Howdy there- I'm the training officer (TO) of the Vast Empire Naval Academy (VENA). Our staff, the VENA-S, is composed of trainers and operators, all who can be seen at the following website:
http://www.vastempire.com/wiki/index.php?title=VENA_Staff
Now that you've posted here on the ComNet, you've actually completed the Imperial Initiation (II) phase of Basic Traing (BT). BT's second phase is called Flight School (FS), which is made up of three chapters and an exam. The first chapter, and probably the most important aspect of our system, is that of Character Creation- the bio. In order for your character to exist in our club, our universe if you will, you need to create them in written form, detailing their stories, their personalities and the physcial aspects that we may be aware of with a glance or perhaps things we can not see with the naked eye. Either way, you're going to tell us how to describe you're character in a more detailed fashion than you're probably used to, but that's part of the fun.
Really, the bio is a tool- think of it as the essential form of telling someone what your character is like. When someone in your squadron is wanting to know what you're eye color was again or what that abandoned planet was your character was born on- where are they going to look? SO- this is a source of all knowledge on your character, a resevoir of important info. Eventually, you're bio will contain other important facts about you, the member of the Vast Empire Navy, like rank, medals, commendations and other certificates.
So, if you'll follow the link below, you'll be able to see the entirety of Flight School, the portion of BT I was referring to above. BT is, essentially, training and thus, once you've passed through it, you're going to be placed in an Active Squadron, in 'Active Duty'. On the other hand, during training, you're actually a part of a Training Squadron- this squadron is known as 'Venom Squadron.' During you're time here you will need to make at least one report out to the squadron commander and XO- Jaden. Jaden is also the TX, so it shouldn't be too difficult to pinpoint him.
Also, depending on how well you do here against the recruits currently training, you'll receive a rank at the end of your training and receive certain recommendations or promotions. On the Sunday of your completion of BT, you will have a graduation ceremony with you're fellow recruits and rewards and the like will be handed out. Note though, only the strong and studious will make it that far, though I don't think any of our activities are too overwhelming, just difficult at first to get used to.
So, you'll want to go to Chapter 1- Character Development first where you'll create a bio. Just remember that in the course of your training sometime, preferably before the end of the week and before you're graduation ceremony, you'll have to make a report. So, lets get off to a good start and get you goin- Rock On!
http://www.vastempire.com/wiki/index.php?title=Flight_School_%28FS%29
If you'd like to check out the Naval Academy site, you can follow the link below to explore a little 
http://www.vastempire.com/wiki/index.php?title=Naval_Academy
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Now then- that's kind of our customary welcome message, lol. However, it appears you've already set to work on a storyline that, probably, would be detailed in your bio- the 'History' portion to be exact. What you need to know is that your story works alright, its just not well written at this point. That's not me being cynical, it's just a simple observation based on the idea that you may not have proof-read it. For instance, there's no capitilization, some words and grammer don't make sense when worked with eachother, and there's just a lack of any real detail or overall organization. Again, that's not to say you're a bad writer, you just wrote ina hurry and didn't get through what probably needed to be explained.
Now, that's where the bio comes into play- you need to read through that section on 'Bios' and focus on creating the most accurate depiction you can for your character. Let's get a rough draft up in the next day or so and I'll help you along with it- I should be online as well in case you need me. Read the contacts page at the top of this post if you need to get in contact with me; Rock ON.
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SC/CMD Shazam/Nazgul 1-1/Phoenix Wing/mSSD Atrus/1VENF/VEN (=A=) (=*SA*=) (=*MA*=) (=*FOCE*=) [LoM] [LSM] [VC:S] [DSM]
NazgulSquadron
Commander of Nazgul Squadron, Phoenix Wing and Training