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iceman
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  Good day sir!
February 18, 2006 9:02:06 AM    View the profile of iceman 
I was commanded to post here sir! I am ready for battle sir!
Jack Nebulax
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  RE: Good day sir!
February 18, 2006 9:14:54 AM    View the profile of Jack Nebulax 
Welcome to the Vastest of Empires, pilot.
 
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Revenge is what holds this galaxy together. Without it, the universe would be a boring place.

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Warrant Officer 2nd Class Jack Nebulax, Nazgul Squadron, Imperial Navy, Vast Empire.
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Admiral Jack Nebulax, third-in-command of the Auroran Defense Fleet (ADF) and leader of Nemesis Wing (Wing I)
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  RE: Good day sir!
February 18, 2006 12:57:54 AM    View the profile of Willtconq 
Welcome to the Imperial Navy Iceman!
 
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-(William the Conquerer)-
King of PPC
We are still here because we conquered our enemies, and we shall do it again!
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  RE: Good day sir!
February 18, 2006 1:39:13 PM    View the profile of Demonic 
Welcome to the Navy, crewman!
 
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100% on my Exam, looking good.
Demonic = Darr-Rann
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Shazam
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  RE: Good day sir!
February 19, 2006 11:28:32 AM    View the profile of Shazam 
Howdy, i'm the Training officer and thus- your trainer.  Now, I've noticed that a lot of our trainees havn't been coming back...  I think they're forgetting about us...  Looks like I'll have to go back to using e-mails...  Hrm.

Anyways, you'll find a message in your e-mail entailing all that you must do to get into a squadron.  Keep everything about your training in this thread for now.  The best to you. 
 
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*Flash Was Here...*

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iceman
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  RE: Good day sir!
February 19, 2006 2:28:18 PM    View the profile of iceman 
Physical Appearance

Native Language: Basic
Hair Color: Black
Eye Color: Grey with red and green flecks
Skin Color: Yellowish tan
Height: 6'8
Weight: 167 lbs
Age: 18
Full Name: Kira Petromoto
Physical Build: Well-built/Well-formed (Muscular) Wiry
Homeworld: ?????


Talents/Skills

1) Able to keep calm in the most terrifying of situations 2) well traversed in hand to hand combat, sniping, and usage of firearms 3) can regenerate/heal body parts/organs 4) have extremely abnormal reflexes


Background History

I was eight when it started my brother who was nineteen was piloting the X-wing, my father aY-wing. I was raised as a rebel and was proud of it. Until that one day my father and brother were out on patrol. Then came that day my parents I found weren't my parents they adopted me the rage burning within me was great I had enough credits to buy a passage to any Outer planet I wanted. This was the beginning of my journey.

I took a transport to the planet of Arkania. At the port I meet up with a group of mercenaries they were simulating a space battle.

I watched them and watched them until the apparent leader noticed me he growled "What do you want!" I asked if I could try.

His comrades joked around about this "little kid". The leader sized me up for a bit then said sure I sat in the simulator he told the squad to tech him how to operate the machine the squad was surprised. But after a few yells they did so. In one hour I had learned to fly, then the leader challenged me to fight against his best wingman I was quite shocked then a sense of elation flowed through. I was piloting a TIE fighter and the wingman was piloting an X-wing. After a few hits I shot down the X-wing the squad was shocked. Only the leader remained impassive he said "Yeh see that, that's true piloting" then the leader asked what is your name I responded in a shout "Kira Petromoto". He asked where my parents were I shrugged then he asked if I wanted to become a pilot. After a few seconds of hesitation I nodded.

From that day forth I became known as Red-10.



17 years later I have become the new squad leader I have found being a mercenary too demanding. So I had my best wingman become the squad leader and I one again wandered until I found my goal/desire to become a Imperial Navy filer. I was recruited and now this is my story again as a crewman.

 



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Personality
Well I'm a sort of patient when it comes to military strategy but it is a requirement. I hate annoying people have an ok temper but can be really vengeful when mad but my anger passes like the wind. I and a wise and deep-thought person often you will find me in a trance. I find that people either hate me or love me usually the former.
My pet peeves are: being annoyed, having to repeat myself, and getting shot in the foot

Shazam
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  RE: Good day sir!
February 20, 2006 5:31:41 PM    View the profile of Shazam 
Howdy- good to see you replied back so quickly.

First off, I think you just need to really read through this and realize how many easy errors you made with grammer and things of that sort.  You need to stay in either third or first person, you need correct grammer and spelling, and you need to make the thing look neat overall.

As for actual problems with your bio- it doesn't quite make sense.  I think you are still in between what it is you want your race to be, but I'm thinking it has to have human qualities and proportions, definetly two eyes and not so big it inhibits your ability to pilot a space craft.  Also, they have to be of an intelligent species, intelligent enough to fly a space craft and understand it as well as what's going on around them.  Also, your age is inconsistent with your story line.  You said that you just kind of met with these people and you must have been atleast fourteen or so in order to even be around these guys without wetting your pants.  Now, you said seventeen years later and your only eighteen, lol.  That means you would have had to have met those guys when you were one years old...  Hrm...  May want to fix that.  However, you can say that you were like eighteen when you decided to try this out and then seventeen years later you joined the Navy because that would put you somewhere in your late thirties, possibly fourties if you change it up.  Now- your going to have to decide a suitable age to start learning flight and then an appropriate year for enlisting in the Navy.  Say twenty-three, twenty-four? 

How about your story?  Well- that doesn't really make much sense either, lol.  You flew a TIE fighter for the first time and beat an expereince X-wing pilot?  He had sheilds and better skills...  Unlikely .  Now, you could make this into a kind of build-up story, like they brought you in becuase you showed promise at the simulators and over the years you improved and finally beat out this leader's apprentice...  Showed them up when they thought you'd never amount to anything or something.  What I'm looking for is a concrete story= who were these guys?  Where did this all take place?  What did they do and where did you train?  What was your compulsion to join these guys?  At what point did you join the Navy and why?  Think it through man.  Lemme know when your satisfied with it and I'll critique it again. 

Keep up the good work.
 
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*Flash Was Here...*

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James Sanders
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  RE: Good day sir!
February 23, 2006 5:45:00 PM    View the profile of James Sanders 
Welcome to the Vast Empire, iceman. I hope you enjoy it here, and it seems I need to be more active myself... Iceman is a friend of mine in RL, and i'll gladly help him.
[This message has been edited by James Sanders (edited February 24, 2006 4:15:00 PM)]
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