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Van
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  Old Member, New character
January 21, 2012 10:44:13 AM    View the profile of Van 
Hey everyone, some of you might remember me from 2-3 years back and maybe even longer about 4 years back. I've decided to get back into the swing of things and therefore am creating a new character.

Nisc'o'detmun reporting for duty. Nis'o for short.
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[This message has been edited by Van (edited January 21, 2012 10:44:42 AM)]
Echelon
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  RE: Old Member, New character
January 21, 2012 12:18:08 AM    View the profile of Echelon 
Welcome, new recruit, to the Vast Empire Naval Academy! By posting here, you're one step closer to joining us in our ranks.

If you'll allow me to introduce myself, I am Petty Officer 2nd Class Echelon. As your training officer, I'll lead you through the courses here at VENA.

You'll begin by completing the Basic Training course. Please proceed here, and read the section. When you're done Basic Training, proceed to your first chapter of Flight School, here, and create a bio for your Vast Empire character. Remember, you should have it in 3rd person (he, she, it) and in past tense (ran, shot, exploded).

Once your bio is complete, post it here for reviewing, and then we can move on to Chapter 2 of Flight Schooll!

If you have any questions, comments, concerns, or rants, feel free to contact any of us here at VENA. The fastest way to get help would to get on the #VENA IRC channel and ask there (I'm usually on). Otherwise, you can Private Message us, or just simply post here. Remember, the wiki has all sorts of information, and you're welcome to look at other people's works (just don't plagiarize or copy).

Utterly,

Training Officer Echelon
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Van
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  RE: Old Member, New character
January 21, 2012 9:54:16 PM    View the profile of Van 
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~Name: Nisc’o’detmun

~Nickname: Nis’o

~Handedness: Right

~Age: 18

~Race: Wookie

~Description: Nisc’o’detmun is a large Wookie standing 7 feet 6 inches; he is a little taller than the average Wookie. His eyes are a bright hazard green. There is a scar that is crescent shaped around the outside of his left eye. His fur is a near black, brown, with streaks of white hair as well. Nis’o wears virtually no clothes but does have a two shoulder pads the larger one being on his left arm to protect him while he aims with weapons. He does have two Ryyk Blades that are sheathed on his back.

~History: Nis’o still very young in terms of Wookie years has grown up far from his home planet on Kashyyk. His village was invaded when he was 5 and he was taken to be a slave. Never settling in one place his master was always migrating from planet to planet. Treated relatively well by his master he grew into a strong relationship with him, building trust as they travelled.  Nis’o’s master gave freedom to him after the long years of service that he had given. Deciding to stay and work for some pay he went on for another 3 years with his master. One day when visiting a planet Nis’o was faced by a racist group of muggers who attacked him, his previous master went to his defense only to lose his life. Nis’o killed the men and was imprisoned for another year, until finally he was released because of his killing the men out of self defense. He went on to find that his master had placed everything that he owned in Nis’o’s name.  Nis’o by the age of 15 had become the soul successor to his master’s fortunes when his master was murdered on the planet Dakshee the sector capital of the Barma sector. Taking what he could Nis’o went on back to Kashyyk and to his original home village. When he went to the village he was cast away, for he had been too integrated into the empire, as a result he challenged the leader of the tribe to battle in hopes that he might earn the respect that he needed to gain entrance into the village once again. Using two old Ryyk blades belonging to his father Nis’o battled the leader for close to an hour and then was defeated by lacerations on both of his shoulders. Defeated and outcast the leader marked Nis’o with a deep crescent cut right above the left eye, marking Nis’o as an outcast to the tribe. Another symbol of his failure to the tribe, Nis’o’s blades were broken and given to him as he left the planet. Moving to another imperial planet, Nis’o continued his master’s old business for another 3 years. Upon moving to the planet he made sure to re-forge his father’s old Ryyk blades, with stronger materials. Now 18 he was enlisted by an officer of the Navy who had seen him and had questioned him thoroughly thinking that Nis’o was in fact an escaped slave. When his story checked out the officer was glad to ask Nis’o to join the Navy and become a pilot for the Imperial Navy. END HISTORY

~Psychological side note—when admitted into the Navy the Navy psychologists noticed strong anger issues as well as what seemed to be a side personality. 

“The subject Nisc’o’detmun shows signs of anger at the smallest of occurrences, also he seems to be very ponderous at some points, ‘Rrrahhhhhhh’ Wait a while I am recording this audio report of the subject he seemed to be talking to himself. I Have noticed that there might be a small danger with employing this wookie into the imperial navy but he does show promise. I will have to schedule some more appointments after this but for the time being I think that if I can get Doctor Zap’atho to prescribe some calming medicine then Nis’o should be fine.  This is a report by Nathaniel, Navy psychologist. End Audio Entry”

The subject is to take his medicine any times he shows signs of anger, or frustration, larger doses should be fine seeing as he is of larger size compared to normal Wookie’s size. Anyone nearby at the time of a panic attack or rage attack should clear the area immediately and get help; the subject can sometimes have an bloodlust that knows neither friend nor enemy. One last side note by the psychologist states that any attempts of racism against the subject are prohibited and considered unwise, his unstable condition makes him very susceptible to hurting someone. Racism could lead to death.

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Echelon
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  RE: Old Member, New character
January 21, 2012 10:07:44 PM    View the profile of Echelon 
Your bio looks good, though, you might want to tone down his insanity. In the Navy, if someone is a good pilot but psychologically, they're unstable, they probably wouldn't be accepted. We do care about the safety of our other pilots. Just a note.

I'll need an ID line and eventually a wiki page. They're listed as step 2 and 3, here, but for better pages go here for the ID line and here for your wiki page.

Once those tasks are completed we can move on!
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[This message has been edited by Echelon (edited January 21, 2012 10:10:28 PM)]
Van
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  RE: Old Member, New character
January 21, 2012 10:33:23 PM    View the profile of Van 
http://vastempire.com/wiki/Nisc%27o%27detmun
And I changed my ID line, also I will be getting my entire profile name changed to my character soon, just for the heads up.
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Echelon
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January 21, 2012 10:45:41 PM    View the profile of Echelon 
Your wiki page is alright, though in the future you might want to perfect it.

Your ID Line is lacking information. Though, it doesn't really matter because it will be changing quite a bit in the next few weeks. I'll just give it to you.

It should fall under this format:
[Position acronym]/[Rank acronym] [Name and Callsign]/[Assigned Ship]/TF:[Task Force acronym]/[Fleet #]Flt/FC/VEN/VE [Medals] [Exam Certifications]

And yours would look like:

TRN/CRW Nis'o/S:137 "Raptor"/W:46 "Shield"/PLF Cappadocious/TF:TH/3Flt/VENA/VEN/VE

Alright, now you'll make an in character post in the Raptor: Overwhelming Odds thread here in the VENA section. But first go here read the section and complete the assingment.

You're doing great so far!
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Van
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January 22, 2012 9:27:48 PM    View the profile of Van 
http://comnet.imperialnetwork.com/topic/14333/page/1/
That is my assignment post
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January 22, 2012 9:34:54 PM    View the profile of Ellesmere 
Your post looks good, Crewman. Good work as well as very good post length, as I see a fair number of people simply post about the sim it was a nice touch to have a bit of CD of sorts.
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Van
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  RE: Old Member, New character
January 22, 2012 9:36:58 PM    View the profile of Van 
Thanks
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  RE: Old Member, New character
January 24, 2012 4:06:36 PM    View the profile of Echelon 
Alrighty! I have a few concerns.

First, we are going to have to deal with the insanity thing. It's fine to have a character that is slightly deranged and perhaps a bit odd, but you're doing it a bit too far. Destroying VE equipment and almost killing an officer would not be tolerated. Imagine if that happened in the United States Army? They would immediately court-martial the offender. Perhaps this dual-personality thing has been something your character has had to deal with in the past, but throughout the years he has learned to control it. Maybe all of this happens in his head and possibly some of it slips out of his mouth (not too much). Just tone it down a bit with your character.

Secondly, you character seems to be taller than the average Wookie. This isn't too much of an issue, but how would he be able to fit in the TIE cockpit? We ask that you make him a tad bit shorter.

Lastly, in your story the officer thinks you are a slave. In the Vast Empire we don't have slaves. Just a minor inaccuracy.

So just make those changes to your character. I'm not going to make you rewrite the post because the point of the assignment was to prove that you can write a story post. And you did that.

We're at the last part of your training! Go here, read the article and complete the assignment at the bottom (just send the report to me).

Once you do this, you will embark on your journey in the Vast Empire!
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January 24, 2012 4:29:09 PM    View the profile of Atrasin 
point of order: you're not allowed to be insane until you pass your Officer's Exam. then it's a requirement.
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Van
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January 24, 2012 4:50:21 PM    View the profile of Van 
My bad on the whole insanity thing. I just wanted to go out of the ordinary for once. And I thought that Wookies were used as slaves one time so that's where my basis came from. Normally I would have a completely sane character but I wanted to try a little something with more craziness. Anyway just one request, I'll try to keep the officer bashing to a minimum if you'll give me permission to have my character have a second personality to talk to.
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January 24, 2012 4:56:22 PM    View the profile of Echelon 
I was fine with the whole two personalities thing. Just don't have your mad personality get to external
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