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Killigon's Bio
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October 23, 2006
4:09:33 PM
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Physical Appearance
Full name: Killigon Talquamor
Native Language: basic
Species: Klatooinian
Homeworld: Tatooine
Hair: none
Skin color: Basic brown with Blue Lines along his face.
Eye Color: Bright Blue.
Physical build: Scrawny
Height: 5'10"
Weight: 131 lbs
Age: 23
Talents and Skills
1) Knows shrywiiwook (can't speak)
2) Is good with a computer
Background history
Killigon was born in The Hutt's custody during the war against Xim The Despot. His mother, Xin Kog-Talquamor, was a Run-away who joined the empire (or so he was told, she actually was thrown to the Sarlacc pit) while his father, Barada, was a Skiff Pilot. Killigon was a guard for the Droid-repair room as soon as he turned 8.
Killigon dreamed of joining the Empire. He began to plot his daring escape; making it more and more exciting every time. (When the Carbonated Han Solo came in he had just added 60 Rancors and had taken away his weapons.) Instead, He escaped with his father on his (the Father's) Skiff when Jabba's Sail Barge was blown into Smithereens. They quickly evacuated to Mos Eisely before the survivor's back at Jabba's palace would try to track the Skiff.
There they found a Pilot willing to take them to Couruscant. Once there, they made a life. Killigon became an Engineer and Barada became a Pilot. What they weren't expecting was that ex-soldiers of Jabba The Hutt found them. They kept on moving from City section to City Section in hopes of losing their deadly enemies. Whenver they did, it wasn't for long. A couple of weeks at the most.
Trouble wouldn't stop following them.
They eventually took a shuttle to Hathrox III. That did not stop their pursuers. Eventually Barada was Killed. Killigon's life was shattered. He gave himself up to the late Jabba's soldiers and took on their life. He moved from corrupted job to Corrupted job Until he joined the Empire to try to get away from it.
His former troubles had ended, but because of his act, worse ones had come. The troubles had moved from Running away from Gangsters to trying to stay alive. And it only gets worse.
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RE: Killigon's Bio
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October 23, 2006
4:23:12 PM
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lightsaber color?
Your bio seems to be a bit vague, cause that came out of nowhere, but you can't have a lightsaber, or even have any force ability. You can't even say you're force sensative. ----------------------- Corporal Yillis
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Killigon
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RE: Killigon's Bio
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October 23, 2006
4:26:54 PM
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Crud. need to clarify that. It was just My character's day-dream. I'll take it out.
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RE: Killigon's Bio
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October 23, 2006
4:40:14 PM
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You would be pretty old if you were thier for Jabba..XD ----------------------- ~_^
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Killigon
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RE: Killigon's Bio
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October 23, 2006
5:28:44 PM
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Well, if this takes place about 10 years after ROTJ and I'm 23, that means I was born 13 years before ROTJ, that means I would be round. (assuming the whole 10 years thing is correct.)
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RE: Killigon's Bio
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October 23, 2006
5:52:50 PM
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Sorry for intruding, but you also have to take into consideration Wookiees age slower than humans during a standard year. ----------------------- Jester Squad
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Killigon
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RE: Killigon's Bio
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October 23, 2006
6:08:59 PM
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Yeah, about that, I'm not a Wookie. That's just my Avatar.
Edit: O.K., when I joined, I planned on being a wookie, but i decided to change. So how do I change my species on my profile?
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RE: Killigon's Bio
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October 23, 2006
7:12:14 PM
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Just one thing that I notice. The wookie language is Shyriiwook. Didn't read the story or anything, but that is just something I had to point out. ----------------------- DarkDragoons
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RE: Killigon's Bio
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October 23, 2006
9:47:01 PM
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Interesting bio. One thing I'd like to see before approving this is a more grammatically correct bio. You are using uppercase letters on some words that do not need them/shouldn't have them. Proofread the bio before submitting it.
Second minor detail: as far as I know, Jabba didn't have soldiers. He hired mercenaries to do his dirty work.
Anyway, post it one more time with my tips above. ----------------------- Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
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RE: Killigon's Bio
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October 24, 2006
2:30:12 PM
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Physical appearance
Full name: Killigon Talquamor
Native Language: basic
Species: Klatooinian
Homeworld: Tatooine
Hair: none
Skin color: Basic brown with blue lines along his face.
Eye Color: Bright blue.
Physical build: Scrawny
Height: 5'10"
Weight: 131 lbs
Age: 23
Talents and skills
1) Knows shrywiiwook (can't speak)
2) Is good with a computer
Background history
Killigon was born in the Hutt's custody during the war against Xim The Despot. His mother, Xin Kog-Talquamor, was a run-away who joined the Empire (or so he was told, she actually was thrown to the Sarlacc pit) while his father, Barada, was a skiff pilot. Killigon was a guard for the droid-repair room as soon as he turned 8.
Killigon dreamed of joining the Empire. He began to plot his daring escape; making it more and more exciting every time. (When the carbonated Han Solo came in he had just added 60 Rancors and had taken away his weapons.) Instead, he escaped with his father on his (the father's) skiff when Jabba's sail barge was blown into smithereens. They quickly evacuated to Mos Eisely before the survivor's back at Jabba's palace would try to track the skiff.
There they found a pilot willing to take them to Couruscant. Once there, they made a life. Killigon became an engineer and Barada became a pilot. What they weren't expecting was that mercenaries of Jabba The Hutt found them. They kept on moving from city section to city Section in hopes of losing their deadly enemies. Whenver they did, it wasn't for long. A couple of weeks at the most.
Trouble wouldn't stop following them.
They eventually took a shuttle to Hathrox III. That did not stop their pursuers. Eventually Barada was killed. Killigon's life was shattered. He gave himself up to the mercanaries hired by whoever succeeded Jabba and took on their life. He moved from corrupted job to corrupted job until he joined the Empire to try to get away from it.
His former troubles had ended, but because of his act, worse ones had come. The troubles had moved from running away from gangsters to trying to stay alive. And it only gets worse.
((1st. Hey, does anyone know if Klatoonians have a language?
2nd. Actually, Jabba owned several species, (Klatoonians, for example,) so he might have soldiers, but I see what you mean.))
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RE: Killigon's Bio
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October 25, 2006
10:55:06 PM
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Reading up on the facts, it looks like you made your father a "famous character". This you cannot do. You cannot have "ties" with famous characters, because it can manipulate the timeline. You can keep your story, but you just need to change your father's name. Basically, it's like saying Darth Vader was my father. It ran manipulate the timeline greatly (not nearly as great as a not-so-known character, but it is best to avoid such ties).
Second, I'd have to look into deeper, but so far I see no official "language" of the Klatooinians. There isn't much that is known about their kind.
Amend the name, repost it, and I'll look once again for approval. ----------------------- Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
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RE: Killigon's Bio
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October 26, 2006
3:09:35 PM
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((Actually, Most Klatoonians are named Barada or M'Beg after Barada M'beg. But I'll change it. Oh, I found out that there is a Klatoonian language, Called Klatoonian, but it was forgotten and replaced by Huttese.))
Physical appearance
Full name: Killigon Talquamor
Native Language: basic
Species: Klatooinian
Homeworld: Tatooine
Hair: none
Skin color: Basic brown with blue lines along his face.
Eye Color: Bright blue.
Physical build: Scrawny
Height: 5'10"
Weight: 131 lbs
Age: 23
Talents and skills
1) Knows shrywiiwook (can't speak) and Huttese (can speak)
2) Is good with a computer
Background history
Killigon was born in the Hutt's custody during the war against Xim The Despot. His mother, Xin Kog-Talquamor, was a run-away who joined the Empire (or so he was told, she actually was thrown to the Sarlacc pit) while his father, Cortheg, was a skiff pilot. Killigon was a guard for the droid-repair room as soon as he turned 8.
Killigon dreamed of joining the Empire. He began to plot his daring escape; making it more and more exciting every time. (When the carbonated Han Solo came in he had just added 60 Rancors and had taken away his weapons.) Instead, he escaped with his father on his (the father's) skiff when Jabba's sail barge was blown into smithereens. They quickly evacuated to Mos Eisely before the survivor's back at Jabba's palace would try to track the skiff.
There they found a pilot willing to take them to Couruscant. Once there, they made a life. Killigon became an engineer and Barada became a pilot. What they weren't expecting was that mercenaries of Jabba The Hutt found them. They kept on moving from city section to city Section in hopes of losing their deadly enemies. Whenver they did, it wasn't for long. A couple of weeks at the most.
Trouble wouldn't stop following them.
They eventually took a shuttle to Hathrox III. That did not stop their pursuers. Eventually Cortheg was killed. Killigon's life was shattered. He gave himself up to the mercanaries hired by whoever succeeded Jabba and took on their life. He moved from corrupted job to corrupted job until he joined the Empire to try to get away from it.
His former troubles had ended, but because of his act, worse ones had come. The troubles had moved from running away from gangsters to trying to stay alive. And it only gets worse.
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RE: Killigon's Bio
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October 27, 2006
1:03:58 AM
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A better bio.  Check your email for your new squad assignment. ----------------------- Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
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