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Aiselle
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  Checking In
April 9, 2012 1:33:32 AM    View the profile of Aiselle 
Aiselle Gant, reporting for duty!
Ellesmere
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  RE: Checking In
April 9, 2012 8:49:05 AM    View the profile of Ellesmere 
Hello and welcome to the  Naval Academy, Crewman Aiselle!

I am Petty Officer 2nd Class Ellesmere, one of the Trainers of the Vast Empire Navy. Some people call me ‘Ellie’ so feel free to do the same.

Now that you have posted your welcome message, we shall move onto the next step in Basic Training, or as we more commonly call it; BT.  It is mostly referred to as Flight School around here and its purpose is to prepare you for life in a squadron.

Your first step is to complete Chapter I which can be found here . Once you have completed this step please post it here for review.

Our method of writing here (in the Navy and the Vast Empire as a whole) is in the third person,as such please do so. If you have any questions, feel free to reach me via ComNet PM or hop onto IRC and join #VENA, if for some reason I am not present one of the Academy Staff should be on hand to answer any questions or concerns you may have.

Once you have posted Phase I of training which can be found in the link I've provided and it has been passed we shall move onto Phase II.

If you have any questions, concerns or anything please feel free to ask! I can be reached on IRC , or if you prefer you can post anything here or shoot me a ComNet PM.

Please note that your only option at this time is Flight School, due to the high application rate for Command School our number of active Flight Members in Squadrons is low; as such Command School is not an option at this time. All the information you need for  Flight School is provided in the link given
SXO/PO2 Ellesmere/SMC Surprise /TF:B/1FL/FC/VEN/VE [MC2][MC1]

SCO/PO2 Ellesmere/TF:B/Raptor/VENA/VEN/VE [MC2][MC1]
Aiselle
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  RE: Checking In
April 9, 2012 11:34:58 PM    View the profile of Aiselle 
Part One: Biography

Homeworld: Onderon
Age: 22
Species: Human
Native Language: Basic
Gender: Female
Skin Color: White
Height: 5'4" (1.63m)
Weight: 110lbs (50kg)
Hair Color: Black
Facial Hair: n/a
Eye Color: Blue-Green
Scars: None
Tattoos: None

Physical Description
Small, slender frame. Black hair just beyond shoulder-length, which she often wears in a ponytail. Narrow face with a pointed chin and pronounced cheekbones. She tends to have a faintly haughty look about her, but that instantly melts away when she gives her warm, broad smile, which she does often. When not in uniform, she makes a point of dressing well--not extravagant clothes, exactly, but at least an affordable approximation thereof. She favors light, loose clothing in beiges and browns, little jewelry beyond a few bracelets, and leather sandals.

Personality
Sometimes she's vibrant, talkative, and excitable; other times, she says very little and seems distracted. She laughs easily and, on her talkative days, is always ready with a quick quip.

Character’s Background
Aiselle grew up in Iziz. She is the oldest daughter of Mikal Gant, who for many years managed a small shipping operation, and his wife Ella. The family struggled financially when Aiselle was very young, but things turned around, and they were reasonably well off throughout most of her childhood.

Aiselle was fascinated by government and politics, and was heavily involved in her school's student council. She kept regularly up-to-date with the news of the day, and expressed interest in a career in public service.

However, around the time Aiselle was finishing her education, a string of bad investments put the family back in choppy financial waters. It was expected that Aiselle would remain in Iziz and help support the family, but she surprised everyone, including her closest friends, by heading to the Imperial Naval Academy almost immediately after finishing school.

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So there's your bio, and the wiki entry is coming soon. About the Naval ID line: only thing I'm not clear on is the Flight Designation. Everything else looks right:

TRN/CRW Aiselle/[whatever my Flight Designation is]/S:137 "Raptor"/W:46 "Shield"/PLF Cappadocious/TF:TH/3Flt/VENA/VEN/VE

Also, apparently when I signed up I didn't get the relevance of callsigns. If it would be weird for my character's callsign to be the same as her first name, I'm happy to change it.
[This message has been edited by Aiselle (edited April 17, 2012 12:39:03 AM)]
[This message has been edited by Aiselle (edited April 17, 2012 12:54:21 AM)]
Ellesmere
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  RE: Checking In
April 10, 2012 6:28:25 AM    View the profile of Ellesmere 
Your callsign is fine Your designation, don't worry about that just yet as long as you know you'd be in Raptor for now.

I like your physical description, nice and detailed. If you could expand on the bio by a few lines as I think it looks to me a bit short, try for a good paragraph or two. Don't forget as well that potential Squadron Commanders would be looking at this bio, so it's good to have it all nicely detailed and have it be interesting to all readers as well. The length of your personality looks OK, so just the expansion of  the bio for now. When you've done the edit, please let me know by replying to this topic
SXO/PO2 Ellesmere/SMC Surprise /TF:B/1FL/FC/VEN/VE [MC2][MC1]

SCO/PO2 Ellesmere/TF:B/Raptor/VENA/VEN/VE [MC2][MC1]
Aiselle
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  RE: Checking In
April 17, 2012 12:40:40 AM    View the profile of Aiselle 
Sorry for the delay, but the background section's been edited. I added a little about Aiselle's early ambitions, which hopefully gives more context as to why her enlistment came as such a surprise.
Aiselle
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  RE: Checking In
April 17, 2012 1:11:22 PM    View the profile of Aiselle 
...and the Wiki page is now up: http://www.vastempire.com/wiki/Aiselle_Gant
[This message has been edited by Aiselle (edited April 17, 2012 1:11:50 PM)]
Ellesmere
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Ellesmere
 
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  RE: Checking In
April 17, 2012 3:37:24 PM    View the profile of Ellesmere 
Looks good, please keep on with the Phase 2 work. I'll accept that bio length but would like to see a bit more from you in general
SXO/PO2 Ellesmere/SMC Surprise /TF:B/1FL/FC/VEN/VE [MC2][MC1]

SCO/PO2 Ellesmere/TF:B/Raptor/VENA/VEN/VE [MC2][MC1]
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