Erm, I feel like this is the same person as topgun... same bio, etc heh.
 
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Senior Crewman Gunnay
Nazgul 3-2
Adjutant to the Training Officer
A:TO/FM/SCRW Gunnay/Nazgul 3-2/Wing I/mSSD Atrus/1VIF/VEN/VE (=*A*=)

Orphaned at a young age and raised himself on Corellia. As a young orphan Bob lived on the streets with a small family of other street kids. He and his street family relied on each other in order to survive. In this small tight nit group he learned how to take care of the group and how to work as a team to get thinks done and to make it out of tight situations. He is a some what of a friendly street kid but he's extremely protective of his personal effects.
He received his call sign while on the streets when he out shot a mugger who was try to mug some people on the streets. He walked up right behind one of the muggers and pulled the muggers blaster pistol out of the holster and backed off a few steps where he called out to the muggers and when they turned around he shot them down with one shot into each of the two. He was spotted and approached by some naval flight crews who talked him into joining the navy after seeing him out shoot the mugger. He also joined to get revenge on the rebels who he was told for as long as he can remember were the cause of his families' death. He is whiling to help when ever it's needed, but hates when anyone who says they'll watch your back leave you out in the open with no cover. He has never had the experience of fly any vehicle but he is whiling to put all the effort he has into learning.

Name: BOB HOPE
Call sign: Ghost Shot
Age: 19
Height: 5"11
Weight: 147 lbs
Hair Color: blond
Eye Color: blue
Place of Birth:Corellia

Bob Hope was orphaned at a young age and raised himself on the streets of Corellia. As a young orphan Bob lived with a small family of other street kids. He and his street family relied on each other in order to survive. In this small tight knit group he learned how to take care of the group as a whole and how to work as a team to get things done and to make it out of tight situations intact. He is somewhat of a friendly street kid but he's extremely protective of his personal effects.

Bob received his nickname Ghostshot when a couple of muggers threatened him and his band of friends.  Having "found" a blaster pistol and some extra blaster packs in one of the houses they had broken into, he had become fairly adept at using short-range weaponery. He quietly walked up right behind one of the muggers and relieved him of his blaster pistol.  He proceeded to back off a few steps and he called out to the muggers.  When they turned around he took both of them out, one with a shot to the throat and the other received a small shot to the chest. He was lucky enough that he was taught to have a shinny metal plate over his chest and that he had it on.

A couple of Stormtroopers and Imperial Pilots on shore leave witnessed this 17 year old street kid take out two experienced muggers with not so much a blink of an eye.  The Stormies, more then a bit innebriated, whooped with laughter.  One of them approached and told him he should join the Army with skills like that.  Who knew, if he was lucky he could even be an Advanced Recon Commando.  He looked at them with disinterest and they shrugged and walked away.  The pilot, a Lieutenant with the Imperial Navy, approached him as well.  For as long as he could remember, he had been amazed at the starfighters that flew out of the hangar a few kilometers away.  He immediately brightened up when the pilot began speaking of his amazing reflexes and gave him his HoloNet ID so he could contact him.

A little over a year later, he finally contacted that pilot, now a Captain, who set up a meeting with the local recruiters for him.  They decided to give him some education courses, and he stayed in the recruiters' barracks for about a year, until he was 19. While he was living at the recruiters' barracks he made friends with some of the recruites that past through.  Before he left, the recruiting officer and Captain presented him with a gift.  It was a datapad.  They said their goodbyes and on his trip to Flight School, he logged on and read what they had left him.  To his horror and dismay, there was a full report about the deaths of his family.  Being ardent supporters of the Empire, Rebel sympathizers had murdered his entire family.  A servant of the house had received a stab wound to his stomach, but managed to get the very young child out of the house and was forced to leave him on the streets as the life bled out of him.

Armed with this newfound hatred for the Rebellion, Ghostshot was ready for Flight School.  He would always be very careful about what he entrusted to others in terms of his personal possessions, something someone from the streets learns after very little time.  His almost fatherly instinct from protecting those in his little group of street rats had given him an air of maturity, and he would always be there for a friend or fellow pilot in need.

As is evident by his bio, he is skilled with a blaster pistol and has pretty decent reflexes, he was an orphan/street kid, so anything involved with that is a given.  I helped him a bit cleaning it up, but everything in terms of plot and detail were his ideas.
 
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Senior Crewman Gunnay
Nazgul 3-2
Adjutant to the Training Officer
A:TO/FM/SCRW Gunnay/Nazgul 3-2/Wing I/mSSD Atrus/1VIF/VEN/VE (=*A*=)

it was chip who got me to come back

Essentially, the two manuevers are opposites and can be used defensively or offensively to draw off fire or bank in behind someone or to bring up the vector for an easy shot, as on a stationary object.  When using a split-s to attack something like a tower, you'd have to leave a lot of room.  If you try to pull right in front of the tower and you miscalculate a little, your momentum will be too great and you'll lose control of the craft- which makes for cool fireworks on impact

I beleive you understand what you are talking about and atleast know where to go if have any more questions so we'll move on to the final chapter.  "The Squadron" basically gives you what you'll need to know about being active in one of our three current groups.  Read through the selection underneath Chapter III carefully and click the links below at your discretion.  It might be suggested that you read the 'Squadron' link below the 'Post' link to see if you can get any extra information before making your two story post.  So- click on "The Post" and make sure you put the two assigned story post in this thread, or they may never be seen.  At that point they will be critiqued by our training staff and anyone who feels that we've missed something or would just like to comment- pleasently, I might add.  If you have not read "The Squadron" link within Chapter III by then, you'll have to in order to be allowed into a squadron.  We'll let you know when you are ready to take the Aviator's. 

As always, if you have any questions, comments or concerns you may ask them here or message me or Gunnay directly through 'The Message Center' in the upper left hand corner of your page.  Rock On.
 
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CMDR/ESN Shazam/Nazgul 1-1/Phoenix Wing/mSSD Atrus/1VENF/VEN (=A=) (=*SA*=) (=*MA*=) (=*FOCE*=) [LoM] [LSM] [VC:S] [DSM]

Alright, lol- we've got some work to do. Now- I won't do any of this stuff for you- you need to prove to me you can fix this for yourself after I give you instructions and really just some tips.

The first thing I noticed when I looked at your post is that it is a solid block! As you can see, I already have one paragraph and am working on yet another. Not that this is some major accomplishment, but it is necessary for the people reading your post to be able to understand it. If we block everything together, it tends to turn into a ramble.

When do we create a paragraph? After the subject changes. The ones I did above go in the following order- "introduction"-"the block"-"how to paragraph." I presume you've had some basic education in the ways of language arts and have simply chosen to forget them- that is not an option when we create story post

Besides simple the brick formation, as I read through it, I got the obvious idea that you hadn't read through your post- not once. If you had, you probably would have noticed that your words run together because of a lack of commas, colons and even periods. Allow me to provide you with a few examples:

Ex. 1 "As we came up on the first drone we came up on the left side of the drone then made a hard right on a heading parallel with the Frigate then we came up on the second drone and again we came up on the left side of the drone but this time we made a light right on a heading about 45 degrees to the one of the Frigate. "

-Buddy, that's what we call a run-on, lol. Note that you had absolutely no commas, which makes for a perpetual, unending idea which is just kind of hard to follow in your head as you read. If you were to place commas and periods, it would run at least some what smoother. I also saw that you tend to repeat things, like where you said "As we came up on the first drone, we came up on the left side..." Now that's just me being picky, but if you read through your post, you can eliminate that second "came up"

Ex. 2 I started my run and the drone turned right for the Frigate I got my tie to going as fast as I could so I could take it out with out the risk of hitting the Frigate and I could hear Lason One asking me "why aren't taking aim at that drone do u think this is a race?"

-Dude, that just doesn't make sense I mean, reading through these, do you see what I'm talking about or do I need to become more clear? I'm not angry or anything about it, and I'm certainly not trying to make a mockery of your abilities here, because I'm sure I was about ten times more inept then you when I started, but in order for me to begin helping you with actual content, we need to fix up some of the grammatical stuff. In order to talk about grammar, we also need to be using full words- so "u" as a substitute for "you" isn't quite going to cut it.

Please- read through your entire post and point out areas that don't make sense, seem to run together, or just don't go well with the over-all flow of the post. Once you've cleaned it up in terms of form, grammar and just over-all look and feel, we'll go on ahead and punch it up with your content.

Now, the reason I hit so hard in the beginning is because of the fact that getting this down at the beginning will make things much easier in the future for you. Plus, if you learn how to find the discrepancies within your post and fix them, you'll be able to spot them as you write and bypass this whole need for a system.

If you ever need to edit, as I'm asking you to do to that post now, all you need to do is click on that symbol on the bar to the upper-left of your post: it's an icon that looks like a pen and paper. You won't have the spell-check when you edit, but you can still use something like Microsoft word, or another document program for that tool. As you'll see upon making another post, that spell-check tool is just above this box for text.  I use it often enough

If you have any questions, comments or concerns, feel free to ask in this thread or message me through the message center or whatever other purpose you know of. Thanks for keeping your training running- lets nip this in the butt Rock On.

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CMDR/ESN Shazam/Nazgul 1-1/Phoenix Wing/mSSD Atrus/1VENF/VEN (=A=) (=*SA*=) (=*MA*=) (=*FOCE*=) [LoM] [LSM] [VC:S] [DSM]

"Topgun is a some what of a friendly street kid but he's extremely protective of his personal effects. He is whiling to help when ever its needed. but hates when anyone who says they'll watch your back leave you out in the open with no cover."

Yeah, I could see what you meant.
 
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Raiders
SL/CPL Darr-Rann/3SQD/1PLT/1COM/1RGT/1BAT/VEA/VE/Tadath [LoR][CoR]
|FL/PO1_Demonic/Kaph 5/PheonixWing/mSSD Atrus/DEF/VEN/VE| (=*A*=)
CORPORAL
SENIOR CREWMAN
one of few - A vast Empire medic
Read Losses of Vandetta by me and Hellra
Flashmaker

just so everyone knows i'm taking a little while off because its finals time at school and i really need to study hard

ok back til my next finals

well itspart of life

We have been flying in space for a while now and Lason One decided it was time for us to fly in the atmosphere. We reported to briefing and Lason One say "ok everyone we're going to be flying in the atmosphere today so no messing around and do exactly as I say. "Under stand?"

"Yes sir" the three of us say.

"Ok head down to the hanger bay and we'll launch and head down to the atmosphere."

"Yes sir."

"Dismissed."

The three of us head down to the hanger and climb in to our ties and launch into space and wait for Lason One to join us. He flies out of the Frigate and orders us to form up on him. We fly in to the atmosphere of Planet Berchat.

After hitting the atmosphere I felt my tie drop in the gravity of the planet. I add more power to keep the tie in the air. Over the radio Lason One calls out "ok flight follow me and get use to flight in the atmosphere."

"Yes sir."

"Ok gang roll your ties right then left."

"uggghhh I'm gonna be sick&"

"Suck it up. Your gonna have to fly down here some time. Ok you three add more speed so you don't fall out of the sky."

We're flying around for a half hour when just out of the blind spot on my tie a transport is on a collision course with me. I pull straight up and start to climb towards space to get away from the incoming transport. The transport crew starts screaming over the radio "get out of the way you stupid cadet... Do you want to kill us all? Move move!!!!" I pull loop in my tie and head away from the transport over the tie of Cyleaf. After rejoining the training group

Oh- I didn't reply to this for some reason- what's my deal? Anyways- I basically decided the best way to get writing to the best you can is to... Write. So, I wanted to push you threw this and get you into a squadron right away. Yes- you may take the Aviator's. You've completed all assignments anyways: so you're good to go.
 
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CMDR/LtC Shazam/Nazgul 1-1/Phoenix Wing/mSSD Atrus/1VENF/VEN (=A=) (=*SA*=) (=*MA*=) (=*FOCE*=) [LoM] [LSM] [VC:S] [DSM]

Commander of Nazgul Squadron, Phoenix Wing and Training