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  RE: The 58th "Strill" Squadron Topic
April 27, 2013 3:48:41 AM    View the profile of Gurlanin 
The .... er .... special forces people .... er .... umm ...... died, or something? Hopefully?

<.<

>.>
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  RE: The 58th "Strill" Squadron Topic
April 27, 2013 7:31:48 AM    View the profile of Gurlanin 
Oh my goodness! REPORTS! I totally forgot. I blame the missus. She distracted me with .... food .... and things ........


ANYWAY

Doing report now.
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  RE: The 58th "Strill" Squadron Topic
April 27, 2013 4:20:55 PM    View the profile of Gurlanin 
Three of my posts in a row on this discussion? Something's wrong.

Anyhow, my lovely SCO and SXO: how are we rescuing our beloved NCC? Suggestions?
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  RE: The 58th "Strill" Squadron Topic
April 27, 2013 11:38:00 PM    View the profile of Joamer 
Woooooooork.

Also will post soon and get us moving with new plans.
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  RE: The 58th "Strill" Squadron Topic
April 27, 2013 11:51:24 PM    View the profile of Trykon 
Yeah, just for clarity's sake: the NCC kidnapping plotline is more or less in the hands of Serpent and StOrMz himself.  If you guys have ideas about it, you're welcome to work with them, but Gurlanin, you should focus on Strill's plotline: survive the attack! 
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  RE: The 58th "Strill" Squadron Topic
April 28, 2013 6:07:18 AM    View the profile of Gurlanin 
But you said ..... but .........

Okay ....
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May 1, 2013 5:43:09 PM    View the profile of Joamer 
All welcome our newest pilot Taitos has graduated and been placed with us. I'm sure everyone will coin in shortly and introduce themselves. Our current story is in it's final stages so if you would like we could add you maybe. Though with comms down it will be very tricky to do it correctly.

The story is VEN:Counterpunch: Death. Located on the Naval Story board. Feel free to browse over it though you are not required to read all five pages of craziness unless you really want to.

We are also on IRC, well a few of us anyways. If you would like to join we will be here normally all the time.
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  RE: The 58th "Strill" Squadron Topic
May 1, 2013 5:56:36 PM    View the profile of Gurlanin 
Yay, I'm no longer the newbie!

Welcome, Taitos. I'm Gurlanin, your friendly neighbourhood Brit, though most people call me just call me Gur. Feel free to ask me any and all questions.

Hey, Joamer: will newbie be taking Penin's place in Besh?
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  RE: The 58th "Strill" Squadron Topic
May 1, 2013 6:00:20 PM    View the profile of Joamer 
Looking at the roster it's the only spot open without moving folks around. So yes, Taitos you shall be Iron 4 of Besh Flight. Your Flight Lead is the XO Avalar.
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  RE: The 58th "Strill" Squadron Topic
May 1, 2013 6:03:17 PM    View the profile of Gurlanin 
Don't worry, newbie: you'll be fine. Besh flight is where the cool cats hang out, so to speak.
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May 1, 2013 6:11:51 PM    View the profile of Avalar 
I've already introduced myself but I'm chiming in my congrats too!

Also, what is our in-story explanation for his sudden arrival? Best to have everything clear OOC so that we can write better.
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  RE: The 58th "Strill" Squadron Topic
May 1, 2013 6:32:16 PM    View the profile of Trykon 
Some possibilities:

Taltos writes as an NPC.

Taltos writes as a pilot from a ship in Second Fleet, who's forced to crash-land on Gwodd LK nale, where he does feats that catch Strill's attention.

Taltos, though serving in Strill OOC, writes IC as a pilot in another squadron, for the remaining few days of the story.
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May 1, 2013 7:04:56 PM    View the profile of Taltos 
Senior Crewman Taltos Kothari reporting for duty!
Pleased to meet you all!

I'll keep catching up on Counterpunch: Death and see if there's a good way to get a few posts in constructively. If anyone has suggestions for a way in, or an NPC to take over, I'll be happy to hear it, otherwise I assume T will be a fresh recruit to replace losses when the next story begins.
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May 1, 2013 7:06:09 PM    View the profile of Maroy 
If you're up for it, I could write you in with Chlovi for the remainder of the battle. I can make a quick edit to my latest post to reflect that, and then get in touch and see where to go from there. It'd be nice having another writer to collaborate with.
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May 1, 2013 7:11:27 PM    View the profile of Trykon 
That's a good notion, too.  OOC, you'd still be in Strill, but for the purposes of jumping into a story right away, you could serve as a replacement pilot for Chlovi in this final battle.  Up to you, of course, but we'd love to have your first post on an active-duty story be part of the record-breaking Counterpunch arc. 
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May 1, 2013 7:12:53 PM    View the profile of Avalar 
Heehee. I may also add, T, that Death is on the brink of being the most posted story of all time in the Navy history, so we're scrambling to beat that number. We've got to beat 156 and so far we are at 147. Not only do we get the satisfaction of having the highest post count in this story, Tryk has also alluded to potential prizes... of which Strill may earn something special...

So on that note, I am also going to be posting. We also have a Google doc which we call the "Strill Collab Doc" that I will send you. It's not a requirement to use it at all, but it does make it easy for live collaboration if you ever want to try it. Joamer and I have a tendency to write together since we can usually find the time to. But once again, it's not a requirement.
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May 1, 2013 8:23:00 PM    View the profile of Avalar 
All right, I shot out a post. Not my best but it catches Makenna up at least.

Can't wait to see the next plot point. Maybe I'll write as an ID pilot too... maybe...
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May 2, 2013 12:15:50 AM    View the profile of Taltos 
I think it might work if I come in as a green recruit, pulled from academy to replenish the starfighter contingent on the Adjudicator. During the final battle I'll end up in an improvised wing with your pilots currently performing ground attack, and later be offered the Iron 4 position in Strill after the battle.

Side discussion: What's the policy as far as canonicity of Imperial Center Store items (obvious joke items aside)? In particular the Eta-5 Interceptor.
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Canon-wise, it's introduced in 40ABY, well past our timeframe, and used by the New Republic. If we disregard that and take it as canon in the VE timeline - or rename it to the Eta-4 Interceptor and avoid the issue - then T could make a very good IC argument as to why it might be perfectly suited to Strill Squadron's mission profile, and an ideal choice of future upgrade!

- Eta-5 Interceptor on Wookieepedia
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May 2, 2013 12:30:03 AM    View the profile of Joamer 
In big stories where our fleet is all together we tend to use what craft is assigned to us. Right now it's the Interceptor, in time we are slated to get more unique craft.

During stories where we are operating in a non-official role we can possibly use other fighters.





Avvie is smarter than me so I fixed something.
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  RE: The 58th "Strill" Squadron Topic
May 2, 2013 2:04:44 AM    View the profile of Trykon 
The canonicity of Imperial Center Store purchases is not a fixed thing, but rather varies depending mostly on the activity, contributions, and standing of the member in question.  For now, it's best to leave ICS purchases as a sort of separate, personal canon, and leave them out of official unit stories, until you get a better grasp of the taboos/traditions around that sort of thing.  In time, you can start integrating your (largely OOC) possessions with your (largely IC) life as a character.

That particular craft (Eta-5), as you note, is outside our current timeframe, so it likely won't make it into official club stories of this era, no matter what your eventual rank/position... I will say this, though: Chapter 9 is coming, and there are plenty of craft, familiar and new, that may be making appearances.    My hinting isn't particularly subtle, so I'll just say it: if we break this record, I can afford to be more generous at rewards time to match.  That includes the usual OOC awards, like medals, ribbons, promotions, and shinies of all kinds (including new ones, and in greater numbers than usual), but it also can include IC rewards, like new craft and equipment.  It's a sort of a help-me-to-help-you situation. 
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May 2, 2013 2:34:21 AM    View the profile of Gurlanin 
Woohoo! Go prizes!
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May 2, 2013 2:46:16 AM    View the profile of Taltos 
Muahahaha. I like the hinting. Good canon policy too.
I'll be posting tomorrow to pay my dues toward those shiny rewards for my squadronmates and I.
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May 2, 2013 2:48:43 AM    View the profile of Gurlanin 
I see what you're doing, Tally ..... jumping on the end of a record breaker to get the shinies ......

XD
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May 2, 2013 10:20:14 AM    View the profile of Avalar 
This is the final countdown! 9 posts left!

I'll be doing that while we near the end here.

Also it's reports day! Send in your reports to Joamer and I or bad things will happen. Very bad things.... >.>

Keep posting on Death everybody. We're so close to our prize.
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May 2, 2013 10:21:59 AM    View the profile of Gurlanin 
Is it bad that that song is now swimming around my head?

And my report should already be in your and Joamer's inboxes.
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May 2, 2013 10:39:16 AM    View the profile of Avalar 
I saw it this morning. You're good, Gur.

And yes. I'm singing it now too. I knew it was a bad idea to post it.
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May 2, 2013 10:41:46 AM    View the profile of Gurlanin 
LET'S GET EVERYONE SINGING IT!

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May 2, 2013 11:35:04 AM    View the profile of Taltos 
Post is up on Counterpunch: Death!
It's just a short one, but I hope it'll do the job of introducing Taltos to the world and setting the stage for his arrival in Strill Squadron. Let me know if anything needs changing.
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  RE: The 58th "Strill" Squadron Topic
May 2, 2013 3:30:38 PM    View the profile of Trykon 
Great intro, Taltos!  Some good internal thoughts for your character, and convincing description.

But it's a little short.  The Navy has a 500-word-minimum guideline for posts to official stories, and the reason for that is to try to ensure that every post "works" as a miniature story in itself: a progression, with a beginning, middle, and end.  Your post is great prose, but because it's so short, I didn't get a sense of that progression.  It wasn't a full scene.

So, when you get a chance, add a few more paragraphs, giving the character a problem of some kind (conflict), and showing at least an initial reaction to that problem.  You don't have to write a novel, every post, but having a sense of something happening, every time, either physically in three-dimensional space or internally within a character, is what we're aiming for.

Again, it's a great start, and like the others I'm thrilled to have you leap into this one before it's over.  If anything, I just want more! 
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  RE: The 58th "Strill" Squadron Topic
May 2, 2013 5:39:20 PM    View the profile of Avalar 
Nah. He's in Strill. We'll make him write grand novels. 2k minimum.

Heehee but in all seriousness, Tryk's advice is spot on. Also, within the VE we are totally ok with writing NPC's and other people's characters. Of course if you do write another person's character, always make sure you have permission so that they don't end up getting misused.

With that, 8 posts left!
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