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Jayson
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Jayson's bio

August 14, 2006 10:17:31 PM

Language basic
Hair brown
Eyes brown
Height 5'6
Weight 130
Age unknown
Full name Jayson (unknow)
Physical build muscular
Talents/skills Living with animals so long it would seem that he has pick up on thier sence on fear and hatered all most smelling it in a person.
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As far as I can tell he lost both his parents. How on the other hand I have know idea I'm guessing his age when we found him around 15 or 16 making him 28 now. When we found him he was more like a dog then a person. And the frist few months I thought he was a lost cause. but with hard work and training he has come along and is ready to serve are purpose. I will keep working with him and hopfuly some of his past will come to light.

[This message has been edited by Jayson (edited August 16, 2006 2:31:33 AM)]

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RE: Jayson's bio

October 16, 2006 11:27:08 AM

Hi, sorry for not responding. I didn't even see this topic.

First off, you do have an interesting way of starting your biography (writing as if you were not Jayson but somebody else), but that also leads to confusion and questions.

1) Who is this "we" you are referring to?

2) The biography should be around 2-3 paragraphs, with good in-depth backround material of your character. This is the establishment of your character, and not so much a story for you to tell. This establishment will be the basis and foundation of your character's traits/personality/career in the VE.

3) Write up the biography with my above tips. I'm looking for quality, so I don't mind if it takes 2-3 days to get something like this out. I'm looking for good grammar, smooth story flow, and some character information.

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