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Demonic
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  A new bio
February 18, 2006 4:47:46 PM    View the profile of Demonic 
DEMONIC'S BIO



PERSONAL RECORD
Name: Kal
Callsign: Demonic
Age: 17
Apperance: Has red eyes and Black hair, giving him a "Demonic" appearance. Tall and Thin.
Homeworld: Unknown - Earliest known home was Corellia

SERVICE INFORMATION
Squadron: Kaph
Position: Second flight leader
Rank: Petty Officer, 2nd Class
Certifications: (=*A*=) - Passed with 100% marks


HISTORICAL RECORD
Demonic's earliest memory was at the age of 10, when he awoke in the wreckage of a transport ship in slums of Corellia. He was found by "The Demonic", a speeder bike gang, and they looked after him, teaching him how to race speeders. He eventually became so good that they made him their star racer, giving him the title of Demonic, which he still retains as his callsign to this day.

Eventually gang wars became more and  more fierce, and the Demonic were slaughtered in a midnight raid by another gang. Demonic, having been out at the time, came back to find the people who he had come to accept as his family all killed. Alone in a large city, he was lucky enough to find and befriend Rannik Cedaan, a member of a old Corellian noble family.

Through Rannik, Demonic was introduced to the resistance against the New Republic. It his here he found the love of his life: Starfighters. He learned how to fly and became one of the resistance's few pilots, but it would not last. In the end, the resistance was crushed, Rannik gone on a quest of revenge, and Kal was once again on his own.

Demonic started to earn money to support himself by playing Sabaac. He proved to be quite good at this, and in a high-stakes game, he won a TIE-Avenger from a former imperial pilot. Shortly after he departed for space, in search of his family

Then, by pure chance, he flew into a Vast Imperial fleet. Taken prisoner, he was interrogated for how he had gotten the Avenger, and where he came from. In the end, he decided he wanted to join their fight. He was given back his fighter, and was enlisted to Kaph Squadron after a short time in the Naval Academy.


PERSONALITY INFORMATION

Demonic is not very sociable, and spends most of his time alone. He spends his time drawing, slicing computers, and tuning up his ships. He is dedicated to his job, and loves flying beyond all else.


I cleaned it up a bit with HTML, changed it, tell me what you think
 
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|FL/PO2_Demonic/Kaph 5/PheonixWing/mSSD Atrus/DEF/VEN/VE| (=*A*=)
100% on my Exam, looking good.
Demonic = Darr-Rann
Kaph 2nd flight leader
Shazam
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Shazam
 
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  RE: A new bio
March 21, 2006 4:51:18 PM    View the profile of Shazam 
I kind of like your character, lol- mind beafing him up though?  You gave a very, very bare history of him- he just went around on speeder bikes the entire time?  No close freinds or life-changing events besids the death of his group? The imperials just let you off when you decided to join them?  Interest- who was in charge?  Were there concequences?  If not, why?  Demonic spends a lot of time flying- why?  Does it help him escape, or does he enjoy the sensation, is he a perfectionist?  All of the above?  None of the above?

My point is- if you were to read through this bio, would you ask yourself any questions about the character?  If you do, which I'm sure you would, maybe that is something you can work on.  Pick out what you feel is most evident and will allow your character to really be amplified- the bare minimum is just that.  But good story- maybe you can beef it up through actual story post rather than just a bio. 

Gotta run- lookin good though, man.  Rock ON.
 
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