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daminga
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  New (Fixed) Bio
February 18, 2006 10:14:56 PM    View the profile of daminga 
Native Language: Human
Hair Color: Jet Black
Eye Color: Grey
Skin Color: Tan
Height: 6'2
Weight: 165 lbs
Age: 18
Full Name: Daminga Gurfta
Physical Build: Athletic, Runner-like
Homeworld: Namytan
Other Features:Tattoo on back and thighs/shins - Namytan cross (very similar to Trinity cross on back), Namytan symbol for speed and courage (on legs)


Talents/Skills:
Hand-to-hand combat, Scouting/messege running, Camouflage


Background: 
On my home planet I knew nothing of war.  In the first 18 years of my life, it was peaceful and I was taught the ways of my family's class: the hunter. I was taught by my father and the other superior hunters of our village how to stalk prey and how to use Mother Forest herself to conceal  my movements. As I grew into early adulthood (about 12 years-old), the elders sent me as a runner among the many surrounding villages. It was during one of these missions to the village of Hiifties that I met the most beautiful girl I've ever seen.  Her name was Jilsicas. She had long and vibrant, silver hair with lime-green eyes. She was so beautiful that she could stop men in their tracks. Many did even though she was only 14 and too young to marry. I was able to stop myself from doing the same but when she looked up at me, her eyes flashed so bright and magnetic. I found out later that none of the other men had made such a connection. As I continued to travel between villages carrying messages, I continually saw Jilsicas and a relationship developed.  Life was very good to me for a time, until 6 years later.

One day I was dispatched with a message to be sent to Hiifties.  The message was to confirm a report that a different type of "animal" was on the planet. What I found instead of the village will haunt me to the end of my days. The village of Hiifties was completely burned down, nothing was left. I just stood there at the top of the hill overlooking the village; staring. Then I saw them. 

Walking through the wreckage were the "animals". These creatures were different than anything I had ever seen. They had taunt, dark-red skin with white bulging eyes. They had long sticks that they carried oddly in their disfigured grasps. They rode atop larger creatures with even more menacing features. I sensed that these were creatures that I did not want to be seen by. I ran to the woods and hid within Mother Forest's safety. As they passed I counted them, they numbered 8 in all. I didn't understand this. How could 8 strange "animals" destroy a whole village of more than 250 Namyton hunters?

When they had passed, I circled through the forest to the edge of the village. There I stopped and looked; listened. The bodies of the dead villagers were littered in all directions. I scanned the faces hoping that Father Sky would not allow such a thing to happen to one so beautiful. Yet as I hoped this, I caught a glimpse; something was shimmering in Brother Sun's light. That was all I needed to know.

When I returned the my village to report my findings, I found that there were more strange beings there. These were more similar to us in size and shape. The only differences I could find were that they all had a white, shell-like skin attached to themselves and that they were all identical. After I gave my report to the elders, they told me to escort these "warriors" to where the village used to stand.

I slowed when we reached the hill in front of the village and told them where I last saw the creatures. I watched as the commander gave an order and they fanned out and headed down the hill, 36 in all. I wondered how only 36 "men" would be able to take on 8 of those creatures that a whole village of 250 couldn't handle. As I thought this, I suddenly heard a loud bang. Many more smaller pops filled the air and shook the ground. I looked up and over the hill and watched as the last of the creatures was slain by the white-cloaked men. That was when I knew that I should learn more about them and their aggressive methods.

After the battle and the return trip back to my village, I asked the elders if I may speak with one of the "white-skinned men" as the villagers were beginning  to call them. They granted me this and I soon was learning many things about them and the Empire that they fought for, they even taught me hand-to-hand combat which I seem to be a natural at. These men left our village and our world but many more came to take their place. I soon learned that I could join their ranks and become a soldier of the Empire army. This I did with great hast. I didn't do it for the glory that many seek or the money that many more want. I enlisted because I still dream of that wind swept silver hair, the flash of those lime-green eyes, and the hope that somewhere out in the galaxy the same disaster doesn't happen again.  If it does, I will be there.
[This message has been edited by daminga (edited February 18, 2006 11:44:02 PM)]
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daminga
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  RE: New (Fixed) Bio
February 18, 2006 11:53:45 PM    View the profile of daminga 
Good? Needs improved? Let me know. Thanks
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  RE: New (Fixed) Bio
February 19, 2006 12:09:53 AM    View the profile of Yoder 
Better, I think more people will like it.By the way did you post in the army academy and  start a topic that says hi im new here.
 
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  RE: New (Fixed) Bio
February 19, 2006 5:12:55 AM    View the profile of Evani 
Much better, Its quite original as well. Just remember when writing squad stories we write third person's view.Cosmic I want him in my squad,

And Yoder, yes he did.

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daminga
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  RE: New (Fixed) Bio
February 19, 2006 10:34:09 AM    View the profile of daminga 
Id be honored to service with the Dark Dragoons and under Sergeant Evani if he and the Major General wish it. 

Thanks for the comments and critism.
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  RE: New (Fixed) Bio
February 19, 2006 10:35:59 AM    View the profile of Evani 
Psst!
I'm not a he
 
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  RE: New (Fixed) Bio
February 19, 2006 11:07:40 AM    View the profile of daminga 
oops.  i meant her*
 
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  RE: New (Fixed) Bio
February 22, 2006 12:05:05 AM    View the profile of daminga 
Um...Is there something I need to fix or do befoer I am placed in a squad? I know Cosmic needs to look at it but is there anything else?
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  RE: New (Fixed) Bio
February 22, 2006 4:50:12 PM    View the profile of Cosmic 
Sorry for the delay.

I just read it - very good. I liked how you ended some paragraphs with a kind of suspenseful feeling

I'll place you in a squad.
 
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  RE: New (Fixed) Bio
February 23, 2006 11:41:29 AM    View the profile of daminga 
thanks cosmic, i really apperciate the squad placement
 
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