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Sinisters BIO
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November 13, 2005
6:03:08 PM
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APPEARANCE
Full Name: Mahkar Sinister
Age: 22
Height: 6'2"
Weight: 200 lbs
Hair: Short Dirty Blonde almost brown
Eyes: Green with a gold rings around the pupils
Body Type: Muscular from farming and fighting Sand People.
BIO
Born and raised on the harsh landscape of Tatooine, I lived until the age of ten working with my father on our farm, until one day when a stray Tuskan Raider happened upon our farm and killed my father in front of my very eyes. Through the years i have grown into a cold hearted young man, my time is spent between taking care of the family farm and hunting the sand people. The only good thing I look forward to is the day when I can join the Imperial Army.
Personality
I am a quite and calm person, though I have killed I do not show the fact that I take great pleasure in the death of others. Underneath the quite shell is an anger that gets released whenever I sense the fear of those I am about to kill, and anger from the fact that I might be dispatching the one that took my fathers life. Although I am polite and calm, my darker side does come to surface every once in awhile and thats when you should be afraid.
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RE: Sinisters BIO
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November 13, 2005
6:06:23 PM
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looks good to me, though im not a expert on first person's view, we usually write in third person's view in story posts. -----------------------
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RE: Sinisters BIO
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November 13, 2005
6:06:40 PM
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Ooh. I like the storyline. It makes for great character development stories as you go on.
Some minor spelling errors here and there, but other than that, nice.  -----------------------
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RE: Sinisters BIO
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November 13, 2005
6:14:32 PM
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Thankx all, its pretty much my life though with out the killing and the living on a different planet, as for spelling, i am not much of a speller lol |
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RE: Sinisters BIO
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November 13, 2005
6:24:46 PM
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MS word is your friend  -----------------------
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RE: Sinisters BIO
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November 13, 2005
6:34:09 PM
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I'd use word but im... uihh well i didnt lol |
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RE: Sinisters BIO
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November 13, 2005
6:52:50 PM
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just two pointers for gettng ahead here, spell check, don't step on commands toes. (not real easy, which is why its killer when it happens) -----------------------
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RE: Sinisters BIO
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November 13, 2005
6:55:25 PM
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I appreciate the advise, and i would be more than happy to know if i am being insubordinate |
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RE: Sinisters BIO
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November 13, 2005
6:56:58 PM
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not at all, just thought i'd give the advice in pairs, like those jerky and cheese things. -----------------------
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Vin Diesel has been known to have philosophical debates with R2D2.
" (I) Is always hatching plots against newlyweds; I mar the beauty of virgins and cause their hearts to grow cold"
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RE: Sinisters BIO
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November 13, 2005
6:58:42 PM
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RE: Sinisters BIO
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November 14, 2005
3:01:46 AM
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Good bio Sinister! Shame there isn't more to read. Looking forward to readoing your stuff. -----------------------
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RE: Sinisters BIO
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November 14, 2005
9:51:28 AM
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I have posted an updated bio if anyone cares to read. -----------------------
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