daniel
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training
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June 10, 2010
3:15:30 PM
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im reaady for training now |
Hunter-Morrell
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RE: training
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June 10, 2010
4:29:36 PM
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The Vast Empire Navy welcomes you, Crewman. I am Chief Warrant Officer Hunter-Morrell, an Academy Trainer for the Vast Empire Navy, and I will be helping you today. Now that you have posted a welcome message here on the Naval Academy board, you completed Imperial Initiation and have started Basic Training. BT, as it is called, is mostly Flight School, which prepares you for daily life in a squadron. The first step in Flight School is to complete Chapter 1, which can be found here.Our method of writing here in the Vast Empire Navy (and the Vast Empire) is to write in third person. Please do so. If you have any questions, feel free to ComNet PM myself for guidance or hop on IRC and go to the Naval Academy channel which is #VENA. Good Luck. Useful Links:NLO/CWO Hunter Morrell/W:1 "Javelin"/Atrus/TF:A/1Flt/SFC/VEN/VE(=A=)(=SA=)(=ME=)(=*MAE*=) [CBV.][NS-1][SWC][BRC][VC:B][SoL][NSR]
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daniel
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RE: training
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June 13, 2010
3:34:15 PM
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Physical Appearance:Looks very strong, likes to dress in black
Homeworld:Corasaunt
Age:21
Species:Human
Native Language:English
Gender:Male
Skin Coulour:White
Height:5'6
Weight:103
Hair Colour:Jet black
Facial Hair:N/A
Eye Colour:Blue
Scars:From left eye to chin
Tattos:None
Physical Description:Looks very hansom and strong when he puts on his uniform,it is very unusual to see him slouching
Character's Background:I lived in a luxiorious apartment with my mother and father.My father used to work for the imperial navy and was very well payed.He and my mother spoiled me and gave me the best education they could afford.My father always wanted me to join the navy just like he did and i wanted to too.He used to bringme into space and we would point out stars to each other.
On the day after my 21st he brought me to Abrae were he inlisted me into the navy.
I was very sad when I had to leave my parents but happy that I was joining the navy.
Personality:Always willing to help,very kind to women.Loves flying in space and doing stunts.Always tries to make sure he dosn't look self-centered.
Position:TRN
Rank:CRW
Callsign:daniel
Wing#/Wing Name:W:1 Pheonix
Assigned Ship:mSSD Atrus
Fleet:1 Flt
Corps:SFC
VEN:VEN
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StOrMz
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RE: training
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June 13, 2010
10:07:11 PM
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Nice start, Daniel. I'm going to ask that you do two things before we move you on.
1) Add to your "Personality". You don't need much, maybe another sentence or two.
2) Check spelling. You have a few words misspelled (such as Coruscant). Naval AcademyNTO/1LT Stormz/NP Saratoga /TF:TH/3Flt/NAD/VEN/VE
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Jaden
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RE: training
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June 13, 2010
11:58:17 PM
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2nd Lieutenant Jaden Khaar
Javelin Wing Commander “You have enemies? Good. That means you've stood up for something, sometime in your life.” ------------------------------------------------------------------------- WC/2LT Jaden Khaar/CVT Taskmaster/W:1 "Javelin"/mSSD Atrus/TF:A/1Flt/SFC/VEN/VE (=*A*=) (=*SA*=) (=*ME*=) (=^MA^=) (=*FOCE*=)
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daniel
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RE: training
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June 14, 2010
3:20:50 AM
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Physical Appearance:Looks very strong, likes to dress in black
Homeworld:Coruscant
Age:21
Species:Human
Native Language:Basic
Gender:Male
Skin Coulour:White
Height:5'6
Weight:103
Hair Colour:Jet black
Facial Hair:N/A
Eye Colour:Blue
Scars:From left eye to chin
Tattos:None
Physical Description:Looks very hansom and strong when he puts on his uniform,it is very unusual to see him slouching
Character's Background:I lived in a luxiorious apartment with my mother and father.My father used to work for the imperial navy and was very well payed.He and my mother spoiled me and gave me the best education they could afford.My father always wanted me to join the navy just like he did and i wanted to too.He used to bringme into space and we would point out stars to each other.
On the day after my 21st he brought me to Abrae were he inlisted me into the navy.
I was very sad when I had to leave my parents but happy that I was joining the navy.
Personality:Always willing to help,very kind to women.Loves flying in space and doing stunts.Always tries to make sure he dosn't look self-centered.Wants the Galaxy to have peace,law and order.Will always do the best he can.
Position:TRN
Rank:CRW
Callsign:daniel
Wing#/Wing Name:W:1 Pheonix
Assigned Ship:mSSD Atrus
Fleet:1 Flt
Corps:SFC
VEN:VEN
VE:VE Position:TRN
Rank:CRW
Callsign:daniel
Wing#/Wing Name:W:1 Pheonix
Assigned Ship:mSSD Atrus
Fleet:1 Flt
Corps:SFC
VEN:VEN
VE:VE
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daniel
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3:54:00 PM)]
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StOrMz
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RE: training
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June 14, 2010
6:41:26 AM
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Oh, yes, completely skipped that one. It needs 3rd person perspective.
*NOTE : Use the 'edit' button to change your bio instead of re-posting it. (The button that looks like pen and paper) Naval AcademyNTO/1LT Stormz/NP Saratoga /TF:TH/3Flt/NAD/VEN/VE
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Hunter-Morrell
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RE: training
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June 14, 2010
11:10:54 AM
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If you don't know what 3rd person perspective is, its words such as "he" or "she". 1st person perspective is what you were using; words such as "I" or "me". NLO/CWO Hunter Morrell/W:1 "Javelin"/Atrus/TF:A/1Flt/SFC/VEN/VE(=A=)(=SA=)(=ME=)(=*MAE*=) [CBV.][NS-1][SWC][BRC][VC:B][SoL][NSR]
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daniel
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RE: training
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June 14, 2010
3:22:00 PM
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Physical Appearance: Looks very strong, likes to dress in black
Homeworld: Coruscant
Age: 21
Species: Human
Native Language: Basic
Gender: Male
Skin Coulour: White
Height: 5'6
Weight: 103
Hair Color: Jet black
Facial Hair: N/A
Eye Color: Blue
Scars: From left eye to chin
Tattoos: None
Physical Description: Looks very hansom and strong when he puts on his uniform, it is very unusual to see him slouching
Character's Background: He lived in a luxurious apartment with his mother and father. His father used to work for the Imperial Navy and was very well payed. His mother and father spoiled Daniel and gave him the best education they could afford. His father always wanted him to join the Navy just like he did and he wanted to too. He used to bring him into space and they would point out stars to each other.
On the day after his 21st birthday, Daniel's father brought him to Abrae were he enlisted into the navy. He was very sad when he had to leave his parents but happy that he was joining the Navy.
Personality: Always willing to help,very kind to women. Loves flying in space and doing stunts. Always tries to make sure he doesn't look self-centered. Wants the Galaxy to have peace, law and order. Will always do the best he can.
Position: TRN
Rank: CRW
Callsign: Daniel
Wing#/Wing Name: W:1 Pheonix
Assigned Ship: mSSD Atrus
Fleet: 1 Flt
Corps: SFC
VEN: VEN
VE: VE Position:TRN
Rank:CRW
Callsign:daniel
Wing#/Wing Name:W:1 Pheonix
Assigned Ship:mSSD Atrus
Fleet:1 Flt
Corps:SFC
VEN:VEN
VE:VE
[This message has been edited by
daniel
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3:56:39 PM)]
[This message has been edited by
StOrMz
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11:00:58 AM)]
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StOrMz
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RE: training
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June 15, 2010
11:02:18 AM
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Passed. We will work on some parts of it while you are in Raptor Squadron, but for the moment it'll work.
Please report to Raptor Squadron in the Navy Main ComNet. Naval AcademyNTO/1LT Stormz/NP Saratoga /TF:TH/3Flt/NAD/VEN/VE
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