to the conclusion that we can't really do anything as of now. I made a post contesting his that expresses my reasoning.

Here's how it is going to roll, if 8.5 Phase II doesn't fall through by the middle of next week at the latest, I'm just going to start a new story. There is no reason we have to be dragged down with this concept if it sinks, just like we rowed away when the after math of the ESC took the rest of the Navy down with it.

Don't worry guys, as long as I am Commander of Kaph I'm going to make every effort to keep this squadron from going down.