name: Ben Ross
Physical Appearance
Homeworld:New Cov
Age: 21
Species: human
Native Language: basic
Gender: male
Skin Color: pale
Height: 6 foot 3
Weight: 260
Hair Coluor: black
Facial Hair: goatee
Eye Colour: brown
No real prominent scars our facial features slightly larger then average nose and cropped hair with two black streaks running over to of his head. When not in uniform he prefers to wear the first thing that comes out of his closet or wardrobe but this is ok because over the years his clothing has changed so that it almost all of them go well together.

Mental
Never being close to people as he grow up he follows orders to the point that they are completely foolish then only to save him and his comrades alive. Also having a tendency to wring his hands and have a slight stutter when nerviness over comes him

Growing up on New Cov with a great respect for the imperial navy, as there were many training sessions on his planet. There was also a tinge of envy, because he could not yet join these proud warriors. At age nine he was top of his class and flying small speeders. He often dreamed of serving aboard a ship as an officer or crew man and still hopes to achieve this goal but decided that the the fasted way to get there was to join the tie fighter squadron branch and work his way up to this.

This is a nice start, however more detail needs to be given in both your history and personality descriptions before we can move you on.

name: ben ross
Physical Appearance
Homeworld:New Cov
Age: 21
Species: human
Native Language: basic
Gender: male
Skin Color: pale
Height: 6 foot 3
Weight: 260
Hair Color: black
Facial Hair:goatee
Eye Color: brown
no real prominent scars our facial features slightly larger then average nose and cropped hair with two black streaks running over to of his head   
mental
never being close to people as he grow up he follows orders to the point that they are completely foolish then only to save him and his comrades alive.

growing up on new cov with a great respect for the imperial navy at age nine he was top of his class and flying small speeders. Often dreamed of serving aboard a ship as an officer or crew man and still hopes to achieve this goal but decided that the the fasted way to get there was to join the tie fighter squadron branch and work his way up to this.

Is that better?

What Hunter said. My post was in response to your second try, not the first one.

Good work trying your ID line. You've got some mistakes in it, though. The first thing is that you don't need those brackets. Go ahead and remove them. Also cut off the Exam Certifications bit at the end. You can go here to find information on the squadron number, our Wing's name, and it's number.

You can also use the top line of my ID line (or of Hunter's) to get an idea of how it should look.

I do want to say good job on getting your position, rank, etc spot on.

-Drac

Remember to go to that link I provided in my last post (the word "here" should be blue, indicating that it's a link) to get the squadron and wing # information. Also, the format for the squadron and wing should be:
S: # "Name"/W: # "Name"

Also remove the repeats in the TF & Flt sections and add italics to "Atrus" (put a space between mSSD and Atrus. mSSD is the ship type, while Atrus is the name.)

You haven't yet been officially assigned a position within our training squadron, but the one you have there right now works just fine.

Don't worry if you have trouble with it- ID lines are difficult to learn for everyone.

-Drac

Sorry about the lapse, bnm.

We still need some more on the first section, the physical description. You've still only got one line where you need three or four. What sort of clothes does he wear? Does he have a trademark facial expression? Those sorts of things.

As for your position, that's not an important thing during training. When you finish with the bio assignment we'll move you on to the training squadron. There you'll make a story post and we'll grade to see what you need to work on, if anything. You'll be talking to me mostly during that time, regardless of which slot we put you in.

Once you graduate and join a combat squadron, your position becomes more important. A-1 is the Squadron Commander, and A-2 thru A-4 are under him in Alpha Flight. B-1 is the Executive Officer most of the time, or may just be a Flight Leader. B-2 thru B-4 are under him in Beta Flight. Γ-1 is a Flight Leader, or sometimes is the Executive Officer. Γ-2 thru Γ-4 are under him in Gamma Flight. You'll be told where you are when you're assigned to the squadron.

-Drac