(Lets work on your bio first
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head color: brown
eye color: black
scars: blaster burn
(where?)
tats: isd on my chest
(don't shorten the word up: tatoos. Also, try to speak in third person like this a report someone else was giving.)
HT. :6'2
wt.:250
Blood Color: aqua blue
(there's really no exact distinction of blood, only a mention that it could be a kind of green- aqua like you say though.)
Pilot Type: high flier
he has vast knowledge of the outer rim and is feared by all he has a cal mon destoyer that he stole from smugglers,I was born on kathol I was raised by bounty hunters i know the way of the sword and blaster carbine.I'm well known on all of the outer-rim planets I was a notorious bounty hunter i have killed many men,Destroyed every known fighter ship 3 times over i love destroying b-wings and LP I joined the empire to get a career in killing for a person not more than one I'm tired of bounty hunting and want to make some friends not enemies.
I can fly any ship known to the galaxy. i always say hi to my friends and threaten my enemies.my personality changes from day to day one day i might be hapy the next day sad or angry
All right- first off you need to add some signs of puncuation like commas, periods and question marks. That can be done pretty easilly by simply running through and saying "This is the beginning of a sentence and needs to be capitalized." Also, we really need to work on that story, man. I mean, your 'story' isn't really a story at all. If he or she (you didn't indicate a sex above) is all feared and all that good stuff- how did that come to be? Also- I highly doubt they were able to steal a Mon Calamari cruiser, and further doubt a band of smugglers were able to attain it. I don't mean to crash all your hopes and dreams down in a moment of fiery fury, but none of this makes sense. So- maybe you should start from your home planet of Kathol althouh I don't really see much record of the planet. Perhaps you could explain it as well as its customs to us and your character's life on it that led him up to all those things you explained. I'd suggest dropping that idea all together you had up there because, like I said, it doesn't make much sense, but if you wanna turn the story to adapt to that bio... Go for it. Anywho- here's what you can do. Start from your home planet and decide what it is that gets your character to join the VEN. What was that thing that pushed him? Once you know that- you can build your story. You can work on that while I'm away- keep at it man.
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