Reporting as ordered, Sir.

Thanks for all of your help and guidance.

Here's my Character Bio and Wiki page for review.

http://www.vastempire.com/wiki/index.php?title=Carpet

-Carpet-

Greetings,
              You know the hardest thing about this assignment was cutting my post down to try and meet 250 words. I'm afraid i went slightly over, 357 to be exact.

Here it goes.

Adaha Tatham blinked away his blurred vision as temporary blindness struck him, the explosion had come from nowhere, and flying blind in an asteroid field was not a good idea. A few seconds later enough vision had returned to allow him to give his sensors a quick scan, sure enough a glowing red dot was closing in on his TIE Interceptor. Instinctively Adaha pulled back hard on the yoke forcing his TIE into a tight loop to face his aggressor. Adaha had completed the manoeuvre and could just make out the ghostly silhouette of a Z-95 Headhunter bearing down on him through his viewport.
“Damn Pirates!” He murmured.

Adaha had no time to react as the first volley of laser cannon fire came burning towards him. He wrenched the controls of his ship violently into a barrel roll as the laser fire ripped through the area of space he just occupied. Squeezing the fire control, the brilliant green glow of his own laser fire filled his cockpit as his rushed attack shot wide of his target. The Z-95 banked hard, ducking behind an asteroid, no doubt trying to hide his next move as Adaha closed in for the kill. But his attacker wasn’t where he had anticipated. Roaring in from his portside the Headhunter unleashed another volley of deadly laser fire. He didn’t have time to react as his Starfighter violently shook and some of his in flight displays shattered.

“That was too close!” Adaha growled between clenched teeth. The sweat was building on his forehead, he switched over to Concussion Missiles. This had to end, and now. The stars turned to streaks as he pulled hard to port, pulling in just behind the Headhunter as it shot past him. A tight grin of satisfaction on his face Adaha hit the weapon release stud and the glow of a speeding Missile came into view, impacting squarely on the Z-95’s hull, followed by the glaring explosion of fire and hot gasses being expelled by the wrecked ship. The starscape outside his view port, and internal instruments suddenly went blank. And with that, his first combat simulation was over.

Sorry about that, the bad formatting was actually due to windows copying from word and pasting into this text box all wrong. And then my fault for neglecting to correct it. But thanks for the advice none the less.
I have editied the original post above to a more suitable format. I just hope i have the paragraphs with the speech correct.

Passed. Also, can you put a space between paragraphs. It'd make reading it easier. Take the AE and send it to StOrMz

Welcome to Nazgul, Carpet. Just to make sure you know where to go, here's the link to our heaquarters topic: http://comnet.imperialnetwork.com/topic/10428/page/48/

-Drac