Hey man, glad you finnaly accepted my invitation to join.

P.S. Ohio doesn't exist in the Star Wars universe...


Since Topgun is a buddy of mine from school, could he be placed in Aegis after his training?
 
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SC/CWO Chipmunk Man/Aegis 1/Phoenix/mSSD Atrus/DEF/VEN/VE/(=A=)(=SA=)(=*MA*=)[LoC][MC:1]x3[LSM][VC:B]

"I know what you're thinking, punk. You're thinking, 'Did he fire six shots, or only five?' Well to tell you the truth, I've forgotten myself in all this excitement. But being this is a .44 magnum, the most powerful handgun in the world, and will blow your head clean off, you need to ask youself one question: 'Do I feel lucky?' Well, do ya? Punk!"
-"Dirty" Harry Callahan

(Chip- We'll see, I need to figure out who's here and where we need people.  Thanks)

Howdy, I'm your training officer and I can tell you right now you arn't even close to taking that test however, read below and I will tell you step by step what to do.  Remember to always post when your done with the goal in this thread.  Thankyou.

Well, the rest of this message has, yes, been copied and pasted, bu only to save myself what time I can in an attempt to get to everyone.

What I need you to do right now is go to Character Developement page on our Naval Academy page at WIKI.  You can find it here-

http://www.vastempire.com/wiki/index.php?title=Character_Developement

Now, once you have completed your bio, post it here.  Remember to post it here or we may not see it...  Ever!  The index to basic training can be found below and not at the training site that is set up on the Naval Home Page.  Thankyou.


http://www.vastempire.com/wiki/index.php?title=Flight_School_%28FS%29

You can go to the Officer's Handbook for extra information that might help you in your bio or otherwise at-

http://www.vastempire.com/wiki/index.php?title=Officer's_Manual
(lemme know if those work, btw...)

 
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CMDR/ESN Shazam/Nazgul 1-1/Phoenix Wing/mSSD Atrus/1VENF/VEN (=A=) (=*SA*=) (=*MA*=) (=*FOCE*=) [LoM] [LSM] [VC:S] [DSM]

Name: Enrique Johnson
Call sign: topgun
Age: 19
Height: 5"11
Weight: 147 lbs
Hair Color: blond
Eye Color: blue
Place of Birth:Corellia
Orphaned at a young age and raised himself on Corellia.  He received his call sign while on the streets when he out shot a mugger who was try to mug some people on the streets. he was spotted and aproched by some naval flight crews who talked him into joining the navy after seeing him out shoot the mugger. he also joined to get revenge on the rebles who he was told for as long as he can remember were the cause of his falimies death.

topgun is a some what of a friendly street kid but he's extremly protective of his personal effects. He is whiling to help when ever its needed.

sorry to say bud, but you need more work on your bio, much more. just reading through that, little sentence, i found more than ten errors. Since this is a writing based RP site, spelling grammar, and punchuations are important. I would suggest you look at some other people's bios as examples.
 
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-(William the Conquerer)-
King of PPC
We are still here because we conquered our enemies, and we shall do it once more! and more, and more, and more!
SC/CWO Willtconq/Kaph 1/Wing I/mSSD Atrus/DEF/VEN/VE (=*A*=) (=*SA*=) [VC:B][SV]
Wm/Wm Willtconq/WM:1/Webmasters/VET/VE

Good to see you finally coming back again. And yes, I intend to hound you to keep you from going AWOL again. Also, you don't need to use your real name. For example, my character has my real first name, but fictitious last (Rob Henderson). You don't have to change it, but might be recommended. The comnet is supposed to be viewed by VE members only, but has been hacked before.
 
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SC/ESN Chipmunk Man/Aegis 1/Phoenix/mSSD Atrus/DEF/VEN/VE/(=A=)(=SA=)(=*MA*=)[LoC][MC:1]x3[LSM][VC:B]

"I know what you're thinking, punk. You're thinking, 'Did he fire six shots, or only five?' Well to tell you the truth, I've forgotten myself in all this excitement. But being this is a .44 magnum, the most powerful handgun in the world, and will blow your head clean off, you need to ask youself one question: 'Do I feel lucky?' Well, do ya? Punk!"
-"Dirty" Harry Callahan

"Mr. Stratford, it's just a party..."
*wags finger* "...And Hell is just a sauna."

Name: Enrique Johnson
Call sign: topgun
Age: 19
Height: 5"11
Weight: 147 lbs
Hair Color: blond
Eye Color: blue
Place of Birth:Corellia
Orphaned at a young age and raised himself on Corellia. He received his call sign while on the streets when he out shot a mugger who was try to mug some people on the streets. he was spotted and approached by some naval flight crews who talked him into joining the navy after seeing him out shoot the mugger. he also joined to get revenge on the rebels who he was told for as long as he can remember were the cause of his families death.

Topgun is a some what of a friendly street kid but he's extremely protective of his personal effects. He is whiling to help when ever its needed. but hates when anyone who says they'll watch your back leave you out in the open with no cover.

has never had the experience of fly any vehicle but he is whiling to put all the effort he has into learning

A little short indeed, despite there's no real limit.  I can tell you that Topgun isn't an acceptable callsign because you are not a top gun as of this point and the people of the navy would probably mock you for presuming you would think to call yourself that- they'd probably go as far as to place bets on how quickly your character died   You might have a nick name but your callsign will probably be like "Kaph 3" or "Aegis seven."  During combat you have to use a code name anyways, but if you've got a nick that isn't incriminating- you're good.

Now what about your bio?  Dude, we know nothing about your character.  Did you read the webpage I gave you above?  You need to organize first off so we can understand where we need work.  I'd like you to split your bio up into "Physical Description," "Emotional Description" and "History."  That's at a minimum.  The rest of your stuff, like height, weight, hair and eye color go above.  So- what do we know about your character?  He is an orphan from corellia who decided to join the Empire because the Rebellion denied you your birth records?  Dude, that' not much, lol.  Lemme give you some background on Corellia though-  That planet is Imperial controlled for one, Corsec was a major offshoot of the Imperial Navy so they were extremely well known and they had pretty good pilots.  Most pilots from Corellia are going to be pretty good because they find a way to get involved with smuggling or just flying or piloting in general because there isn't much more to do on the planet besides watch the beautiful landscape.  While it's very  "pretty" and suitable place to raise a family in some portions, its a haven for crime and there are a lot of problems still plaguing the place to this day. 

So here's what we need to actually 'fix' with your character- if he was in an orphage, which one and how did it come about that he was able to leave and become a 'street kid?'  What was the real reason behind him joining the imperial navy as a pilot?  He must have understood his job would be extremely, extremely dangerous- so why join?  He just feels he has nothing to lose and everything to gain by proving himself?  What you could do is make your character initially very cocky and tell the people in the VEN you were called Top-Gun in your area.  At this point, you'd probably get laughed at and maybe you could talk about getting owned by a superior officer or something, but the idea is to create a character here.  That was just history we were talkin about, but lets see how that effects your personality and physical being.

Now that we'll know how, what, and why you did what you did on Corellia and the same for the Imperial Navy, how does that describe your character's personality?  Is he a kind of all-or-nothing guy or is he very 'deep?'  Is he happy, or sad?  Depressed because he has never had parents and has to rely on other's a lot?  Is he rich or poor?  Does he care?  What I'm trying to establish is the mood behind your character and also how they will react to certain things.  For instance, when you are put into a squadron, how will your squadron mates initially act towards you and how will you react in contrast?  Will you blow them off or try to fit in?  Will you sit back and slowly become aquainted and trustworth in your group?  What?  This is what we are trying to understand- we don't need it so detailed that you answer these questions specifically, but we want to understand your character a little better.

If you have any questions, comments or concerns- just let us know here or message me through message center.  Lemme know- rock on.
 
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CMDR/ESN Shazam/Nazgul 1-1/Phoenix Wing/mSSD Atrus/1VENF/VEN (=A=) (=*SA*=) (=*MA*=) (=*FOCE*=) [LoM] [LSM] [VC:S] [DSM]