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Goltred
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  Reporting In
March 12, 2006 11:57:56 AM    View the profile of Goltred 
*Salute*

I've just joined the Navy and i'm willing to be around here a lot.

Regards,
Goltred
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March 12, 2006 3:10:47 PM    View the profile of Willtconq 
Welcome to the Imperial Navy pilot. I hope that we'll see a lot of you in the future.
 
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March 12, 2006 3:53:28 PM    View the profile of Jack Nebulax 
Welcome to the Vastest of Empires, pilot.
 
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Revenge is what holds this galaxy together. Without it, the universe would be a boring place.

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March 13, 2006 1:51:28 AM    View the profile of Rustichituk 
Welcome, Pilot. I am sure you will enjoy yourself here, and I expect to see a lot of you.
 
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March 15, 2006 4:29:36 PM    View the profile of Shazam 
Howdy, I'm your training officer and I can tell you right now you arn't even close to taking that test however, read below and I will tell you step by step what to do.  Remember to always post when your done with the goal in this thread.  Thankyou.

Well, the rest of this message has, yes, been copied and pasted, bu only to save myself what time I can in an attempt to get to everyone.

What I need you to do right now is go to Character Developement page on our Naval Academy page at WIKI.  You can find it here-

http://www.vastempire.com/wiki/index.php?title=Character_Developement

Now, once you have completed your bio, post it here.  Remember to post it here or we may not see it...  Ever!  The index to basic training can be found below and not at the training site that is set up on the Naval Home Page.  Thankyou.


http://www.vastempire.com/wiki/index.php?title=Flight_School_%28FS%29

You can go to the Officer's Handbook for extra information that might help you in your bio or otherwise at-

http://www.vastempire.com/wiki/index.php?title=Officer's_Manual
(lemme know if those work, btw...)

 
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March 17, 2006 7:47:31 PM    View the profile of Goltred 
Here goes my BIO and description

Name: Goltred Skydark
Age: 19
Race: Human

Description:
Goltred has black hair and his body complexion is normal a bit muscular due to exercise. His eyes are of a dark brown colours and his color skin is tanned white. He usually wears comfortable black trousers, a white shirt with an open black t-shirt which sleeves are rolled-up, on his neck hangs a silver chain with a round-shaped paque which is marked with a strange symbol.
The tattoo of a red dragon can be seen beginning in his left arm and coiling the neck with a greenish aura embedding the dragon's claws, while a scar is seen from under his right arm's sleeve and crossing the entire arm down to the elbow.


History:
Goltred's father didn't get along well. His mother was a humble woman which did nothing more than taking care of his younger children. Goltred's brothers, were much more older than he was and his father was managing to get them in the smugglers path, breaking every single law that existed on their community.

As every smuggler, Goltred's father had enemies, and those enemies where the ones that tried to kill him many times, inexplicably to everyone, he was able to mysteriously escape from every attempt.

When Goltred was about 16 his father tried to make him join in a smuggler alliance, after longs discussions and fights, Goltred managed to evade these orders and run away from his planet.

Goltred was then trained by an old freighter to be a pilot. Goltred always loved flying and since he was a kid he used to watch military parades in his planet, now& with 19 years old, he decided to make a final step in his civilian life and enlisted in the Empire Navy.
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March 20, 2006 7:46:03 AM    View the profile of Shazam 
Cool; just a couple things I noticed for you-  I think you need to read through this bio and just point out bits and peices that don't seem to make sense.  Try to make sure you don't have excess verbage and your sentences are gramatically correct.  Also how can you be tanned white?  Lol, tan is darkened skin while white is very bright- take a look at that

Other than that- mind telling us what planet it was on and if it were imperial ruled?  Other than that- you don't really have to reveal much more about your character because you look to not want that so...

After you've completed that step, you can go on ahead and move onto 'Pilot's Procedure' at

http://www.vastempire.com/wiki/index.php?title=Pilot_Procedure

Post the assignment on that page here and if you have questions or you don't understand, post those questions or comments here as well.

(Did that last page work pretty well for you, btw?)
 
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March 21, 2006 11:17:39 PM    View the profile of Goltred 
Yup... no problems with the page Sir, i'll post the assignment soon...

Now, here's the background and desc... i apologize afterhand if i have grammar problems but since english isn't my native language i have some problems there yet

Name: Goltred Skydark
Age: 19
Race: Human

Description:
Goltred has black hair and his body complexion is normal a bit muscular due to exercise. His eyes are of a dark brown color and his skin is of a tanned color. He usually wears comfortable black trousers, a white shirt with an open black t-shirt which sleeves are rolled-up, on his neck hangs a silver chain with a round-shaped plaque which is marked with a strange symbol.
The tattoo of a red dragon can be seen beginning in his left arm and coiling the neck with a greenish aura embedding the dragon's claws, while a scar is seen from under his right arm's sleeve and crossing the entire arm down to the elbow.

History:

Goltred's Father, Kharn, was a local smuggler in the city of Coronet at Corellia. Amelia, his mother, was a waiter of a bar located in the suburbs of the city in which they met. On the beginning they got along very well and got married, due to the underground job of Kharn, his wife's life was always in danger and had to run away from authorities more than once. One year later Max was born.

Few years later, Kharn and Amelia had their second son Goltred, both Goltred and Max grew together marked by their character differences, Max was an aggressive boy that at the age of 15 joined his father's smuggler group, Goltred instead tried to keep away from such activities and fought with him more than once trying to defend his ideals...

With the past of time, Kharn gained more renown among smugglers and began to show off less in his home. Goltred often saw him with strange cloaked characters and his action were more agressive than before.
Amelia, tired of their way of living confronted Kharn and ended up wounded by him... When Goltred saw her mother fall to the floor jumped of the shadows he was hiding to attack his father, all he can remember after that is darkness, pain and screams... He woke up and found her mother sitted next to him tending his right arm which was severely damaged with some kind of cutting weapon, his house was completely destroyed, every single furniture, closet or chair was broken on the floor and no signs of Kharn or Max were found on Coronet or Corellia since then.

One year later, at the age of 19, Goltred decided to leave his family and enlisted for the Empire Navy.
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March 22, 2006 4:13:25 PM    View the profile of Shazam 
Again I think you need to just read through it very carefully to make sure you've got your grammer figured out, although I'll eventually correct it for you; other than that, its lookin good.  You can go on ahead and proceed to "Pilot's Procedure" on the wiki site.  You can find it at-

http://www.vastempire.com/wiki/index.php?title=Pilot_Procedure

Now, you need to read the page and the instructions very carefully, or you may have some serious troubles.  If you have any questions or comments- post them here.

As for the assignment at the bottom of the page, if you can get it in within the next day or so, it would be to your greatest benefit- from here on out is where you are really beginning to get judged.  I suppose you won't have any problem graduating at the top of your class though, lol, cause no one has come back to compete just yet- I'll have to get around to sending out e-mails.  Lemme know if you have any problems; keep rockin.
 
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March 23, 2006 2:22:23 AM    View the profile of Goltred 
Now for the Assignment....

I will basically talk about two manouvers.. the Barrel Roll and the Split S.

First of all the positive part of the manouver as it is explained in the Wiki Page.

Barrel Roll: A manouver that have both Offensive and Defensive effects, it basically makes my craft lose speed to either approach my target more slowly or make the bandit that's pursuing me overpass me.

I use this manouver often when i can't take the bandit behind me, to perform this i must pull up my craft (i'm not sure how to spell this...) while rolling left or right making my craft to gain altitude while losing speed.

Split S: More than just a get away manouver, the Split S gives my craft the necesary speed to gain AoT from my pursuer and leave the battle field safely. This manouver could also be used to quickly turn around after a Head On with another craft (Explained below).

Defensive: When engaged in guns battle this manouver can get the craft out of sights quickly because of the speed the ship gains while descending. Also, and in disaccord with the Pilot Manual, i think this manuover is perfect to avoid incoming missiles because chaffs are fired when missile is close enough, then the abrupt turn of the craft, the sudden gain of speed and the quick decrease of altitude could make the missile get lock on the chaffs and loose the vessel as target.

Offensive: My other opinion about this manouver is that, after a Head On encounter, it makes the ship capable of quickly turning around and getting the speed necessary to decrease the AoT with the target craft.


And one major negative about this (and i think that almost every) manouver....

I think that Defensive and Offensive manouvers have better effects on "atmospherical" battles

Why do i think this... taking my two selected manouvers as examples.

The Barrel Roll works in base of the resistance the craft makes against the air, when the craft pitches up the air makes it to gain altitude while decreasing it's speed and then does the opposite when the craft has rolled 180ยบ and is beginning to lower it's altitude.

Now, since in space is no air, there's nothing that resists the move of the craft so it won't lose speed... Virtually it will gain altitude (if such thing exists in space ) and its turn radius will be greater making the attacker approach faster to the craft.

Maybe the BFM and AFT should have two explanations, one for space battles and other for atmospherical battles because the physics of each environment makes the manouver to work different.

In another example, the Split S wouldn't have the same effect in space cause there's no gravity to pull the craft down and increase it's speed...

Well... i hope this does well for my first assignment

EDIT: Sorry... i forgot to add the next. Even in atmospherical battles, Tie's Class fighters doesn't have the aerodinamical structure to make resistance against air...
[This message has been edited by Goltred (edited March 23, 2006 2:41:08 AM)]
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March 23, 2006 4:32:50 PM    View the profile of Shazam 
This is very true but TIE Class Fighters still have weight because of their mass and the fact they are in atmosphere, so the effects will remain very similar when pulling something of an S-turn; in fact, they will be more effective because of the higher turn radius.  (Also, these were meant for atmospheric battle, but I'll see what I can do to indicate ones most useful in space.  Thanks!)

Lol- you are the first person to go through this course and you have completed it above what I thought possible for new recruits.  So- I say now that you have surpassed my expectations and are more than qualified to go on and finish up the last chapter of BT.  Go on to-

http://www.vastempire.com/wiki/index.php?title=Flight_School_%28FS%29

Read up on Chapter III and go into 'the Post' when you're ready.  Your final assignment is within that topic and you must pay careful attention so that you might be able to complete it to the upmost efficiency.  After you have completed the assignment for 'The Post,' I'd like you to read through 'The Squadron.'  That just tells you your duties once you have arrived.  Put your final versions of your story post in this thread for reviewing; we'll critique it and then if you have done well- we'll send you off to the final task...  The Aviator's Exam.  The best to you.
 
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March 24, 2006 2:32:24 AM    View the profile of Goltred 
Question... where can i find the training roster to pick up squadron pilots for the posts???
 
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March 24, 2006 4:23:13 PM    View the profile of Shazam 
Ah- do you know where the roster is?  When you enter the main page at 'vastempire.com/main.cfm' you will see a series of options on the side.  One of those options you had to pick in order to get here- go to the set of links under the node 'Resources.'  Simply select the link entitled 'Roster'.  From the roster, you will see another set of links to the left; proceed to the Navy Roster links (the top of that set).  In the roster, you will be able to view all the squadrons and their members as well as positions held by other people; you need to go to the bottom of the page to find the training group.  The training group is just people who are being trained for a set amount of time- after graduation or that set amount of time, they will be swept off and a new group will be put in.  You can take anyone from that group and put them in your story, I think.  If you wanna kill someone off, its normally best to make some one up though... 

Let me know if you have any further problems- this is all to help me clean up the training system, so lay 'em on me.  Put your post in this thread when you're done.  (Preferably one after another...)  Keep rockin.
 
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March 25, 2006 11:44:14 PM    View the profile of Goltred 
Here's my space post... I'll post the another one during the next few hours or, at most, tomorrow... (Man... I hope this is fine )

Desus One: LCPT Ryncho Denar (Trainer)
Desus Two: TRN Goltred Skydark
Desus Three: TRN Drayk Nejus
Desus Four: TRN John Soldor

Perser Summit's Hangar Bay

Goltred was standing with the rest of his group at one side of the four Tie Interceptor's that they where going to fly for this training. Every one of them, already dressed up in the navy combat suit and with the helmets in their hands. Goltred felt like first day at school while waiting for their training officer to arrive...

Suddenly, Line Captain Ryncho Denar walked into the hangar in his combat suit and stopped in front of the three pilots who immediately saluted at the arriving officer.

"At ease pilots... Today you will be flying for first time the Tie Interceptor and i wanted to give you a piece of advice, since this is one of the fastest craft we have try to measure the distances because the most common problem i have seen in trainees is the lack of speed handling of this ships. Now, board your vessels and report over the radio."

Goltred walked silently to his assigned ship, the Desus Two and quickly climbed into the cockpit to prepare himself, he then closed the security belts and examined the cockpit controls - Man... the simulator is a perfect image of this - He though while placing his right hand on the control stick and the left hand on the throttle, to remember later that he has to close the cockpit. "What's taking you so long Desus Two" - was heard over the radio while Goltred was beginning to close the cabin, then he replied "Nothing... Just taking a last breath". The dark cockpit was finally sealed, Goltred doubted on what to do next as he seemed to have forgotten half of his training in the combat simulator within the VENA HQ. Two seconds later his mind seemed to have waken up and in a quick move he powered up the vessel, watching those confusing green leds in front on him confirming that all systems were being initiated successfully.

"Desus 3, online... Desus 4, Online..." was heard in the radio and he quickly confirmed that he was ready, Ryncho just smiled as he heard the confirmation from his trainees and then contacted Perser Summit's control. "This is Desus Squadron Lead requesting permission to leave Hangar Bay 3" - few second later the beautiful voice of a female replied to the request. "Desus Lead, permission granted, Good luck on your flight".
"Desus Squadron you've heard the lady, begin procedures and prepare for departure... for this time we will exit the hangar bay one by one to prevent accidents.". The Four Tie's lifted from the floor of the Hangar bay slowly, Desus One was perfectly hovering while the other three made a show of discontrol and miscalculation that could have made anyone get embarrassed of what was going on there. "Damnit, this is harder than in the simulator" said Drayk while his vessel began to turn from one side to another, almost hitting Desus Four. After some minutes the trainees where capable of holding the ships still behind their lead and where ready to exit the hangar, "Remember to handle it slowly!" said Ryncho to his squadron while he throttled to 1/3 of power and maneuvered slowly out of the Hangar bay. Goltred pressed the throttle firmly with his left hand and slowly began to gain speed exiting the hangar bay without incidents followed by Drayk and passed quickly by John's vessel who flied into space at 100% throttle.

Ryncho watched in his right radar how the three trainees exited the cruiser and the excess of speed of John. "Desus Squadron this is Lead, we're not doing anything harder until you get to control your craft better, we're traveling 500 meters away from the Perser Summit and there you can fly around doing as you please" - Ryncho said while setting throttle to 100% and flying away from the cruiser. Desus Two, Three and Four tried to follow their leader as formed as possible but their lack of feeling with the ship messed up the formation. The pilots then began to experiment with the Tie at different speeds, trying to catch up each others and engaging in mini pursuing games to get more comfortable with the craft. Fifteen minutes later the squadron gathered once again and began to practice formations, this time results where completely different as the squadron followed a 4 Waypoint flight pattern in diamond, line and arrow formations.

Goltred's heart was beating quickly because of the excitement of flying in space, as one of his dreams where being accomplished in that moment. He was uncomfortable with the ship's handling as it was his first time flying it but he thought that this was the beginning of a long training in which his skill with the Tie Interceptor will surely increase. Desus One leaded the squadron in Arrow formation to a small shooting ground conformed of canisters

The field was separated in four sections. "Desus Squad, Wait Here and watch", Desus One quickly raised his speed and armed his lasers approaching the target area. When the canisters where at range the cannons where fired at every single target and in just a few seconds 12 targets where destroyed just a moment later Desus One returned to the rest of the group.
"All of you have 3 designated canisters in this area, when you target it the display will show your ship's name followed by the word Target X. You have to destroy them all in the least amount of time possible and return here. The last one to reach this exact position will have to clean the other's boot for one week. Now, form up... Ready... Set... Go!". The three Tie's flew at their maximum speed to their designated area. Goltred targeted the first canister and checked it's id in the display, seeing that's not the target he selected the next one until he found the first canister, he quickly centered it the HUD and fired at him when it was in range but the laser passed by the side of the target and now the ship was heading directly to it... in a quick and desperate attempt, Goltred throttled down to 0%, pulled the control stick against him as further as he can and pressed the left pedal to attempt break the path toward the canister only missing it by a few centimeters. Still with the left pedal pressed, Goltred tried to regain his breath and headed out of the field again to turn around and perform another run against the canisters destroying this time the three of them in a short period of time, he then watched his scanners and saw that Desus Four just finished his task and was turning toward Desus One. Goltred quickly throttled up and began flying toward his leader, John and Goltred struggled to reach the rest of the Squad first and after a few seconds maneuvering and blocking his pass Desus Two reached the squadron.

"Very good pilots, you seem to have gained a little more of confidence with the Tie interceptor but let's call it a day. Tomorrow we'll have another training day and you need to rest up a bit.". Desus squadron flew together to the Perser Summit and now, with much more precision, they managed to dock safely on the Hangar Bay.

EDIT: I hope is good now

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[This message has been edited by Goltred (edited March 26, 2006 7:03:53 PM)]
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March 26, 2006 3:47:51 PM    View the profile of Shazam 
Excellent first post- well done.  You've created a nice- very basic story post. 

Suggestions:  In the VE, we don't have to put the text in bold when we type dialogue, so just keep all of it normal.  The only thing we change at all is ship names and when someone is dreaming or thinking about something- then we put it in italics.

Also, if you want to make your post a little more understandable, you need to keep it in the same tense.  Like you can stay in the present, the past, but you need to make sure that its all on the same playing feild like... 

"Two seconds later his mind seemed to have waken up and in a quick move he powered up the vessel, watching those confusing green leds in front on him confirming that all systems were being initiated successfully."

but then you went-


"He still needs a lot of training but his skill with the tie interceptor was increasing rapidly during the flight training but he was still feeling uncomfortable with the ship's handling."

Do you see what I mean?  How you went from talking in third person to talking about in...  Well I think that's second person- not entirelly sure what to call it.  Lemme know if you don't understand.

Also, you tend to get your wording a little mixed up some times, so its hard to understand whats going on if you're just reading though it.  Seeings how this is your second language, I certainly don't blame you and we did get the jist of what you were saying so you were fine.  As for what we can do to correct that?  Just read through it quick, that should be able to make correcting really easy- only takes about a minute to do.

Note: If you do spot a mistake in your post or you need to change or add/delete anything from your post, you can do so by pushing the 'edit' button on the upper right hand corner of your post.  Its the one with a pencil and paper, btw.

What I just ran through is just simple stuff you can fix, not a big deal if you make a mistake every once in a while either.  I think if you just read through these before you post them, maybe click the preview button so you know how they'll look- you'll be awesome. 

For your next post, might I suggest that you go on ahead and put a little more of your character in it?  Like maybe put in a flashback so we know a little about your character or refer to something in your past or the way your character thinks?  I'd really like to see that side of your writing now that I know you can write technically when talking about space and your craft.

Can't wait to see your next one; keep rockin.



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[This message has been edited by Shazam (edited March 26, 2006 3:52:37 PM)]
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March 26, 2006 11:55:04 PM    View the profile of Goltred 
Atmospheric Flight. Darn spellchecker deleted my whole corrected post!

Desus One: LCPT Ryncho Denar (Trainer)
Desus Two: TRN Goltred Skydark
Desus Three: TRN Drayk Nejus
Desus Four: TRN John Soldor

Onboard Perser Summit

Goltred was laying in his bed thinking on his previous training missions in space when he heard a loud sound outside his door, as he sitted on his bed the room light's turned off and screams could be heard in the distance. Standing up from the bed he quickly grabbed the blaster that was on the small table along his bed and prepared it to fire while walking slowly to the door.

As the door slided open Goltred saw some broken furniture and the low light of the room showed only a human figure standing next to a couch looking at the floor. The screams were more clearer as he walked into the room aiming at the human - "Freeze!" he said as it was the only authorization word he could remember from those old movies he used to watch but he received no answer, the human was still standing there without moving.

Goltred was confused on what to do, he quickly examined the rest of the room seeing only the dark walls that conformed the room and one meter to his right was a small table with a decorative plant and broken picture that was laying down on it, still aiming at the human he slowly strafed toward the picture, holding the blaster with his left hand he took the picture and looked at it. His eyes opened widly and his hand began to tremble as he saw his mother on the broken picture and realized that those screams where from her, suddenly some footsteps where heard, Goltred quickly dropped the picture and looked toward the human who was now standing in front of him with a sharp-curved vibroblade in his left hand, his heart began to beat as fast as possible when he saw the eyes of his father looking coldly at him and the vibroblade cutting his right arm skin, muscles and nerves... Now all was darkness.

Goltred opened his eyes and found himself laying on his bed. Just a dream - he thought while getting up and dressing himself for his next training session at planet Berchat. Looking at the clock in the wall he ran to the door and pressed the button to open it, he then sprinted toward the preparation room and dressed his combat suit to end the sprint at Hangar Bay 1 where the Bulk Cruiser Amadeus was about to take off and where Line Captain Ryncho and the rest of Desus Squadron was waiting. "Damnit Goltred we though you weren't coming today!m, hurry up here and board the Amadeus i'll brief you there" - said Ryncho as he saw the trainee run toward his group. Desus squadron boarded the Cruiser and it undocked from the Perser Summit's

Meanwhile....

The preparations for the training were almost complete at Berchat's surface, Ryncho in all his faculty set-up a small battleground in which the trainees would prove theyselves useful. The planet surface was all blurred because of sand lifted by the strong winds of the planet, the two officers Ryncho assigned descended from his shuttle to set up the last surprise, they where wearing their life support suits that granted them the necesary oxygin to survive the harsh atmosphere of the planet and placed the device, five minutes later they returned to the ship where another officer from the crew was waiting them with blaster in hand -"Sorry guys! but this is were you go off!" - said the guy and then shoted the two officers, he walked to the cargo room and brought another body which was thrown to the desert with the rest of the bodies.

Bulk Cruiser Amadeus

Desus Squad was preparing their Tie Interceptor while the cruisers entered the planet's atmosphere, all trainees felt much more comfortable this time, they accurately powered their ship and prepared for departure...
Soon the comlink of each interceptor communicated "Desus Squadron, this is Amadeus Control... you're cleared to undock. Good luck officers" - in response the four Ties lifted from the floor at the same time and maintained their position for a few seconds, "Arrow Formation, 1/3 speed follow me" - said Desus one who inmediatly throttled up and undocked the cruiser.

The squadron left the cruiser's hangar perfectly formed and with perfect precision, the three trainees soon began to experience the force feedback on their control sticks due to the gravity of the planet but after a few seconds almost all of them managed to control their craft like in space.

After giving them a few minutes to get used to the gravity Desus One transmitted "We're spliting up in two, lock your weapons and fly 3 kilometers away from us. Then we'll play chicken... Desus Two, you're coming with me". The squadron quickly separated and prepared for the run, the four ties where looking themselves when Desus One gave the order to set throttle to full speed. While advancing Goltred's radio transmitted- "Desus Two, break down when you're getting to him". His pulse raised quickly while travelling toward the two ships, Goltred targeted Desus 4 as it was the ship in front of him and watched very closely the distance on the HUD.
(Distance: 1.20.) His left hand began to tremble as the distance was shorter (Distance: 0.80), he could see the other Tie's (Distance: 0.61) from his cockpit now "Why in hell are we doing this..." - he thought as the distance was making shorter.(Distance: 0.18) Neither his leader or the other ties had moved yet, he began to sweat slightly as he saw Desus Four details. it was less than a two seconds when pushed the stick away from him and prayed that it would work, Desus Four and Three breaked to the sides while Desus One made a perfect loop and a loud "Yeeeeeeehaw!!!" - was heard on the squad frequency. Goltred's heart returned to his normal beating as he saw nothing but air in front of him, he tried pull the stick to regain altitude and found that it left apply the necesary force to estabilize the craft again. "Desus Two, Desus Two Pull up damnit!" - said Jack as he saw his target altitude decrease rapidly in the HUD, Goltred quickly set power to 0% and holded the control stick with both hands while pulling it with all his strength managing to level the craft just a few hundred of meters before touching ground. "Well... That's something new" - Said Ryncho while descending slowly to about 3000 meters off the ground - "Are you okay pilot.... Desus three and Four come here".

Desus Squadron gathered together and flew about 15 kilometers from their starting point, the layout of the ground changed drastically from desert to rocky mountains and canyons. "This is it pilots, as you can see your sensors shows 8 enemy crafts about 15 kilometers from here in a mountain surrounded canyon. There are many access points but to train your manouvering we will be using a small path that allows us to get near them without being detected until we are about to attack them. These crafts will attack you with red tracers which will tell your onboard computer that you have been hit, try to get them as fast as possible as you can." - Said this, Desus One throttled to 80% and descended to the path he signaled which was at 800 meters above ground level.

The four ties began to manouver throughout the canyon, many curves and natural portals where here so the pilots could get used to the gravity near ground. The three trainees tried to follow their perfect leader moves as best as possible trying not to hit the walls or the portals that passed. On the final turn, the Tie's throttled to 100% and armed their weapons, when they exited the path the three trainees picked a target and began to pursue it. The 5 of the 8 Fighters began to follow the trainees while the other three began pursuing Desus One. Seeing this, quickly began to manouver out of their sights and changed to another frequency- "Jasper this is Desus Lead, you're not supposed to pursue me you know!". The radio returned nothing but static, Rhyno then looked at his trainees and saw realized the problem they were facing... "Damnit, Desus Squad, you're under Live fire! i repeat, Live Fire!... destroy the fighters inmediatly!" - Hearing this the pilots began to shiver and tried to avoid the incoming shots. "Amadeus this is Desus Lead, friendly fighters have turned against us at coordinates 308,41. Be prepared to provide assistance for this trainees." - Said Ryncho to their Cruiser while he destroyed the second fighter pursuing him, Desus Three and Two were being pursued by two fighters while Desus Four managed to get behind his pursuer. "Got you!" - said Jack as he began to spread his lasers toward his target, missing most of them due to his lack of training and passed again his target.

Ryncho looked at the outnumbered trainees and thought on the chances they had of leave the field in one piece... "Squad, first of all relax, i know this is your first time in atmosphere flight [Laser Sounds] God Damnit!.... but you must try to relax and think [Explosion] you're in the simulator!". Said this, Desus one began to pursuit his last enemy while the rest of the squadron realized what they were doing wrong. Soon enough to regain confidence, two ships were destroyed by Desus three and four while Desus Two now had 2 bogies in his tail, trying to remember what he learned in flight school he lured them a little closer even knowing how this would endanger his ship... quickly he throttled to 0% and pulled the control stick while turning to the right making some weird kind of Barrel roll as his ship never finished the turn but managing to make one of the pursuers pass him and then throttled up to 100% again and beginning to align his sights with the target. "This is Two, can anyone get me the fighter out of my six!?" - was saying Goltred when the fighter suddenly exploted and flying through it's remains appeared Desus One. "Done pilot... now get that sucker out of the skies!" - Goltred, more confident and easied begin to manouver his craft until he was aligned with the target "Easy... easy..." - he thought while maintaining it leveled and then firmly pressed the red button, firing the lasers towards it target and destroying it.

Only two fighters are left and Desus had air superiority, while the trainees handled the remaining crafts Desus One tried to contact Jasper again receiving no response and fearing they would have more into this. Desus Two and Four managed to destroy the other two fighters when Ryncho said "Desus Squad , we're moving out through the same path we came into, because it's cleared... Four, lead the way".

The four Ties began to move through the canyon they already knew at 75% of speed, the path seemed tranquil and secure until burst of lasers began began firing from the ground... "God Damnit i forgot these!... Squadron full throttle and try to get out of the canyon!" - said Ryncho at the moment he setted his throttle to maximum, and manouvering his ship to avoid the incoming laser fire, during the manouvers the unexperienced pilots got pretty close to crashing their craft to the canyon walls as they traveled at full speed through it, just 2 more kilometers and they would be out of the canyon... suddenly, Goltred ship began to turn wildly as three lasers impact took of his right wing... in a last manouver he managed to pull up his plane to then get his engines disabled due to damage. The craft was now traveling with it's last impulse "I'm hit, I'm hit!" - said Goltred over the radio while trying to make the craft more estable to eject from it, helped with the tail coils and the little control he had left the craft stopped spinning, Goltred then pulled the ejection lever, the craft's cockpit opened in a matter of seconds and the seat was launched just before Goltred saw the slope of a mountain in front of him.

From here it was a burst of images that passed quickly before Goltred's eyes in which he saw those times when his father was still with them, he then saw forgotten memories of violence in which his parents fought everyday and Kharn usually hitted Goltred with no apparent reason. Then he saw his father throught the window handling small packages to cloacked figures, then Kharn's happyness face while killing a neighboor friend and his dark, sinister eyes walking toward him before everything turned black.

Goltred woke up in a white room, examining the room he saw a closed curtain to the right and some chair to the left of the bed, then he tried to remember what happened after the ejection but he obviously vanished while in the air but apparently he only ended with some minour wounds and a terrible headache. Few days later he was able to walk again and returned to his quarters, looking at the calendar in it he saw that 2 weeks has passed since that training mission. Walking around the Perser Summit's corridor he looked for his squad mates and was glad that all of them managed to return home safely, little further trought the corridors he saw Ryncho Denar and walked towards him.

"Oh my god boy!.. I't good to see you up!" - Said Ryncho in a joyful tone of voice, Goltred saluted him according to the military etiquette and proceded with the conversation. "Sir... I would like to know what happened that day..." - he said seriously and waited for an answer.

Ryncho explained him that he ejected just on time because his Tie crashed with the mountain and was converted to pieces. Since the ship wasn't aligned with the horizon the seat flew through the air in a diagonal direction giving it enough time to open the parachute and slow the fall. Few minutes later a medical shuttle arrived at Goltred's location and found him laying on the ground vanished and bleeding due to the fall and the explosion, from there he was taken to the Amadeus infirmary room and then transfered to the Parser Summit's.

Goltred looked at his trainer with a face of curiosity as he said - "Sir, what happened down there.... wasn't it just a training mission" - "But if it was a great training Pilot!" Ryncho answered with a notorious smile in his face and patting the pilot's shoulder, then in a more serious tone he added "Don't you worry about little details, the officer involved in this has already been punished... The rest just leave it up to me".

 
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March 27, 2006 6:48:49 PM    View the profile of Shazam 
Excellent, excellent second post.  You've done exactly as I've asked (ignoring some simple gramatical errors and confusion), so I can now say you are ready to take the Aviator's Exam.  The Aviator's Exam is the final test, quite literally, of your skills in the VEN.  Go on ahead and follow the link below to learn more about it.

(Did you read the Squadron guidelines, btw?  You'll need to know them after the test.)

Go on ahead and e-mail your test as it says on there to [email protected] 

To be safe, also send it to [email protected] 

I need to test if this is going to work out.  Thankyou for all your work- the best to you.

http://www.vastempire.com/wiki/index.php?title=Aviator%27s_Exam

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March 28, 2006 4:44:48 PM    View the profile of Goltred 
Roger, i'm sorry for this but i won't be able to work on the exam until next monday cause i won't have internet access during this period...

Sorry!!
 
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March 30, 2006 7:22:44 AM    View the profile of Shazam 
That's fine- get to it when you can and when you're done, we'll put you in a squadron and get a graduation date for you.  Rock on.
 
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March 31, 2006 6:07:56 PM    View the profile of Goltred 
Just sent the answers sir but As i stated before, i'll regain full internet access on monday...


 
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April 2, 2006 11:58:01 AM    View the profile of Shazam 
As I told you before, you received distinction and I can now tell you that your rank is Senior Crewman so you can put SCRW as your rank in your ID line now.

As for your squadron- there's no doubt in my mind that you are going to either Nazgul or Kaph.  The debate is who needs it most, and I'm beginning to think its Nazgul, because atleast Kaph has consistant activity, but you'll know by tomarrow. 

If there is a meeting today, and you can find your way to it- and I am there (dunno if I will yet), I'll give you your graduation ceremony :>

Until I give you an answer on that, go on ahead and look into the Nazgul and Kaph topics to see whats going on, or maybe even look at the stories.  Keep rockin.
 
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  RE: Reporting In
April 3, 2006 8:00:40 AM    View the profile of Goltred 
Thanks... i'm ansious to be assigned

by the way, i have a mayor problem and it's about IRC. My only chance of being connected to internet is when i'm working because i don't have a computer in my home (yet... hopefully ), and in here i don't have access to any kind of chat... the truth is that i don't have access to anything besides web pages (outgoing connection to ports are forbidden).

I'm sorry if this causes problems but i forgot to state this at the beginning of my training
 
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April 3, 2006 9:44:13 AM    View the profile of Willtconq 
that shouldn't too much problem. We mostly use it for activeness, but a lot of the squadrons/squads use it for weekly meetings, so you're gonna probably miss out on that. But i'm sure some of your future squadron mates will be more than willing to send you the meeting logs.
 
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April 3, 2006 4:50:32 PM    View the profile of Shazam 
Alright- the time has come!  After some careful evaluation, I've decided that you should be placed in Kaph Squadron.  While Nazgul does seem to have a low level of activity, its rather deceptive.  We have people on leave and are going to be coming back, also- I beleive that the way you write and branch out is more contiguous to Kaph than Nazgul.  Maybe that won't always be true, but I beleive that it is for now.

As for your position in the squadron- I need to know from Will whether or not to take Rath Tinner off of the Kaph Roster.  If that is so, you will be wingman to JSRussel.  Now, i'd also like to know if Russel is on leave- if he is, we may momentarilly shift you to second flight with Demonic and Than Sion.

Your commander will message you about it though-

Congratulations on being the first person to ever pass through the newly developed Academy- you've done well and I'm proud to say that we've managed to inculcate atleast some of the knowledge we presented to you.  Don't forget your training and stay close to your freinds. 

The best to you- ROCK ON.
 
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  RE: Reporting In
April 5, 2006 7:24:39 AM    View the profile of Goltred 
Sir, one last question....

Is it correct that in the roster i appear as Crewman and not Senior Crewman?
 
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April 5, 2006 3:41:20 PM    View the profile of Shazam 
Ooops- corrected.  Rock On.
 
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  RE: Reporting In
April 5, 2006 6:27:48 PM    View the profile of Goltred 
Thanks Sir!
 
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