I see you've begun your bio- excellent. Cyleaf is correct though and I have a few additional comments before we move on.
First off, let's talk story- Your father was a part of the Imperial Navy, or IN as you call it. However, you must understand that the Vast Empire Navy (VEN) is not the same as the Imperial Navy underneath the old Emperor. The VE is actually a faction, a splinter group of the original Empire; each faction tries to claim they are truly Imperial or are following in the Emperor's footsteps but they just want to rule the galaxy
Why's that important? The original Empire, under Palpatine, commanded his forces without any respect toward his men, primarilly the troops at the frontlines. Thus, pilots and troopers were often assigned codes or IDs, thus they had no real name, completely forgetting thier identity and, instead, swearing their allegience to the Empire. Our group, on the other hand, just believes that they can run the galaxy a lot better than anyone else and we feel it our responsibility to do so- the idea is that the Imperial form of rule is best, though not necessarilly done in the same way the Emperor did it ( if that makes any sense, lol.) Anywho, that changed our doctrine, meaning that pilots were allowed to keep thier names and act like human beings, even having outside lives rather than utter loyalty to the Empire where there was no mention of dreams or aspirations. Here there are ethics, the men and women are respected, though the VE hasn't dropped its roots- we still know how to cause some damage and our means of revenge are rather horrifying...
Futhermore- our current timeline is set about five years after return of the Jedi- or maybe it was four. Either way, the Emperor is dead, Dantooine is controlled by the NR (New Republic, or formally the Rebels), the the galaxy remains in civil war. Now though, not only is it Imperials vs NR, but its Imperials vs Imperials and then even furter- Imperials and NR vs Pirates or any other tyrannical force. Just thought you should know that before we moved on to how that effects your story... :>
Now then- your father was a part of the old Empire presumebly and your family was under the protection of one of those groups. Now then, presuming you were under the custody of your mother when she was killed, in an attack against one of the cities perhaps, the only other guardian was your uncle. We haven't established ages yet, though I think we could safely place this one at about 12 years old or so, I'm bettin your character would be pretty traumatized- maybe that's why the training started. Your uncle though: where did he learn all of this mastery? Was he even that great? Perhaps he was only able to teach you at a partial level and you led the way for yourself.
In this training, btw, there can be no mention of the force- that's one of our rules throughout the VE: force powers and whatnot are simply out of the question until you've been accepted into the DJO. Why? It makes things too easy and there tends to be a lot less conflict or interesting back-up storyline when the force gets involved because you could just say that you sent out those little tendrils of the force to knock out another fighter's engine- which is rather ridiculous, lol. Either way- we just can't be having that right now.
Also, you claim that your character 'knows all that is important'- he can't possibly know everything so this might very well express his view of the galaxy. What would you say your character thinks is important? Perhaps he's not overlly book smart but he thinks certain things are important like loyalty, family or respect- revenge? Revenge is a bit hackneyed, yes, but I'm sure you could come up with something to express a particularly sympathetic value. Of course, you could make him achedemically aesthetic, but you'd still have to distinguish what's important.
Furthermore- why would mercenaries be after you? From who? To achieve what? I'm just stating that it's a bit random and unless you get some concrete facts behind that- there's not much use for it. If you want to work with it, maybe these could be a group of people who have a grudge against your uncle- maybe he wasn't such a good guy? Or perhaps you've been hiding or attempting to escape something? Either way- you need a reason for that death and I'm sure that your character couldnt' take eight mercenies, no matter what group, unless they were signicantly disabled by some other factor. Does that make sense? And what age should we figure that at?
Finally- what brings your character to join the VEN? Perhaps he thought so highly of the Imperial Navy, but he didn't appreciate the Emperor and decided that the VEN was the best way to go. Maybe that's where his talents and his belief of 'what's important' reflects best? We need to know why though- and does your character have any experience flying? Why the Navy and not the Army? Why fight at all?
I'm so specific on a bio because it really sets the path for the rest of your VEN career, though it can be altered or ammended at any time. Either way- after you've completed this you'll be moving on to Chapter 2- once that's complete we're going to move you right into a squadron: the need is dire for recruits and it looks like you can handle it. Chapter 2 will fill you in on tactics, equipment and a little more history- then you're off. So lets get through this and get any questions answered by posting them here- Jaden will be okaying your bio if I don't: so please don't be bashful, lol.
That's all I've got right this second- excellent to see you have some initiative. Rock On!
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Commander of Nazgul Squadron, Phoenix Wing and Training