Excellent, man. I'm the TO (Training Officer) around here and I'll be the one okaying all of your work. Never the less, you can ask anyone on the VENA staff questions concerning BT.
Anywho, you're bio looks very good and it was pretty immediete for me that you're an experienced writer- that's good. However, I feel your character lacks only one thing: motivation. You said he was brought into the Imperial Navy because- he couldn't be a slave dealer anymore? I'm sorry, lol, I fail to see the delicate connection there

I suppose you could say that your character was a well-rounded hunter in the sense he could fly, run, fight and whatever else, but what specifically brought him to the Navy? Why not the Army? Why the VE at all? Couldn't he have found other grounds to hunt on? I'm sure there are creatures more dangerous than that of the wookie, though they may not yield the same slave trade.
Never the less, I suppose I'd like you to see if you could improve on that or make it more clear. Also, if Pekt is a particularlly well known figure in the Star Wars universe, like actually a big character according to Star Wars canon, we usually prefer our members stay away from them. If you'd like to argue that point, if he is indeed well-known, please do and perhaps we could work out a deal.
Other than that, the only thing I could tell you is to put your personal and emotional descriptions above you're history! That's really it. You can continue on to Chapter 2, Pilot Procedure any time. Mind you there is an assignment and it must be posted here if you want it graded, so don't forget, lol.
You're doing an excellent job- keep up the good work, pilot.
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