Name: Tar-Palantir
Callsign: ARC-1941 Palantir
Age: 19
Height: 6"2'
Weight: 155lbs
Species: Zabrak
Number of horns: 9
Eye Color: Blue
Place of Birth: Orrostar, Numenore

Tar-Palantir means far-seeing in the Andunic tongue spoken on my home island of Numenore.  I was named as such because I was the Warden of Orrostar Tower for some time.  I have the typical look for most of my species, although I am lighter then most.  The tatoos I bear denote me as a native of Numenore, and as a member of the line of Silmarie.  I joined the navy because I am a natural pilot, ever since I first used one of those BARC bikes back home.  I'm also better at melee weapons when I'm on the ground, but I can fire a blaster with good enough accuracy if needed, but i prefer a good blade, or staff to a gun

History:
Tar-Palantir (far-sight) was born into the family of Zabraks living on the Isle of Numenore; the Wardens of Orrostar tower on the north side of the island.  Numenore is famous for it's mariners and Palantir's parents were no exception.  Although their position as Warden's of the Tower excused them from the obligatory neval service, Palantir's parents were active in the navy.  They died in a naval battle near Pelargir  At the time his  parents died at sea, Palantir was still a youth, about 12.  Pharazon his brother (name meaning the golden flight) was older, and ity was he who trained both Palantir and their sister Miriel in the art of flying some of the most famous starfighters ever used.  It was he who had constructed a hanger in the cliff face near the tower. 
Over the years of his rule in Orrostar, Pharazon collected a decent fleet of starfighters, includiong aethersprites, actis fighters, and ARC-170 snubfighters.  Palantir had less of an intrest in piloting these craft, but he loved the Nimbus V-wing fighter because of its enhanced manueaverability compared to the other craft.  Pharazon's favorite was an older ship, an N1 nubian with the design of the king in Armenelos on its front.  When Pharazon did not return from his travels after one particularly long visit, Palantir took his V-wing and went in search of his brother, leaving his sister Miriel in control at Orrostar.
    Pharazon had left one last message for his brother before his disappearance.  "Boga. Utapau. Clone."
Palantir traveled far in search of his brother, first going to the Utapau system and looking for this Boga.  Boga turned out to be the name of a Varactyl that met her death upon the issuance of Order 66.  She was the mount of the Jedi Kenobi, and was killed by blaster fire from an AT-TE, fire that was meant to kill her rider.  Palantir learned this from from an aged Pau-an there, an aristocrat by the name of Medon.  He also learned that his brother had abandoned his beloved N1 fighter in lieu of a stealthier craft.  Pharazon's motive behind this became clear to Palantir when he discovered that his brother was being shadowed by a bounty hunter working for the rebellion. 
After confronting the hitman, Palantir discovered that he was assigned to recover a green crystal that Pharazon had acquired from a clone who had stayed on the planet following the execution of Order 66.  Apparently this clone had stayed loyal to his Jedi, and had held a lightsaber crystal that was from the weapon of K'Kruhk, a jedi whose lightsaber was stolen and used by General Grievious.  This information led him to Ilum, then to Kamino, and finally to Naboo.  It was here that he found that his brother had joined the navy, and had been deployed to the Avatar Orbital Platform.
Palantir had heard of this place and was worried for his brother because he had heard of the skirmishes that were breaking out on the planet near where the platform where his brother was deployed; Kashyyyk.  He set off for the platform immediately, in his v-wing, leaving his brother's fighter behind in the Theed hanger
He was to late.  Pharazon had been killed by rebellion soldiers during a raid on the barracks on the Avatar platform.  Unfortunetely the platform fell into rebel hands during the fight when Pharazon was killed.  This put off Palantir's investigation for a while.
Palantir then journeyed to the only place he felt safe; the Imperial navy.  He wanted to join for three reasons: out of service to the Empire; because of his skill in piloting; and in hopes of finding out more of his brothers story, and the crystal

Well hello and welcome to the Vast Empire Navy (VEN).  As a newly joined member, you are currently assigned to the Vast Empire Naval Academy (VENA) for training so that you can join a squadron and begin your career here with us.  For the time in training, you will see much of myself and my adjutant Gunnay.  I am the commander of training and thus- you're trainer.

Let's get to it shall we?

The first thing I'd like you to do is go to the following website so that some of my thoughts might be seen as insight rather than slights toward you.

http://www.vastempire.com/wiki/index.php?title=Flight_School_%28FS%29

Now, as it happens, the first chapter of our training will take you into the world of your character- the bio.  You've already started yours, but I'd like you to read through Chapter 1- 'Character Creation' anyways.

I'll just mention a couple of things about your bio though that I think we'll need work on.  For instance- the VE normally tries to keep it's distance from Historical figures like Obi-Wan Kenobi or General Grevious, or even the animal or droid counter-parts that accompanied them.  So, what I'd like you to do is see if there are other ways of telling your story without having to incorporate characters' Lucas created for the intent of telling his story.  We're telling our story now, so I would urge you to create your own characters and even places if you feel necessary. 

Also, we need a bearing on time so that we can gauge just where we are in the Star Wars universe.  At the beginning of your explanation you speak about the fact that your characters are Zabrack- (are they on the world of Numenore or is that just an island btw) - now in what time is this?  It must be after the the Empreror took over if your character is only nineteen (presuming the empire was around for about twenty years?), and the civil war wasn't really going on at that point, so where are you in all this history?  According to your age, your birth-time would be about fifteen years before the destruction of the second death star at Endor.  Since the VEN is currently set at about five years after- you get my math?

The point of all that is to establish who you're family was fighting when they were killed.  And why would they be so loyal?  What did the emperor do to make them such a favorite? 

So, just read through the info on that site quick and see what you can get out of it- adjust you bio accordingly and we'll check it up as soon as you think you've done it justice.  Let Gunnay or I know if you have any questions, comments or concerns.  Mind you, you can contact us or other VE members via the message center (which you can find the link to by scrolling up and look to the left hand corner), or getting on IRC.  All that is mentioned  in your initial message, I beleive.  Hopefully you'll enjoy it here, though. 

Can't wait to see what you can do- welcome to the Vast Empire Navy.
 
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