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camo snakes bio (great read)
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July 1, 2006
3:53:12 PM
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Physical Appearance
Native Language: Basic
Hair Color: dark black with white strip
Eye Color: grayer blue
Skin Color: White (with a slight tan)
Height: 6'2
Weight: 150 lbs
Age: 22
Full Name: canderous ordo
Physical Build: Well-built/Well-formed (Muscular)
Home world: dantoeen
Talents/Skills
1) Greatly excelled in the martial arts (especially in unarmed combat)
2) Understands many languages
3) skilled as medic
4) excellent marksman
background:
many years ago when i was 11 years old the republic came to my home planet and established a jedi enclave. After that it was hell all the more people came or the more rules where made before they come it was peaceful the grounds where safe but now the animal have become savage and restless they attack any one they see all because of the jedi and the republic.
When the jedi came round my house they said they sensed great power in my mother they took her away and i havent seen her since.
After six month of lonlyness some more scum jedi came round my house to tell me that my mother was killed for helping innicent people escape a shoot out in mannan i was furious.
After two more years of suffering we saw the the landing parties drop down on the edge of the grounds near my house they set up camp right outside my house. When they came to my door i was but happy to give them all the information they needed to attack the enclave.
After 1 more year of fighting the jedi won over the empire but suffored many losses. As soon as the last stormtrooper was of the planet the jedi where at my door for the act of treason i commited
lucky the start of my martial arts training gave me a bit of time to escape. When i found away of the planet i headed to the nearest empire planet and signed up for revenge on the republic and jedi for what they done to me....
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RE: camo snakes bio (great read)
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July 5, 2006
5:04:02 PM
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Kadann, I need a forehead slapping emoticon.
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RE: camo snakes bio (great read)
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July 5, 2006
5:07:53 PM
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Wow that was......an interesting bio -----------------------
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RE: camo snakes bio (great read)
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July 6, 2006
1:54:42 PM
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I read the topic and my first thought was..."haha yeah right"
I read the bio and now I want to drill a hole in my head.
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RE: camo snakes bio (great read)
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July 7, 2006
1:51:43 PM
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No no, Tal, this one deserves something more that says:
"I think I wanna kill myself", as an emoticon. -----------------------
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RE: camo snakes bio (great read)
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July 7, 2006
6:13:51 PM
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Isn't that this?
Or this?
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RE: camo snakes bio (great read)
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July 7, 2006
6:30:56 PM
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Ok, where does everyone find the one ones? All I have are the usual. ---> 
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I've served my time in hell."
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RE: camo snakes bio (great read)
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July 9, 2006
6:33:44 PM
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Private camo snake, I cannot accept your biography at this moment due the following primary reason:
You have brought Jedi into your story. There are no more Jedi in existance. They have all been destroyed via the Purge, which was before the events of AHN. We are currently in the Thrawn Era, approximately 10 years (correct me if I'm wrong) after the events of RotJ.
Also, work on your sentence structure. All new sentences begin like the following: "The Wookiee turned away." NOT "the wookiee turned away". Be sure to watch, also, your proper nouns (persons, places, or things) - the beginning letters of all these objects must be upper-cased letters. Example: "my name is John" NOT "my name is john".
Be sure to do your research and not guess factual information. You've spelled your planet as: dantoeen. Now, is this some planet you made up? If so, the proper way to spell the planet would be "Dantoeen". Now, if I am pronouncing it correctly, you may be referring to the infamous Star Wars planet Dantooine, in which case my name is of the correct spelling. If you need to do any sort of research on Star Wars material, an excellent first-choice research would be the StarWars Databank located here.
Keep in mind our timeline when writing your next version of your biography. I will look at it again when you have posted it.
As a final note, post your next revision (and hopefully final draft) as a reply to this topic, and not an "edit" to your previous version. This allows me to see that there has been a new post made in this topic, and I will look at it. -----------------------
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RE: camo snakes bio (great read)
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August 9, 2006
6:46:33 AM
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yeah, I just choked on that, here, camo snake, take a beer or not.....  -----------------------
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August 9, 2006
3:43:58 PM
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You do realize this is over a month old, don't you? -----------------------
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August 10, 2006
4:38:49 PM
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But its still so Entertaining. -----------------------
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RE: camo snakes bio (great read)
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August 12, 2006
7:09:36 AM
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can we please kick the guy, to make it more entertaining. -----------------------
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RE: camo snakes bio (great read)
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August 14, 2006
10:17:20 AM
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Or we could always do away with you, seeing as you started this whole conversation, and when it was laid to rest a month ago. -----------------------
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August 14, 2006
12:56:14 AM
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Private camo, you're going to need to look at my reply above and revise your post before you can progress. -----------------------
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