Greetings Failue,
I am Stormz, an operator of the Vast Empire Naval Academy. I along with Jegora Fal (the Training Officer), C-PX2, Ibram Tyrol, and Blue-Leader will guide you through Basic Training.
I see you have began work on a Bio for your character. I must commend you on your diligence for looking ahead. The Bio you have created is a good start. I would like to point you to
Flight School for help on editting it.
There are only minor thing that need editing, such as few spelling mistakes. Also, If you could add a few more physical attributes to your Bio (like Height, Weight, and Gender) it will give us a better picture of what your person looks like.
The last thing, Your history and Emotional descriptions are very short. Perhaps you could add some details to them so that the members here can get a sense of where your character has come from. You said Falo's parents died at age four, and that he was forced to survive on his own for three years. Adding details such as: where he wnet when the Empire picked him up and what trials were set before him during his childhood can add a lot too Falo.
Like I said, Your bio is a good start, now let's fine tune it just a little bit. Do that and you will be on your way to chapter two of FS.
If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to leave them here. One of the Staff members will be along shortly to help you with anything troubling you.
On behalf of the VENA, I would like to welcome you.
Operator Stormz
Imperial Navy-
Kaph Squadron (The Captains Own)XO and FL/PO1 StOrMz/Kaph 2-1/Wing 1/mSSD Atrus/1 Fleet/VEN/VE (=A=)(=^SA^=) [IG] [BI] 
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Engineering CorpsStOrMz/
WS StOrMz/Lotaith/
VET/VE
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Pizza ClubStOrMz/
DB StOrMz/Bicycle/
VEPC/VE
Pizza Delivery Boy
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[20:48] * Verkur screams
[20:48] why are you creaming?
[20:48] ewwwwwwww
[20:48] screaming*
