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Kar-Zaza
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RE: Drill Squad

May 16, 2005 10:33:11 PM

Name:Kar-Zaza
Nickname:Zaza
Rank

rivate first class
Eye color:Red/Orange
Hair color:Black
Age:35
Height:8.7"
Weight:114 lbs
Tatoo:L arm-dragon coiling around arm
1st scar: on eyelids-like anakin's scar
2nd scar:R arm robotic
Siblings:2/boys
Birthplace:Geonosis
Background:This stubborn, short-tempered warrior was born hidden as the rest of his familiy. He was always filled with hatred for the geonosians for mercilessly slaughtering his father during a mob because the small minded geonosians thought he was in the mob, so Zaza swore he would kill any geonosian that hurt him or his family. One day his mother got ill so she couldn't get money to live on, so he became a theive to support his family. One time when he was stealing he got caught and got stuck in a high-security prison for 10 years. When he got out he found out that his mom was dead he killed of a whole geonosian town. as he got older he wanted to make-up for all the bad things he did ,so he joinded the army

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RE: RE: Drill Squad

May 17, 2005 2:38:09 AM

Hmm... Interesting background, but it's kind of jumpy. Also, hard to believe that you could wipe out an entire town, unless the town was more like a village.

Also, really watch the grammar. Use spaces.

Repost it once more with these corrections. Might help you out to think the bio through a bit more before posting.

This is the background history of your character - make it as creative as possible!

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Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
CoT/BG Cosmic/HCA-3/SL/3SQD/2PLT/1COMP/1BAT/Tadath/VEA/VE [OPE][OTH][OPA][EW1][CDS][IH][GS][LM][SoS][CoH][PoC][MSM][SCP][SoA][IOC]
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Angel
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RE: RE: Drill Squad

May 17, 2005 12:56:31 AM

8'7" ???

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=[Arrogant Elitist]= Iron Horse Squad
TRP/SGT Jikkyo "Angel" Nimiichi/1SQD/1PLT/1COMP/1RGT/1BAT/VEA/VE/Tadath [LoR] [RoM] [BC] [CDS] {BoA}
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=[Dark Knight of the Sith]= Eagle Sect
CM/DJK Jikkyo "Angel" Nimiichi/Eagle 1-1/Sith/VEDJ/VE/Lopen [VP:1]
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Fallen....only to rise.
Risen...only to fall.
The circle is now complete.
The Angel of Death has returned.

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RE: RE: Drill Squad

May 18, 2005 1:12:29 AM

Unless you're a Wookie, that does seem a bit odd.

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Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
CoT/BG Cosmic/HCA-3/SL/3SQD/2PLT/1COMP/1BAT/Tadath/VEA/VE [OPE][OTH][OPA][EW1][CDS][IH][GS][LM][SoS][CoH][PoC][MSM][SCP][SoA][IOC]
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Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
SL/KPR Cosmic/Lion 1-1/Lopen/VEDJ/VE [VP][WoS2][KC1][SoY][EoP][OAK]
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RE: RE: Drill Squad

May 24, 2005 4:19:57 PM

Still waiting for an update, Kar.

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Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
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Cleric "Cosmic" Vor'soth
SL/KPR Cosmic/Lion 1-1/Lopen/VEDJ/VE [VP][WoS2][KC1][SoY][EoP][OAK]
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