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Jacen Ren
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  The Biography of Private Ren
March 29, 2006 10:23:41 PM    View the profile of Jacen Ren 
Native Language: Basic
Hair Color: Black
Eye Color: Brown
Skin Color: Lightly tanned
Height: 5'8
Weight: 148 lbs.
Age: 18
Full Name: Jacen Ren
Physical Build: Slightly muscular, slim body type
Homeworld: Tatooine


Talents/Skills

1)  Well trained with a blaster rifle, can kill an enemy with only one shot if available.
2) Can understand the foreign languages of jawas and tusken raiders.


Background History


Born in a peasant family on the harsh climates of Tatooine, young Jacen Ren was a curious little boy. He loved to explore the desert and was often taken on a bantha to explore farther into the desert with his father. When Jacen became 8, he wanted to be a moisture farmer, just like his father. His father taught him many tactics and additionally taught him survival tips if he ever got a family of his own.

One day, when young Jacen was 12, he was out exploring an abandoned shack  31 miles south of Mos Espa. He went inside to search for supplies when he was ambushed by a tusken raider hunting party ( 8 in it ). Jacen pull out his blaster pistol, but a tusken hit it out of his hand with its club. Jacen, unarmed, was backing up slowly. While looking around for an escape route, Jacen saw a tusken pull out a rifle and aim it at him. Jacen closed his eyes and quietly waited...but nothing happened.

When he opened his eyes, he saw a pack of jawas attacking the tuskens. Jacen quickly picked up his blaster pistol and shot 2 tuskens straight into the hearts. He saw a tusken pick up a carved hunting knife and try to plundge it into a jawa. Jacen shot the tusken straight in the forehead, instantly killing it. The other jawas took care of the remaining tusken party. After all tuskens were killed, the largest jawa in the group came near Jacen and hugged him. Jacen had read about jawas and their shyness, jawas dont like humans alot. This jawa was an interesting fellow, so Jacen hugged back and told the jawa to follow him. A few hours later, the jawas were inside the Ren's moisture farm and were eating a delecious meal cooked by Jacens mother.

The jawas were the last of a clan called the Renegades. A squad of troops from the Rebel alliance were on thier trail because of a reason untold. Jacens father agreed to protect them for a while.

3 years later, the Renegades and Jacen had a great friendship. Jacen taught them many skills and the jawas taught Jacen some hunting tips and their native language. They even taught him the tuskens language. He could understand it. On a windy day, 15 year old Jacen went far from home to search for husky bantha. When he returned home, he was shocked by the sight he was seeing.

The Ren moisture farm was burned to the ground, all crops were destroyed, there were Jawa bodies scattered..Poor Jacen even saw his moher and father, they were killed execution style, a shot to the head for each. Jacen, with tears in his eyes, swore revenge to the rebels ( Although he never knew that Sand Troopers were the real cause, they attacked the farm when Jacens father refused to hand over the jawas ). He would kill them all, if it was the last thing he would do.

Jacen, now in a deep deppresion, headed to Mos Espa and sat on a barrel of spices near a shop, slowly weeping in agony. This was when he saw a squad of Sand Troopers marching into an Imperial Shuttle. He wiped his tears away and went to a small stand with a trooper that was handing out flyers. Jacen had read that the Imperials were against the Rebellion, so he grabbed a partially ripped flyer and went back to the barrel. He sat on it and started reading : The Empire is now recruiting troopers with proper skills! Jacen read a small print at the bottom that said : Must be over the age of 17 to be recruited. Jacen now knew what he would do, this would allow him the vengeance of his family and the Renegades.

3 YEARS LATER....Jacen had quit his job as a starship mechanic and was now heading to the Imperial embassy ( newly created in Mos Espa ). He went to the front desk and an imperial officer handed him a recruitment form. Jacen filled it in and gave it back to the Imperial Officer. ''O.K. Mr. Ren, we will contact you in 24 standard hours if you are recruited. Have a nice day'' The officer handed Jacen a pin that said I LOVE THE EMPIRE.

In 24 hours, Jacen received a transmission from a General Cosmic, welcoming him into the Empire as a private. Jacen jumped for joy and went to the Imperial shuttle that was heading to the Imperial Training academy. While Jacen read his info sheets, he found out he was in  the Storm Trooper Corps. He looked out the shuttles window while in space and watched Tatooine fading away. He quietly whispered to himself ''I will keep my promise, I will avenge my family and the Renegades...the rebels will fear the name Jacen Ren, they will pay for their treachery...they will pay...''
[This message has been edited by Jacen Ren (edited March 30, 2006 6:15:07 AM)]
[This message has been edited by Jacen Ren (edited March 30, 2006 3:19:42 PM)]
[This message has been edited by Jacen Ren (edited March 30, 2006 4:57:17 PM)]
Evani
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  RE: The Biography of Private Ren
March 30, 2006 2:43:51 AM    View the profile of Evani 
Very good storyline, but...

Space your story into paragraphs, it m,akes it easier on the eye. Make use of proper english grammar and language. I suggest you typ the bio up in MS word. It autochecks grammar and spelling.

I'm not sure if I am correct, but I dont think humans' volcal chords are able to to speak the tusken and Jawa language. If anyone could shed a light on that please.
 
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Jacen Ren
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  RE: The Biography of Private Ren
March 30, 2006 6:07:30 AM    View the profile of Jacen Ren 
Hmm, you're right, I'll edit it and put this into paragraphs.
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  RE: The Biography of Private Ren
April 10, 2006 3:50:56 PM    View the profile of Cosmic 
Sorry for the lateness. School. I'm on spring break now.

The bio was good - although I think you may need to research what the Empire, as an entity, really is. I don't really see the Empire as going to various planets, handing out paper to people for recruitment, or giving "political" pins such as "I love the Empire".

Other than that, it was alright. I'll place you in a squad as soon as possible.
 
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Jacen Ren
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  RE: The Biography of Private Ren
April 11, 2006 7:29:36 PM    View the profile of Jacen Ren 
the i love the empire pin thing, i read that somewhere..i just forgot where....but i know i saw it before
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