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Nathan Chu
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  YO!
October 5, 2006 7:50:03 PM    View the profile of Nathan Chu 
Hello everyone! I'm new here, but I'm not new to role-playing organizations. I was a former Captain in the Empire Reborn. Just thought that I can start another Imperial character. Anyways, hope this place has just what I need.

Nathan Chu
Cyleaf Aehait
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  RE: YO!
October 5, 2006 8:48:51 PM    View the profile of Cyleaf Aehait 
Greetings Nathan, I'm Cyleaf Aehait Operator 1 for the Vast Empire Naval Academy also called the VENA. My job here is to point you in the right direction to start your training and help you with any questions. I am excited that you chose the Navy and that you have experience elsewhere, that should help you fly through this and into an active squad.

I have here a couple of addresses that will help you out getting started:

http://www.vastempire.com/wiki/index.php?title=Naval_Academy: Is where you can find information about the academy, there are links to the staff, officer's manual and the Pilot Handbook

http://www.vastempire.com/wiki/index.php?title=Flight_School_%28FS%29: Is where you learn to create your personality or avatar and how to write with a squad. Chapter 1 has a link Character Development, this will help you create that bio which will be your first task. Create a thread in the academy with your name and this is where you will place all the hard work you do before becoming a squadron member.

I know this might be a lot of information fast but I have faith that me and the rest of the staff can help you work through it. You can e-mail me at [email protected] or in the message center here. If you have mirc you can also find me in #VENA and #Kaph-Squadron, so pop in and send me a message

Best of luck Nathan and I truly look forward to working with you.
-Cyleaf Aehait

 
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Nathan Chu
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  My bio
October 7, 2006 1:45:09 PM    View the profile of Nathan Chu 
Hey everyone this is my character bio

Attributes:
Name: Nathan Chu
Species: Trandoshan
Height: 5' 10"
Weight: 165 lbs.
Age: 26
Eye Color: Red
Skin color: Metallic Silver
Likes: Slaving Wookies, hunting exotic predators, warfare basically
Hates: Wookies, the New Republic
Motto: "First to the battle gets the first kill."


Historic Bio: Born into a noble family on the planet of Trandosha, Nathan was born with a genetic skin defect in which he was born with metallic silver scales. He always was a natural hunter. Trained from youth to be a prosperous slaver (it was the family business), Nathan would hunt in the thick forests that covered much of the planet. After turning 16 years old, Nathan became an apprentice to one of the most successful slavers in Trandoshan history, the notorious Pekt. He usually accompanied the master slaver on raids on the neighboring Kashyyyk. Nathan killed his first Wookie on his first slaving raid earning him much respect from his peers. After several more raids, Nathan completed his apprenticeship under Pekt and took over his family slaving business. By this time Nathan was at the age of 24. When the Empire was forced from Kashyyyk, the slaving business of Trandosha ground to a halt. With the bankruptcy of his family's work, Nathan found work with the forces of the Empire.

Physical Description: As was said earlier, Nathan was born with a genetic skin defect in which his scales were silver. Shorter than most Trandoshans, being only 5 feet 10 inches, he made up for his small stature with speed. Also not the strongest of his species, he made up for that with his superior intellect. When hunting Wookies, he new it was suicidal to attack one head on. Instead he outsmarted the rather ignorant fur balls. Nathan has no noticeable deformities on his body due to his species regenerative properties.

Personality: Being a successful slaver, Nathan was always confident in his abilities. But that confidence was also his weakness. He was often cocky and arrogant, being somewhat an egotist. And because he was a Trandoshan, he was always looking for battle. There was some sort of bloodlust that was inside of him that often lead to a lot more blood than was needed. To balance his thirst for war, he often found relief in being humorous. In a galaxy full of turmoil, the best remedy was usually a good laugh.

-Nathan Chu
Shazam
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  RE: YO!
October 7, 2006 10:36:00 PM    View the profile of Shazam 
Excellent, man.  I'm the TO (Training Officer) around here and I'll be the one okaying all of your work.  Never the less, you can ask anyone on the VENA staff questions concerning BT.

Anywho, you're bio looks very good and it was pretty immediete for me that you're an experienced writer- that's good.  However, I feel your character lacks only one thing: motivation.  You said he was brought into the Imperial Navy because- he couldn't be a slave dealer anymore?  I'm sorry, lol, I fail to see the delicate connection there   I suppose you could say that your character was a well-rounded hunter in the sense he could fly, run, fight and whatever else, but what specifically brought him to the Navy?  Why not the Army?  Why the VE at all?  Couldn't he have found other grounds to hunt on?  I'm sure there are creatures more dangerous than that of the wookie, though they may not yield the same slave trade.

Never the less, I suppose I'd like you to see if you could improve on that or make it more clear.  Also, if Pekt is a particularlly well known figure in the Star Wars universe, like actually a big character according to Star Wars canon, we usually prefer our members stay away from them.  If you'd like to argue that point, if he is indeed well-known, please do and perhaps we could work out a deal.

Other than that, the only thing I could tell you is to put your personal and emotional descriptions above you're history!  That's really it.  You can continue on to Chapter 2, Pilot Procedure any time.  Mind you there is an assignment and it must be posted here if you want it graded, so don't forget, lol. 

You're doing an excellent job- keep up the good work, pilot.

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[This message has been edited by Shazam (edited October 7, 2006 10:39:48 PM)]
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