It feels damn good to be here!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Hello there, Crewman.

Allow me to introduce myself, I am Blue-Leader, I will be your trainer whilst you are here at the academy. We will be helping you throughBasic Training, commonly called Flight School, FS, BT, or the Academy. Flight School is composed into three chapters, Chapter One: Character Development, Chapter Two: Pilot Procedure, Chapter Three: The Squadron, and last but not least, the Aviator's Exam. Once you have finished and been passed on these Chapters we will place you into one of the active squadrons.

Lets start with the basics - Chapter One. You need to make a biography for your character (Good examples are Jegora Fal's and Ibram Tyrol's Biographies.) Once you have finished your biography you may post it on this topic. But remember - your biography is only a rough sketch of your character and should be expanded when given the time. If you have any questions, catch any member of the staff around IRC or send them a PM (Personal Message).

Now, if you have any questions, or if you want to meet any of our other members you can hop onto IRC (Internet Relay Chat), or you may send any member of the staff a PM (Personal Message). There are many other communications methods for reaching the staff in that page as well. Once you have finished Basic Training, you shall be placed into one of the active squadrons.

Catch you around sometime, Crewman.

Ok, this is a good start to your Bio, but I need more information. A couple of things I'd like you to expand on a little bit.

As far as the physical description, what you have is ok, but I'd like a bit more, think like you are me, and I'm looking at your character, What am I going to see? Do you have any identifying marks which would set you apart, such as some part of your face or arms that are scarred or disfigured in some way due to an accident, or have been earned in combat. Also I need you to both expand more on your character's history. You need to include some information about how you came to the VE, what drew you here, and also some background about what you did before you joined the VE, while the assasinations part is ok, I need you to tone it back a bit. At 19 it is excessive to say that your character has assasinated 35 people. If you want to make your character older, say 25, and decreased the number of assasinations (say 10 or 15) it would be better. Also, if you are such a great assasin, what is your weapon of choice, that is another important element of your character.

I would recommend revising that a bit, if you aren't going for a long history, use my Bio on Wiki as an example http://www.vastempire.com/wiki/index.php?title=Slasher it isn't too long, but it shows the sort of stuff that is being looked for.

Hope to see your revision soon Crewman,

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I'm afraid that you will need to expand this biography adding vitals and such to it for me to pass it.