Shazam
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RE: can I get some help please?
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April 6, 2006
7:59:46 PM
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Alright- go to the Naval story net. I made a story post there called 'Training- Imperial Initiation.' All I want you to do is write up a post that goes along with that and we'll work off of it- don't worry about it, but try to put your character's style and way into it a lot so we don't have to edit too much. Lez rock. -----------------------
*Flash Was Here...*
CMDR/ESN Shazam/Nazgul 1-1/Phoenix Wing/mSSD Atrus/1VENF/VEN (=A=) (=*SA*=) (=*MA*=) (=*FOCE*=) [LoM] [LSM] [VC:S] [DSM] |
demion_skar
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RE: can I get some help please?
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April 10, 2006
8:26:20 AM
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Ok Sir time to getting this party I mean training started. -----------------------
Peace is a Lie, There is only Anger
Through Anger, comes Strength
Through Strength, comes Power
Through Power, comes Victory
Through Victory my Chains are Broken
For the Dark Side will Set me FREE
Give in to your anger, let the hate Flow through you |
Shazam
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April 10, 2006
4:30:33 PM
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Alrighty then; go to the story I made and lemme know when you've made a post- we'll work on it after that. -----------------------
*Flash Was Here...*
CMDR/ESN Shazam/Nazgul 1-1/Phoenix Wing/mSSD Atrus/1VENF/VEN (=A=) (=*SA*=) (=*MA*=) (=*FOCE*=) [LoM] [LSM] [VC:S] [DSM] |
demion_skar
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RE: can I get some help please?
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April 11, 2006
6:34:45 AM
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I put in a post Sir, I don't know if I did it correctly. But I did my best Sir. -----------------------
Peace is a Lie, There is only Anger
Through Anger, comes Strength
Through Strength, comes Power
Through Power, comes Victory
Through Victory my Chains are Broken
For the Dark Side will Set me FREE
Give in to your anger, let the hate Flow through you |
Shazam
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RE: can I get some help please?
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April 12, 2006
4:06:37 PM
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I'll make sure I atleast get a post on it by tomarrow night- gotta work tonight. Thankyou. -----------------------
*Flash Was Here...*
CMDR/ESN Shazam/Nazgul 1-1/Phoenix Wing/mSSD Atrus/1VENF/VEN (=A=) (=*SA*=) (=*MA*=) (=*FOCE*=) [LoM] [LSM] [VC:S] [DSM] |
Gunnay
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RE: can I get some help please?
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April 12, 2006
4:19:24 PM
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demion, if it might help, send me your posts before you put them on the ComNet, I can help you with a grammar and send it back to you. After doing that a couple times your grammar and spelling will improve. Let me know if you're interested. -----------------------
Senior Crewman Gunnay
Nazgul Three Flight
FM/SCRW Gunnay/Nazgul 3-2/Wing I/mSSD Atrus/1VIF/VEN/VE (=*A*=) |
demion_skar
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April 13, 2006
8:40:09 AM
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Ok thank you, I will take you up on this offer and again thank you for help you are offering. -----------------------
Peace is a Lie, There is only Anger
Through Anger, comes Strength
Through Strength, comes Power
Through Power, comes Victory
Through Victory my Chains are Broken
For the Dark Side will Set me FREE
Give in to your anger, let the hate Flow through you |
demion_skar
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RE: can I get some help please?
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April 19, 2006
5:19:42 AM
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Shazam Sir when can I do some more training so that I can finish with the training? Because it has been a while since I have done some training. -----------------------
Peace is a Lie, There is only Anger
Through Anger, comes Strength
Through Strength, comes Power
Through Power, comes Victory
Through Victory my Chains are Broken
For the Dark Side will Set me FREE
Give in to your anger, let the hate Flow through you |
Shazam
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April 19, 2006
5:21:56 PM
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Check out the story post  -----------------------
*Flash Was Here...*
CMDR/ESN Shazam/Nazgul 1-1/Phoenix Wing/mSSD Atrus/1VENF/VEN (=A=) (=*SA*=) (=*MA*=) (=*FOCE*=) [LoM] [LSM] [VC:S] [DSM] |
demion_skar
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April 20, 2006
4:18:25 AM
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I checked it out Sir, I tried my best on it. Why do I have to change my bio Sir? -----------------------
Peace is a Lie, There is only Anger
Through Anger, comes Strength
Through Strength, comes Power
Through Power, comes Victory
Through Victory my Chains are Broken
For the Dark Side will Set me FREE
Give in to your anger, let the hate Flow through you |
Zharyn
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April 20, 2006
10:19:16 AM
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To improve it :P -----------------------
~Zharyn~ |
demion_skar
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April 20, 2006
10:51:22 AM
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Lol ha ha ha    -----------------------
Peace is a Lie, There is only Anger
Through Anger, comes Strength
Through Strength, comes Power
Through Power, comes Victory
Through Victory my Chains are Broken
For the Dark Side will Set me FREE
Give in to your anger, let the hate Flow through you |
Gunnay
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April 20, 2006
12:16:48 AM
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Its pretty good as is, at least how I see it. -----------------------
Senior Crewman Gunnay
Nazgul 3-2
Adjutant to the Training Officer
A:TO/FM/SCRW Gunnay/Nazgul 3-2/Wing I/mSSD Atrus/1VIF/VEN/VE (=*A*=) |
demion_skar
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April 21, 2006
4:43:41 AM
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Thank you very much Well you did upgrade it lol  -----------------------
Peace is a Lie, There is only Anger
Through Anger, comes Strength
Through Strength, comes Power
Through Power, comes Victory
Through Victory my Chains are Broken
For the Dark Side will Set me FREE
Give in to your anger, let the hate Flow through you |
demion_skar
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April 26, 2006
8:31:23 AM
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Training
Sir When I can I finish my training Sir, I have been waiting for a long time now to finish the training. I would like it done as soon as possible Sir, So that I can get on with my duties futher.
Thank you for reading this message.
Crewman M.Skardon
Demion_Skar -----------------------
Peace is a Lie, There is only Anger
Through Anger, comes Strength
Through Strength, comes Power
Through Power, comes Victory
Through Victory my Chains are Broken
For the Dark Side will Set me FREE
Give in to your anger, let the hate Flow through you |
Shazam
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April 26, 2006
4:17:47 PM
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Alrighty- now that I've reviewed my facts a little I see that you not complied with my commands. Have you ignored them? I refer back to the thread we made in the story net- when you said that you had finished with our little mission and that you'd been held up for weeks, I presumed you had either edited your last post or atleast posted again in the hopes of doing better.
As of right now, I will not pass you into a squadron for active writing duty unless you are able to sharped up your skills in the writing realm. Prove to me that you can write clearly and be concious of what you are actually saying, and I will be satisfied. That's all I ask- as of right now I'm not sure to what capacity I can hold you back, and its really not my intention, but I don't want you holding up an entire squadron because people don't get what your saying either. Do you understand what you must do? Re-read my post after your story post on that story and follow the instructions there. Contact me when you are ready for me to review. Thanks for being so patient- lets finish this thing up now. Rock On. -----------------------
*Flash Was Here...*
CMDR/ESN Shazam/Nazgul 1-1/Phoenix Wing/mSSD Atrus/1VENF/VEN (=A=) (=*SA*=) (=*MA*=) (=*FOCE*=) [LoM] [LSM] [VC:S] [DSM] |
demion_skar
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April 27, 2006
4:47:37 AM
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Ok Sir I wasn't disobeying you Sir I was held up on my forum, and other sites that I am on just now. but I am on here as much as possible. -----------------------
Peace is a Lie, There is only Anger
Through Anger, comes Strength
Through Strength, comes Power
Through Power, comes Victory
Through Victory my Chains are Broken
For the Dark Side will Set me FREE
Give in to your anger, let the hate Flow through you |
Shazam
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April 27, 2006
4:27:52 PM
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Very well, but if you'd like to proceed through training- your objectives are to follow my orders at the present time: thank you. -----------------------
*Flash Was Here...*
CMDR/LtC Shazam/Nazgul 1-1/Phoenix Wing/mSSD Atrus/1VENF/VEN (=A=) (=*SA*=) (=*MA*=) (=*FOCE*=) [LoM] [LSM] [VC:S] [DSM]
Commander of Nazgul Squadron, Phoenix Wing and Training |
demion_skar
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April 28, 2006
5:07:08 AM
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Yes Sir of course they are, I have been working hard latly to get me other forum u and running before I open it for the recruits that I have to join it.
You see it is a training academy corps for a game that I play.
I have been making medals aswell for them aswell. -----------------------
Peace is a Lie, There is only Anger
Through Anger, comes Strength
Through Strength, comes Power
Through Power, comes Victory
Through Victory my Chains are Broken
For the Dark Side will Set me FREE
Give in to your anger, let the hate Flow through you |
Gunnay
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April 28, 2006
2:25:51 PM
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Don't worry about explaining to us about another thing you're working on. If you need to take a little Leave to finish those things up, feel free to. -----------------------
Senior Crewman Gunnay
Nazgul 3-2
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demion_skar
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May 2, 2006
4:02:39 AM
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Sorry I haven't been on for a while, the libary was closed yesterday and I was away at a camp on the weekend with the cadets. -----------------------
Peace is a Lie, There is only Anger
Through Anger, comes Strength
Through Strength, comes Power
Through Power, comes Victory
Through Victory my Chains are Broken
For the Dark Side will Set me FREE
Give in to your anger, let the hate Flow through you |
Gunnay
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May 2, 2006
12:11:06 AM
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No worries, just keep going with the training. Also, try using correct grammar and spelling in just your normal posts. It will help you with your stories too. -----------------------
Senior Crewman Gunnay
Nazgul 3-2
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May 3, 2006
9:32:30 AM
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Ok no problem I will try to do that, I will amend my storys aswell. -----------------------
Peace is a Lie, There is only Anger
Through Anger, comes Strength
Through Strength, comes Power
Through Power, comes Victory
Through Victory my Chains are Broken
For the Dark Side will Set me FREE
Give in to your anger, let the hate Flow through you |
demion_skar
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May 8, 2006
7:39:02 AM
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I am back Sir and ready for the rest of training If I have any that is. -----------------------
Peace is a Lie, There is only Anger
Through Anger, comes Strength
Through Strength, comes Power
Through Power, comes Victory
Through Victory my Chains are Broken
For the Dark Side will Set me FREE
Give in to your anger, let the hate Flow through you |
Shazam
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May 16, 2006
4:26:03 PM
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ALright- lets get this done then, lol. Lemme see a post from you and thats all I really think I'll need from you before putting you onto the aviator's exam. I shouldn't keep you from having a good time just because you haven't gotten the style and common expectation down yet- that can be aquired. However, if after you've been put in a squadron and show little to no sign of improvement, I'll begin more one on one with you. I'd really like to have you as best prepared as you can be before we put you into a squadron.
So- that post I'm referring to- that goes back to our previous story and the post we were making there. No need to clean up the last one unless you really wanna start learning here- but I want you to spend as much time as you think you need making your post the absolute best it can be. Take out some books and compare if you must, but I really just want to see you try on this one. Read through it as many times as you can- point out areas where there are obvious problems or even ones that just don't seem quite right and pick them apart. Does that make sense? The WIKI is back up so you'll be able to take your aviator's afterword, but lets do our absolute best on this. Then we'll see what we can do about getting you into a squadron and possibly into the wing story. Alright- keep at it man. -----------------------
*Flash Was Here...*
CMDR/LtC Shazam/Nazgul 1-1/Phoenix Wing/mSSD Atrus/1VENF/VEN (=A=) (=*SA*=) (=*MA*=) (=*FOCE*=) [LoM] [LSM] [VC:S] [DSM]
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