Hello,I am new to the game,and the naval acadamy,and would just like to say hi,and if anyone has any advice/questions for me,i'll do what i can

Welcome to the Vast Empire.

Name:Twinblades

Age:18

Height:6'3

weight:225

Skin color:olive

hair color:dark brown

Home planet:Tatooine

Personal Biography:I was born into a good family,with my mother,my father,and me.My father was serving in the Imperial Navy at the time,and my mother stayed home to look after me.
    At age 3,during my father's final term in service,he was killed in battle.Which left only my mother to look after me,she had to get a job and hire someone to watch over me.I don't remember much of that time,just that my baby-sitter was very young.
      One day while my mother was at work,I was kidnapped by rodian thugs.They had hated my father.When they found out he had died,they decided to get revenge for all of the trouble he'd caused,so,I was off with them,and worked as a slave until age 8.
    Then they discovered that I had natural abilities for Pod Racing.
They then decided to sell me to a Wookie Pod Racing Clan on Kashyk.There I had to learn to speak their language before I was to start racing.But I was a quick learner.I soon started racing until age 16.
    I ran away,stashed in a tie fighter.But unfortunately,he wasn't headed for battle,he was headed to fight!He didn't last long,however,because he had hit his head on the controll after taking a hit.I didn't know what to do,I had to take the controls,I had no actually fighter experience,but I had studied the controlls, I ended up making it to safety on a large imperial base,where I have been living up to now.

Name:Twinblades

Species:Human

Age:18

Height:6'3

weight:225

Skin color:olive

hair color:dark brown

Home planet:Tatooine

Personal Biography:I was born into a good family, with my mother, my father,and me. My father was serving in the Imperial Navy at the time, and my mother stayed home to look after me.
    At age 3, during my father's final term in service, he was killed in battle. Which left only my mother to look after me, she had to get a job and hire someone to watch over me. I don't remember much of that time, just that my baby-sitter was very young.
      One day while my mother was at work, I was kidnapped by rodian thugs. They had hated my father. When they found out he had died, they decided to get revenge for all of the trouble he'd caused, so, I was off with them, and worked as a slave until age 8.
    Then they discovered that I had natural abilities for Pod Racing.
They then decided to sell me to a Wookie Pod Racing Clan on Kashyk. There I had to learn to speak their language before I was to start racing. But I was a quick learner. I soon started racing until age 16.
    I ran away, stashed in a tie fighter. But unfortunately, he wasn't headed for another planet, he was headed to fight! He didn't last long, however, because he had hit his head on the controll after taking a hit. I didn't know what to do, I had to take the controls, I had no actually fighter experience, but I had studied the controlls, I ended up making it to safety on a large imperial base, where I have been living up to now.

Ok, you pass, just a warning though, as you will learn in the future sections of Flight School, there really isn't all that much space in a TIE fighter to stow away in. However if you changed it to something along the lines of him being a recon pilot, who pressed you into service once he found you stowed away, and you were on a long range recon fighter, it would work better. I look forward to reading your chapter two assignment Crewman. And again, good work.

You need to go on to chapter II of flight School, which can be found here:
http://www.vastempire.com/wiki/index.php?title=Flight_School_(FS)

click on the "Pilot Procedure" link

It's not bad Twin, however, a small amount of added detail would help in giving us the perception of how these maneuvers are performed.

Remember, the more detail you write about, not only will it enhance your writing abilities, but it will give your audience a better view of what you are talking about. That leads to a better overall story and satisfaction.

Much better

On to chapter III

mock report:I have been spending most of my time this week working with new recruits, and guiding them through the process.


ID:NTO/Twinblades/1st Imperial Fleet

TRN/Twinblades/first imperial fleet.


mock report:I have been spending most of my time this week working with new recruits, and guiding them through the process.
  Also, I have a problem with the comnet, a couple of Trainies are horsing around. I think they should be booted.